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The Fear Of Being Found

Novel By: Camisado92
Fantasy


Welcome to Lacyrmosa, the highest kingdom is all of Fantasya. This is the place where royalty reigns all and people are forbidden to leave. Could there be more to this palace then the royals are letting on? And what are those mysterious creatures in the dark forest beyond? View table of contents...

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Submitted: Feb 4, 2008    Reads: 218    Comments: 9    Likes: 5   


There are so many things I could tell you all about Lacrymosa. All the secrets, deviants, and traitors. There are too many to tell all in a few sentences and paragraphs. Too many things. Yet still, I do not know all that goes on.

 

            You see, I am Guinevere, the youngest princess of two. However, you may call me Gwen for short. My sister, Emeline, or Emma, and I live in Fantasya. Or more appropriately, Lacrymosa. No one is aloud to leave the kingdom of Lacrymosa for fear of what lays beyond. There are trees and forests, and bushes and dark skies surrounding us. There are stories of the creatures beyond the forests but being princesses, we cannot learn about them. It’s forbidden. The sorcerers and sorceresses tell us they are harmful and we have a pact with them. We do not enter their land, they do not enter ours. However, I do wish to meet them. I long to know what they are. If they are what they tell us, why do they exist here if Fantasya? Fantasya is a peaceful place, my father tells us.  Why?

 

            Our story begins on a gloomy day. Usually these would be the days I would beg Father and Mother to let me outside to dance in the rain. Today was not going to be one of those days.

           

            I sat at my vanity brushing out my long black hair and sighing at my reflection. My eyes were a dark shade of brown; they almost looked black except in the sunlight.  My thick black lashes surrounded them. My skin was white as the snow. My lips were dark red like a dying rose. I sighed at how different I looked from my sister who was full of color and happiness. Her skin was always glowing and her cheeks were always rosy. Her blue eyes were always lit up and her full pink lips were always smiling. Her long blonde hair was the envy of every lady in the palace walls. I was so different. I looked down at my white gown I was wearing and the long, lacy train. The top of the gown came just below my neck, where a gold locket hung. The gown was sleeveless and matched my skin complexion marvelously. The sorcerers always said I looked like the creatures.  I must belong to them.

 

            “Quick, Miss Guinevere, you mother needs you by her side!” My lady in waiting said in a rushed whisper, knocking me out of my thoughts. I stood up and hurried to my parents’ room immediately. My white-heeled shoes clicked on the tile floor and I reached the door. My mother lay in her bed, looking tired and worn out. I knelt beside her as my father and my sister where on the other side of the bed. I grabbed a hold of her hand. It was ice cold.

 

            “Gwen, is that you?” She whispered, her voice was raspy.

 

            “Yes, Mother. You’ll be alright, this is just a bad day like last week.” I shook my head. This couldn’t be happening.

 

            “Gwen, listen to me. Hadrian said this was my final day. It’s all right. I’m ready-”

 

            “Mother! Don’t talk like that! You’ll be fine!”

 

            “Gwen!” She tightened her grip on my hand.  I bit my lip and felt a few tears drop down my face. “Gwen, please do this for me. Do what we all expect you do. Venture into the forest. Figure out the problem. No one knows about the creatures in Lacrymosa yet but us. Do it alone. I know you can. This is what you were meant to do.”

 

            “Mother, I will. Please don’t leave me.” I cried pressing my cheek against the back of her hand. My long black nails dug little moon shapes in her pale hand. I finally looked like my mother. Pale and dying. I felt the tears come faster.

And then her hand went limp.

 

            Emma and Father came closer to me. She was my everything. Mother was always there for me. Now, she was gone. I knew I only had a few seconds before the fairies came out from the stonewalls. I didn’t want to let go.

                       

            “NO! MOTHER YOU’LL BE ALL RIGHT! DON’T LEAVE ME!” Emma eventually pried me off the bed and the pink, blue, yellow, and orange glows appeared from the walls. They all started to sing in their sweet voices and sprinkle the glitter around her body. Her body, turned into flames licking the sheets and the ash settled on the linens. Emma held me tightly as I screamed and struggled against her arms. Finally I pushed her away and ran to my room.

 


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Comments:

Very interesting so far. Leaving us wondering as well what is beyond in the forest. I want to know. Keep me posted.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Feb 4, 2008

Author Comment:

FIRST COMMENT!!!! Yay!!!! LOL. I will most definatley keep you posted :D.

OMG.
CONTINUE.
NOW!
=)
- I envy your skill in creating a likeable plot =)

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:

ahaha. You alllways make me laugh. LOL. I'm working on the next chapter RIGHT NOW!!! It prolly won't get posted till tomorrow but you never know. PS lemme know (by email) if you wanna be in this story :D


Cheers!!! Dankeshcon for the comment!!!!



PS your plot skills pwn mine ANY DAY!!!!!! :D

Nany
(not registered user)

very interesting, has enough in the begining to keep me wondering what is it that lives in the forest. I like the way the Mother goes with the fairies. cant wait for the next chapter

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you are very intrigued by the forest! I'm working on suspense for that secret! Yeah, I got the idea of the fairies from the movie Finding Neverland. Dankeshcon for the comment!!!

ooooooooooooooooooo i wanna know what happens. Tell me! Tell me! Tell me!!!
lol
awesome beginning chick. There were a few spelling mistakes here and there, but who doesn't have them, right? Keep me posted!!! Well Done!

Posted: Feb 5, 2008

Author Comment:

:D i am so glad everone is interested in this!!! lol thanks for the spelling mistakes i will eventually get around to fixing them!!! Dankeshcon!

aww shit im addicted update soon :p

Keep Writing

Posted: Feb 12, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL I'm going to try to get the next chapter posted tonight

it's good but it reminds me a lot of the land of elyon series by patrick carmen.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

hmmm. Never read it. Thanks for the comment.

very good i like it already

Posted: Mar 4, 2008

Author Comment:

im glad! Thanks for the comment

I liked it! on to read more!
a few errors, but stilll awesome!!!
and everyone has errors once in a while..lmao. I know I do ~rolls eyes~
=)
~mand

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

awe shoot....thanks! i'll fix those errors soon i promise!!!!!

lol....thanks Mandy!

~Cami

This caught my interest and I will definetly be reading more. I particularly liked the description in the fourth paragraph.

In regards to the first sentence in the last paragraph, it's not a good idea to write in all caps, even when the character is screaming about the loss of her mother.

Good work, I'm looking forward to the rest.

Posted: Jul 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you for reading I will change that. :D



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