Sep 7, 2009
I haven't updated Booksie for some time. Just caught up with Mail Order Bride and Nymph Dreams. I have had serious problems posting to Booksie, with the site being incredibly slow and unresponsive..

Jul 6, 2009
Just started a new story called "Nymph Dreams". Enjoy!

May 14, 2009
Finally got back into War Brothers. 2 new chapters.. :-)

Apr 5, 2009
Mail-Order Bride is going well. I still haven't written more on War Brothers... that is still brewing in my head. When I am ready, I will write more. Thanks for asking BTW

Feb 25, 2009
I have put War Brothers on hold temporarily, while I work on Mail Order Bride. Started posting it tonight. Let me know what you think.

Feb 10, 2009
War World Map I have been playing with the idea of having a map of War World. My mapping skills are a little... rudimentary to say the least. Here is a first attempt. For those of you wondering, the reason the base is on an island is to seperate the training from the "real world" envirionment of the main continent. If anyone wants to make a stab at doing something better, let me know and I will send you the original .psd file. http://warbrothersnovel.blogspot.com/2009/01/blog-war-world-map.html

Feb 10, 2009
Explanations Compulsive re-readers of my story who possess an eagle eye would have noticed that S'Alor is now described as a Smilodean NOT a Simian. I NEVER intended to suggest that he had any monkey features... :-) Some words and phrases that have been queried: Cadre - Training team (pronounced card-ra) Sand-Box - Normally Iraq (aka Down-range) Paras - In this case "The Parachute Regiment" P-Course - more properly P-Week, the parachute selection and training course in the British Army RIFd - Reduction in Force (made a verb). i.e. made redundant/fired IED - improvised explosive device BoonDock

Jan 7, 2009
Back from Holiday. I will post a new chapter in the next day or two!

Dec 16, 2008
Holiday! I'm off tomorrow on holiday. I will return on the 6th Jan. I hope to do a lot of writing while I am away, but I am not sure whether I will be able to post much. We are going to be pretty muchin the bush and on the beach out of contact for most of the time. If there is 3G/GPRS coverage, then I will see what I can do. Enjoy what there is of the story so far, and don't forget to comment!

Dec 15, 2008
Keep on Trucking Well, It seems to be going pretty well. I still get the odd negative comment about the length of my chapters, but I am just pointing people to my blog post about that and that seems to help. I have had some really, really encouraging and helpful comments from a few people which have been brilliant to get. Constructive criticism, encouragement, ideas for improvements and more. I am overwhelmed at this support and appreciate it incredibly! I think that with Chapter 8 & 9, we are finally starting to get into the sort of detail that people have been asking for, although I am still finding it incredibly difficult to avoid explaining what I want to convey without long monologues. I hope that the character development and plot can/will be balanced by the explanations. It is a really difficult balance. I would appreciate comments on how effective(or otherwise) I have been at this. ATB BoonDock BTW.. also posting to a blog at http://warbrothersnovel.blogspot.com/

Dec 9, 2008
Writing Method mmm Well. the comments have slowed down. One comment I have received though from various people is that the chapters are too short. I figured I should explain: 1. I think the chapters are more like long paragraphs in that they hold a partcular "scene" or series of related paragraphs and that the length fits this rather than some arbitraily imposed size 2. I trend to write in chunks of this size as time and opportunity allows, and I prefer to post once I have written a chunk. 3. I am writing primarily on my cell phone. I have a Samsung i850 with Windows Mobile on it, and I use pocket word to write when I am taking a smoke break. When I am sitting behind my office computer or with my laptop, I feel compelled to actually "work", whereas when I am sitting out side with my phone, I don't feel nearly as guilty. I also make use of the small gaps of opportunity that crop up during the day such as waiting for my daughters when I pick them up from school, waiting for others to arrive for a business meeting, when I am on the toilet or lying in bed before going to sleep or in an airplane etc. Little bits at a time, inbetween other things. This is also why my first posts of chapters can be a little hairy. I am trying to ensure that first posts are a little better though as I realise that if I get it wrong and that is the first exposure that someone has to my story, they could stop reading right there. On another topic, I have had one comment pointing out an inconsistency in that no metal is allowed through the gateway, so Cy and co have to remove watches etc.. but "What about the metal eyelets in their shoes, zippers in their pants, snaps on their pants, belt buckles. what if any of them had any metal plates or screws in them etc." Has this bugged anyone else? Also, did anyone pick up on the "Iron" phobia/Sidhe thing before Cy got to War World? Hope you are still enjoying the story...

Dec 3, 2008
Comments and Colloquisms Well, I have gotten quite a few comments on the story so far. Thank you very much to all of you who have commented, and especially to those of you who have sent suggestions for corrections. You will notice that I have applied your corrections in most cases. Generally the comments have been very positive, which is great. I have had some questions however. 1. I know about the wife thing.. I will fix that in the next chapter (4) I realised too late that I hadn't explained it.. and will use it for a little "character development".. :-) 2. It should be obvious in the story that I am South African, so my language usage will be what I am accustomed to. For example, it is correct usage for us to say 10H00 and not 1000 hours (which to my eye looks like one thousand hours, not ten am) 3. A Bar-B-Que is a pale imitation of a braai. Just so you know !! ;-) Actually, from my experience the largest difference between the American and South African versions is that the Americans seem to cook on the flames while us South Africans like to cook over the coals. Other than that I am not sure.. 4. A "moffie" is a homosexual/gay. Google Greefwald and SADF and you will find the TRC (truth and reconciliation) report on this. I would suggest though that it be read with a salt cellar in one hand. Moffie can also be used to describe someone who is slightly effeminate without actually being homosexual/gay. Let me know if you spot other things that puzzle you or that needs correcting. I will happily explain anything that is unclear. I know that SOL has a large percentage of readers from North America who are generally less aware of practices in other countries than those of us outside the USA are of American ones.. Please keep the comments coming. All are appreciated.

Dec 3, 2008
Chapter 3 and Greefswald Well.. it seems to be going ok. I am still on the easy stuff though :-) For those interested in Greefswald, it is a real place with a really interesing history. Take a look at Mapungubwe National Park and World Heritage Site and/or Google it. Next chapter should be a little more interesting. As usual, all comments and criticims are welcome!

Dec 3, 2008
It's a start... Well.. I have started. I posted the first chapter of War Brothers and got a fairly decent reception. Comments helped pointing out some errors and making some suggestions.. so I have reposted it with those changes. Second chapter is now also up. I have a good idea of what I want to say, but I am a little nervous about the execution. I hope to create the universe that I have in my head, but I am finding that it is extremely difficult to do so and I am gaining a lot of respect for authors who manage to churn out hundreds and thousands of words in a story without seeming to even generating a drop of sweat... All comments are welcome. The scores don't bug me as long as people are reading the story and I get feedback on what people think.. so.. onward and upward..

Sep 20, 2008
I am really excited that people are reading my stuff... and commenting on it. It's great to know that other people are getting to see it. Thanks to those who have commented!

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