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The Battle For Ikriam

Novel By: FunnyBunny
Fantasy


Desperate to save her late Father's Kingdom from Vappu, Sage the Elf has to do battle with enemies and her own fears. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Sep 5, 2007    Reads: 281    Comments: 11    Likes: 6   


 

CHAPTER 10

 

Rioghnan knocked on Sage's study door. 

 

"Enter" she commanded

 

Rioghnan bowed to show respect for his Princess.  Sage looked up and her heart started beating faster.  She always felt a little lightheaded when the masculine Commander of the Olivier (elf army) came near her.

 

"Rioghnan, what a nice surprise.  May I help you with something" Sage said with more confidence that she felt.

 

"Your Majesty, I have received word that the dark elves are in uproar."

 

"What do you mean? About what?"

 

"We are uncertain, Your Highness. Tsisem did not say who but he as a connection that is living among them.  He did not give any specifics but Tsisem is sure we have a huge problem."

 

Sage got up from behind her desk and walked to the window.  She sighed while looking over the garden.

 

Rioghnan couldn't keep his eyes off her.  She had the most beautiful hair.  Oh, what he wouldn't give to caress her neck and whisper sweet nothings in her ear! He would...

 

"Rioghnan.  Are you listening to me?" Sage calmly asked, a little smile playing on her lips.

 

"I ask your forgiveness, My Princess" he stuttered. "I was just thinking"

 

"You are forgiven, my friend.  Now, contact the Elders and hear what they have to say.  I have something that needs my immediate attention. I doubt the information is correct but follow it up anyway."

 

"As you wish, my Lady" Rioghnan left the room and moved his beautifully sculptured body towards the Elders.

 

Like a teenage girl, Sage stuck her head out the door and stared at the striking commander.  And as Sage's luck would have it, Rioghnan looked back.  All he saw was eyes as big as saucers and a faint cry.

 

Shaking with laughter he walked on while trying to calm his bouncing heart down.

 

"Oh Sage, you idiot!" Sage shouted.  She felt so silly behaving like a little girl.

 

"Now pull youself together!"

 

And with that Sage stormed out of her office towards Saira's room.  Something about her behaviour was bothering Sage.

 

Something is seriously wrong and she is going to find out what it is.


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Comments:

Oh Sage is gonna be furious when she finds out what vappu did to little saira. can't wait till the next piece

Posted: Sep 5, 2007

Author Comment:

I just published Chapter 11 - I hope you like it!

Thanx for the read

OH... I love the love interest and the way you wrote it just maks me go AAWH!

Posted: Sep 6, 2007

Author Comment:

Hehe! Thanks for reading!

YAY, More!!!!
I love it!!
More, more, more!!!!
FORTY STARS!!!
YAY,
I wonder if sage will fall in love with him....
HA cant wait to read more, g2g read next chappie!!!

Posted: Sep 6, 2007

Author Comment:

hehe - thank you for reading - you'll have to wait and see... I'm trying to make chapter 12 very very interessting so it could be a while b4 I publish.

A new side to Sage not shown previously, she has emotions for the commander, or perhaps even loves him. The more I learn about Sage and all your created world, the more intrigued I become. That is an awesome gift and you should be proud you have learnt to harness it and use it well. And about Saira, Knowing the possible fury Sage can succomb to, I can only imagine the fury she shall unleash upon Vappu if she finds out. Of course, maybe Saira will not tell her whom is to blame in fear of Vappu or maybe she still hopes with a child's hope that Vappu will yet still be her mother, I gotta keep on reading.

Posted: Sep 11, 2007

Author Comment:

I wasn't so sure to put in a love intrest for Sage but then the reader wouldn't see her soft side, her womanhood and her yearning for a partner like we all do. Saira is a bit difficult now, I'm stil trying to figure out how to involve her more and of course the whole Vappu situation but I'll publish as soon as possible. Thank you once again

but hey, a love interest is very distracting, and that could be immensly helpful in determining why she isn't noticing whats going on with saira. i have just had this problem with a best friend of mine. you can remember those you love through hradship, work and attention to careers, and just about anythign else; but when love comes to call your eyes are misted to everything. this could also add a demention of guilt and humanity (or elfmanity) to sage, helping the reader to realize no heroine is perfect... making her relatable and potentially complicating the potential relationship.. *squee*
*emby ollie tells self to quit speculating and read on *

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

i needed a hero in this story. obviously a male one who could shake some sense into sage and showing her theres more to life than just ikriam. thanx for read & comment

sliver
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what can i say but i love it. saga is such a good sister. do u have any sisters?

Posted: Mar 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, Sage is a very good and caring sister. I have one sister who is older than me and I love her to bits! She's my favourite person in the world.

hehe. sage has a love interest! this is a VERY intresting side of sage. i really love how you've created this amazing character. she's so real with her personality. she's fiesty, she's brave, she's sweet, AND she has this inner child in her that is seen with the commander. hehe. cute.
five stars!

Posted: Mar 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Alice!

So romantic and funny. You did well with the love interest.

Hmm, I must read on, I have a feeling Sage is about to blow up.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

HaHahaHaH Blow up indeed. thank you

Either a love issue, or someone have put a hex on her.

Posted: Apr 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx for comment Tor.

Huhu... I kept smiling when i read about Sage and Rioghnan's thoughts for each other. Yessss! Sage is bound to get furious after she knows what happened to Saira.

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes I agree. I wish I had someone like Rioghnan...

I think Rioghnan is supposed to be some sort of love interest for Sage but I have to wonder if she'd really care about romance at a time like this.

Her father has just died (yet, for some reason, she doesn't appear to be sad; in fact, she hasn't even mentioned him or a funeral in any chapter since the first), her brother is still missing, her sister is acting weird and withdrawn, her evil stepmother is taking her throne away from her, she's a prime target for assassination, and now the dark elves are getting antsy.

How will it look to her people if she went off courting the commander of the army during this time of crisis?

Just my opinion, anyway.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Love can heal anything and take your mind off things. Just my opinion. ;0



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