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Optimistic Pessimist

Poem By: November
Editorial and Opinion


I wanted to play with the idea of having both hope and no hope when waking up in the morning.

On one hand the day might be the best of your life. On the other hand it might be your worst. It might just be average, who knows.

I think the last line is the most interesting, playing with the idea of an optimistic pessimist. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jan 31, 2008    Reads: 138    Comments: 7    Likes: 1   


Optimistic Pessimist

Backwards blackbirds and screeching songbirds
greet your waking ears.
Accusing sunlight blinds your sight
and inspires your inner fears.

You're all at sea and
your friend ships are sinking,
there are holes in the sails
and your confidence shrinking,

you can't think why you would wake up
without a reason to sing,
but why don't you just wait and see?
Who knows what today might bring?

The best day of your life, perhaps?
I hope it doesn't go too fast.
But if you're really, really lucky,
it might just be your last.


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Comments:

Very creative and though provoking. I enjoyed it :)

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much
x

Wow, so twisted and metaphorical...I really like this. Very imaginative! Well done.

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much =D
I like twisted.
x

Hey, that's nifty. I like how it goes back and forth and back and forth. The rhythm and the meaning flow well together. I love the friendship/friend ship metaphor. That was cool. Great job! =)

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot =)
'Nifty' =D
x

ONE NEVER KNOWS WHAT A DAY MAY BRING - true.

Posted: Jan 31, 2008

Author Comment:

but it sure is hard to think it won't be as mundane or as crappy as the last few. Tomorrow I will try so hard to pretend it will be the best day of my life.
x

Positively the most metaphorical poem I've read thus far. It's been a while since last I was on this site, but now that I'm here, I'm glad I came back to see what you've been up to. Keep up the good work.

Posted: Feb 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much =)
x

I like the uncertainty of it, and how it forces you to come to your own conclusion.

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Ooh, double post ...
err, thanks again!
x

I like the uncertainty of it, and how it forces you to come to your own conclusion.

Posted: Feb 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks alot =)
x



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