Well, I know what this means but I wonder if anyone else will get it. Rather erotic for poem. :)
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Submitted: May 17, 2008
Reads: 405
Comments: 16
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My body fell into her hands
Allowing her to mould me
A willing lover
I was ready to roll over
Ready to give in
And there they stood in anticipation
Beside myself with desire
And therethe prolonged moment
Only breathing a wet breath
Against the cool air
Licking the liquor and nothing more
She left me longing
She tickled my temptation
A willing lover
In defiant desperation
I dove inside myself
While she watched
Delighted that her plan had worked
She lowered herself and kissed me
As I closed my eyes beneath her in complete bliss
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Comments:
Whoa, you weren't joking when you gave me that warning!!!!
Think I may have to re-read this again.....and again....and again....
Fantastic writing, once again, blood temperature raising yet so subtle. BRILLIANT! :-D
Posted: May 17, 2008
You've made my heart pound.
This is my fav of ALL your writing.
You've even provoked me to sign off with a word i use sparingly....
Adoringly,
Peach
Posted: May 17, 2008
Oh, this reminded me:
Hooray hooray its the middle of May...outdoor screwing starts today!
I felt like I was watching 2 lovers in a forest with branches rubbing into their skin for some reason when I read this. The heat of the ecstasy erases the physical pain of the heavy woodwork they're hiding in. I don't know...this is really really thought provoking and I just love it.
Posted: May 17, 2008
I have to agree with the others this is very erotic and powerful poem. But also showsraw emotions. Excellent job.
Posted: May 17, 2008
Beautiful poem KB, I love your style of writting, you keep me captivated each time. I absolutely LOVED it! Well done!
Steph(:
Posted: May 18, 2008
First of all I love it when someone says they have a meaning behind the poem and can anyone guess. Humm..it sets up a challenge before you even start to read. Now I just want to say that it’s beautifully written. Your style of writing poetry is very classy, sensual and beautiful to read. The words just seem to melt on the tongue! You capture some wonderful images of emotion in a tantalising state of suspense. The longing and desire are captured in an almost drunken frenzy of anticipation, though there is some element of control until the line “I dove inside myself”. Of course this speaks of masturbation but im not sure of the context its in. It could easily be a film she’s watching or is it more real. You say they are stood there ion anticipation, and of course someone is teasing this person into a state of desire, and watching them. Its beautifully written and there’s just enough temptation to leave the reader, though in bliss, in two minds about the exact images. By the way I just totally love the last line, “As I closed my eyes beneath her in complete bliss”..beautiful..
I wanted to view some erotic poetry because peachy as suggested I write a part 2 to my poem What Shall We Do At The Weekend, with an erotic theme, and I wanted some ideas on content. it seems that the erotic poems are less graphic than the erotic stories. But of course they need to be poetic too. Humm..thanks for giving me inspiration. Again, I love this poem!!
Posted: May 20, 2008
I keep following Matt everywhere I go tonight and everything I have to say seems so lame in comparison. So, I'll just keep it simple and say that I really liked this one and think you have loads of talent.
Posted: May 27, 2008
Yes, it is erotic for a poem! , i like it!
Posted: May 28, 2008
The adulation of alliteration . . . makes me feel like a voyeur here. A happy voyeur, but a voyeur none the less :).
Posted: May 29, 2008
Relax buddy...this is awesome....as i have told u....write fearlessly and with confidence.....then nothing can go wrong....
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
You have two perspectives going here at the same time - and it feels like they're about to get down to the nastiest raunchiest time. Hotter than hot and it's only just starting. Are they doing it in front of a mirror?
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
i felt i was there watching , such was the power of the poem . i must be kinky too , i'd better buy some boots.
terry
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
Great poem. You certainly captured the mood...!
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
Kinkyboots:
Don't normally comment on "erotica" as I don't write it. Unless "Katie Anne" and "Emma Lee" qualify. Gave it an "I Like It" vote. Most enjoyable.
Here is my interpretation: The narrator is having an "out of body" experience while entertaining a succubus and, at the same time, enjoying the sexual passion of doing so. As though it was all well grounded in her physical sexuality and experience of what is being described. Though her mind and emotions are the most active participants. Seemingly.
Imagery seems overlayed (no pun intended) as someone is both set-apart or a distant observer as well as a most passionate participant enjoying a most intimate and passionate closeness. All at the same time.
Works well. Taking the experience to a much newer, more complex and higher level.
Hope I haven't over-analyzed.
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
Grrrr.
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
I had to read it again. Mental masturbation. I daren't read it thrice. Might get physical. I LIKE IT.
I love the phrase: "A willing lover" -- very deep, that.
craaig
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
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