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hiya, this is what i have written so far. can you tell me if i should carry on or stop writing altogher. Also can you tell me what i can improve. thanks x


Submitted:May 21, 2011    Reads: 55    Comments: 4    Likes: 1   


The light poured from the sky. The only two big clouds looked, well looked incredible. It was if the sky was showing a picture in slow motion. If you looked closely the clouds looked like hands barely holding each other. They were letting go slowly, slowly. The redness of the sunset mirrored itself on to the sea. It was hot and cold at the same time for her. Everything was confusing right now. The past, the present and possibly her future. She got up slowly. The tide was coming in. She walked along the beach. The salty sea licking her feet. She walked away slowly.




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