Hello :) 

I am currently on a degree programme, studying for BA hons: English Language, Literature and creative writing. I am in my third year. I have chosen to do a writing portfolio as part of my final project. I have composed a short story of around 8,000 words and I am looking to recieve as much feedback as possible in order to complete an accompanying commentary. Any feedback i recieve maybe quoted within this commentary.

I am looking for any improvements/critisims of my work, general thoughts feelings, age group you feel would be approriate and would you buy this book? 

Any comments will be appreicated :) thank you!