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A passionate poem for the one woman that has my heart. View table of contents...
Submitted: Sep 1, 2008 Reads: 189 Comments: 4 Likes: 3
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Michael, I feel the passion and emotion. Rhymes well and reaches it's climax nicely with a softer ending (as one would expect in true love) For me I think it would work better if you either stuck to calling your lover "you" - you bounce back to using "she" at times and this detracts from the personal feel. (in my view)
Posted: Sep 1, 2008
I felt so passion and love when I read it. But you could enlarge the picture yuo added.
Posted: Sep 2, 2008
i could feel the passion, lust and love in this poem... nice rhyming overall its a well done poem. I love it.
Posted: Sep 4, 2008
This is a beautiful poem. It expresses true love between two people, the way God intened. Keep up the good work.
Posted: Sep 4, 2008
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