Hello fellow booksie authors, this is me asking for help from anyone that has read Eradonia. Only after writting three chapters did it strike me that I could have done something better with the story.
My idea was rather than having two people hating each other I was going to have four friends who are seperated to four different locations. Each friend would encounter a different clan and would have a different point of view on how the world should be, this will make some of the friends enemies and other friends will be allies. Charlie and Newman will still be in the story, the other two caracters will be girls. Just so non of you get the silly idea that I am sexist or that the main caracters are homosexual. Not that there is anything wrong with them. Well, I appreciate the input.