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This is a story I found in my year 8 homework. It's a lot more realistic than my story Sock.

Carmen is a very proud surfer girl. Will her pride kill her?

~~Sorry! I don't know what to write...


Submitted:May 26, 2010    Reads: 280    Comments: 5    Likes: 3   


Carmen was sitting with Ken at school.
"Aargh! I am so tired I need a way to relax!"
Carmen was tired from attending classes all day.
"I bet you are too tired to surf today." Ken sounded determined. Carmen was too sore to surf but she had to prove Ken wrong. She just had to.
"I can surf anytime. In fact, I find surfing relaxing!" She was slightly angry.
That afternoon, Carmen and Ken walked down to Rainbow Beach. The waves were extremely strong. Carmen was horrified.
Carmen nervously rode her board out to sea. She paddled hard. She was paddling har and fast but the wave was gaining on her...
"Aaahh!" She yelled as she woke. It was completely dark.
"What? What happened?" Ken's voice was close to her ear.
"Nothing... It was just a nightmare... KEN! WHAT ARE YOU DOING IN MY ROOM?!?!?"
Carmen was really panicking.
Ken turned on the lights and Carmen realised that she wasn't in her room. "WHERE AM I?!?!?"
Ken was sitting beside her telling her what had happened. He told her that she was not surfing skilfully enough on the wild waves so she was hit by a wave. He told her that she was in a hospital and that she had been in a coma for two days.
"ARE YOU SAYING THAT I'M A BAD SURFER?!?!" Carmen was furious.
Ken shrugged his shoulders. "...Maybe..."




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