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Poem By: Brown Skin
Erotica

Tags: storms, erotic, erotica, love, passion, night

The power of thunderstorms View table of contents...

Submitted: Jan 23, 2008 Reads: 241 Comments: 25 Likes: 11

Late night

The music of the thunderstorm

Baits the mood

Rain making love against my window

Our lips touch

Hands touch

Lightning kisses the sky

We stare with bedroom eyes

Beautiful

Incredible

You are my galaxy

And I want to explore

The depths of your love

Lips

Tongue

Thunder

Thunder...moan...hands touring each other

Lightning capturing this moment

Rain getting heavier

Breathing getting heavier

Thunder getting louder

Moans getting louder

The streets are flooding

Drenched in the rain

My raincoat helps to protect me

More thunder

More Lightning

More moaning

More rain

The streets are flooded

Lips touch easily

Hands caressing

The rain is calming

Light thunder

Lightning kisses the sky

I stare into your eyes

Beautiful

Incredible

I love thunderstorms....

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Comments:

snowbelle

mmmmmmmmmm, very erotic. i loved it.
be well
snow

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you liked it! I wrote it last night...as you can see, something was on my mind! Thanks for your comment!

Author Comment:

Lol Alot said in so little! Thanks for commenting!

cris x

um. yeah. amazing. whoever you write about sure is a lucky gal (:

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I consider myself the lucky one! I appreciate your comment!

Eric JHRB Egan

Really good and expertly composed. A great read.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! Expertly composed!? I'm glad you think of it so highly! Thank you for your wonderful comment!

Lacey Cummings

Whew! My hands are sweaty after reading that one. Great job as always.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol Thank you for commenting! I really appreciate it!

Very nicely done. Well chosen words with wonderful imagery, comparing the thunderstorm to lovemaking. This is more like a crossover from erotica to mainstream which is more appealing to me personally. Happy writing.....Jerry

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad that it was something that it was appealing to you! Coming from you, it's a big deal because you are such an awesome writer! Thanks for your great comment!

Wordclay

Thanks for giving us the heads up, and good job on the poem. You almost combine the traditional pastoral theme and sublime the Romantics used a great deal. If you haven't already, we recommend submitting a poem to the Wordclay contest. Don't worry, it's free. Keep up the good work no matter what you decide. The Wordclay team

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! And I did submit a few poems for the contest. Thanks again!

poewhit

The one's with the loud thunder - GOD TALKING.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Not sure what you mean, but I'm glad you commented!

Myrenda

Wow that's really cool. I like it.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I'm glad you like it!

Itsuwari

Love it, the first four lines were perfect. Very well done. Keep writing.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I'm glad that you like this piece!

EdwardJBradleySr

Brown Skin:

Most effectively expressed and presented. Well written. Liked the parallel drawn between a thunderstorm and love-making. Separate though similar forces of nature. Both physical. One Emotional and Human. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Line #3: "Baited" or "Bated"? Never really know which one to use. In this case, it seems, either would fit. Always thought, "Baited" was the only way. Interesting thought. To contemplate.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jan 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol Yea I struggled with which "baited" to use, but I think this one fits pretty well! But I'm glad you "Like It!" And yes, I tried to make that picture of love-making being as a thunderstorm. Two powerful forces. Thanks for commenting!

PodOne

I have always loved thunderstorms. I'll get up at night to sit on my veranda to watch them.

Next time I'll see that I have a partner...
... maybe even my husband :-)

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol Your husband I hope!!! But I've always been in love with thunderstorms and thought it would make for a great write to mix it with love-making! Something that I felt was different from how I usually write! but I'm glad you enjoyed it!

rickyengland

The build, the climax, the calm after the 'storm'
A good analogy!!
Worth my rate.
Ricky.

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for commenting! I'm glad you rated and enjoyed it!

Irwin
(not registered user)

Good work. I look forward to more.

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much!I appreciate it!

lavenderrosepetals

i really liked this. Great write. Keep on writing. Ashhy

Posted: Jan 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you.

QUICHE

oh my goodness I am speechless. this truly took my breath away. I loved it!!!!

Posted: Jan 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I'm glad u liked it!!

JoKa

I love the way you described a condom as the "raincoat"...
it's just a cool example of how well you can paint a scene without being blunt...

JoKa
Evelyn

Posted: Jan 25, 2008