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Submitted: Aug 10, 2008 Reads: 48 Comments: 5 Likes: 4
Little bird
Fly Away
Little bird
There's no reason to stay
Little bird
This world is not for you
Little bird
Why stay in a place so blue?
The world is a sad place
With anger and hate in every race
Little bird
stay in your tree
where there's happiness and serenity
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hi! v. u r right to protect the bird from the harsh view of a cruel world. but isn't that what makes life worthwhile - to chaff the good from the bad and make one's own choices. isn't risk and adventure more daring than a serene quiet existence. the rhyming is excellent. good work. lol. ;-)
Posted: Aug 10, 2008
Thoughtful poem - ever noticed though how the birds are happy regardless of the world's plight? Simplicity is the key. I like the repetition here, you have avoided getting too prolonged or flowery and that gets your message across better. well done.
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
This was a good poem. It was thoughtful in a way and it got out a clear message. I also agree with bubbly that sometimes you have to take the good with the bad. You can't pretend that this world is all good but very cruel. Great job i liked this poem.:)
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
vampireHunter329:
Well written and expressed. Interesting for it's structure and presentation. Gave it an "I Like It" vote. Good job.
Will read your other postings and append an "I Like It" vote. Without commenting, at times.
Thank you for becoming a fan.
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
Posted: Aug 21, 2008
Aww. That was good. Shame we can't really keep all the little birds safe.
Posted: Sep 14, 2008
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