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The Darkest Lullaby

Novel By: Canine
Fantasy


Everyone has a power that lays deep in the soul. What if one child outcasted because of his mismatched eyes and fiery hair found that power? The power burried deep in his soul..... the power of music. But its not the deep harmless but inspriing music he would have hoped for, no , this music, his music, hurt the people around him, his music gave him power like that he had never even dreamed of. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Jun 13, 2008    Reads: 388    Comments: 21    Likes: 16   


Prolog

Light seeped through the bough’s of the pine trees that grew in abundance throughout the forest. Creatures went about their daily routines with an innocence that radiated throughout their entire being. Wind whispered silkily across feathery ferns and gently caressed all that stepped into its path.

A man his hair the fiery yellow of the sun sat on a large tree trunk that had been weathered down and smoothed threw out the years. A large black guitar set nestled lovingly in his lap. A phoenix its feathers made of flame swept up from the bottom of the guitar, its mouth open in a silent cry. The man caressed the strings of the guitar as if it was the hair of a lover.
A singleseafoam green eyelooked upon the forest, in its depths sadness swirled. A lock of shaggy blond hair fell across his second eye hiding the pain that would certainly reside in it.
Gently, the man ran the tips of his fingers across the strings of his guitar. A harsh haunting melody radiated from the instrument. The music swirled and danced through the air, the notes twining around the trees and brush.
Everything the music touched shook as if in pain. Loose twigs and leaves fell to the ground with a sound like rain. Trees swayed to the rhythm of the forbidding song.
A single pristine tear glistened at the corner of his eye before sliding down the smooth expanse of his cheek.
Around him leaves darkened and curled. Small insects fell lifeless to the ground, their once strong beating hearts still and cold.
The man continued to play as the forest fell away around him. Tears began to slip down his face in an increasingly steady torrent.

“I’m sorry,” He whispered as everything died.


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Comments:

mousemintz
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o.o
omg!
plzz update soon..
that was just...*wow*

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Author Comment:

got it. Working on the first chapter now.

Wow! o.o

I feel sorry for the poor guy.

'gives him a hug'

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

^-^ that was what you were suppoused to feel. glad i got that across. Thanks for reading and commenting

Wow:), Zain is gorgeous^_^! This prologue was gorgeous! I loved the way you described the guitar and the music... I can't believe though that Zain could play such pretty music... and yet his talent only goes to hurt people... and that emotion is really shown. On with the next chappie:)!

Lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad i got everything across the way i wanted to. I should have to next chapter up by tonight, so look forward.

Oh and wait-- 'prolog' is spelled 'prologue.' Just to tell you:).

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much, i spent like ten minutes trying to figure it out.... looks like i still got it wrong. Thanks again. ^-^

lin
(not registered user)

Wow! It's very interesting. I want to read more.

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, next chapter is up now

I like the way you described everything. I can just picture everything in it's place, the colors, and trees. it makes me want to be there but not at the same time if he plays his music and I get hurt or die. I like how you described the music to because it made feel the emotion he felt, and as if I was there feeling everything die, feeling the pain. I want to read more. are you going to continue with this novel thing? I think it is really good.

Posted: Jun 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Of course i'm going to continue with the novel. ^-^ But i'll be switching on and off from writing on this to writing on She Was Elemental which by the way is the Novel Zain first appears in so you may want to check that out. Thanks for reading. ^-^

i really liked this first chapter, it kind of has a poetic quality to it.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

"WOWZA" Is all i can mutter!!! I am still in shock!!! That was the most detailed and deep Chapter I have ever read!!!!! I loved it. It was so descriptive!!! WOW!!!

+Hecate+

Posted: Jul 23, 2008

Author Comment:

^-^ Thank you that makes me feelreally good.

Oohh, I think this story is going to be interesting. Lol.

You describe everything so well! I love your writing. *sigh*

Posted: Aug 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks ^-^

Beautiful writing! Commas would help a lot though with some of the more complicated sentences. :) I liked it a lot--definately very dark! Thanks for introducing me to this! It's funny because I'm writing a very similar book, two actually. One of them's on here if you ever want to read it--it's called "Ratix". I'll try and keep up with this story if I can! I like it a lot. :D

------LaughingRain, still raining, still laughing.

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

really, i will check it out

Wow. Intense =] I like it ♥♥

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

Very nice start, i think i am gonna like this tale

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

i hope you do

intherain
(not registered user)

incredible!awesome!indescribable!i love it.!!!!!

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, thank you so much

hey, this is good :) I really like your writing style. Very unique, in a good way, it makes you stick out :)

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

That was really gd!
A few grammer mistakes that you need to fix but it WAS GOOD.

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

i know, i hate proof reading after i've written it i sont see any reason to go back and make corrections

Wow. I love it, I love the imagery. Very powerful, good luck with the rest of it!

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

Ok, spelling the very first word wrong, "Prologue", doesn't bode well. Also some other grammar and spelling errors, please re-read it as this can be very distracting. However, I did like the concept and story; I will read more.

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

sorry, i never proofread

Wow, I feel so bad for him... He's in so much pain and is killing things just because he's playing... That's just... Wow.

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, its odd aint it

wow, i really like it! i feels o sorry for the guy, lol. off to the next chapter ^^

Posted: Oct 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, i'm glad you liked it

Ooh, I like, I like. A somber, sweet creepiness. Godd stuff.

Posted: Oct 13, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, thank you

Interesting prologue:) i quite enjoyed the stillness you've put into the story. it would got more better if you deal with the spelling grammar errors. and try putting some commas too, the story would flow nicely that way. just a suggestion, i think overall, you did quite good:)

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, and i know i just can not bring myself to proofread lol.



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