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The Battle For Ikriam

Novel By: FunnyBunny
Fantasy


Desperate to save her late Father's Kingdom from Vappu, Sage the Elf has to do battle with enemies and her own fears. View table of contents...

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1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18

Submitted: May 10, 2008    Reads: 400    Comments: 34    Likes: 10   


Vappu paced around the camp.  The Dark Elf Army was upon Ikriam.  Vappu couldn’t help but feel a little sad.  Deep down she actually loved this Kingdom. But she knew it deserved to fall. She would not get all soft and sensitive.  If she couldn’t have Ikriam, no one would!

 

“So my dear” Liskin hissed next to her “Are you ready for this?”

 

“I’ve never been more ready for anything in my life, Liskin.  This is what its supposed to be like.  Ikriam with me or without me.”

 

“My, my Vappu but you’re a feisty one.  So beautiful but so angry. But that’s your story.  I just do what I have to.”

 

Vappu turned around and looked at the mighty Kingdom. Soon everything will be destroyed.

 

                 ********

 

Takvor and Sacheverell decided to defend Ikriam from the East side.  The dark Elves wouldn’t see them. It will take a while longer to get there but at least they will cut the Elves off before they inflict too much damage.

 

“Takvor, are you ready for this?” Sacheverell asked with his hand on Takvor’s shoulder.

 

“Yes sir. Thank you again for helping me.  This is my home and I’ll need all the help I can get.”

 

“Don’t you worry my boy.  Ikriam will stand. Eachann!’

 

“Yes Commander?”

 

“Prepare to attack from the East side.  The woods will conceal the troops.”

 

“Yes Commander!”

 

Eachann rounded up the troops and explained the plan of action.

 

Takvor looked at his beloved home. Soon Ragnid. Soon I will hold you in my arms again.

 

 

                 *********

Ragnid stood in the dungeon holding an infant. 

“Hush now boy.  We’ll get through this.”

 

She missed Takvor so much! She didn’t even know where he was and if he was alive.  With all this commotion, she couldn’t even send word to Sacheverell that Ikriam was under attack and that they needed his help. 

 

But she vowed to herself that she would find Takvor.

 

             **********

 

Sage looked down at the approaching enemies.  She got her bow and arrow in position and waited for Rioghnan’s orders. 

 

Rioghnan held his hand in the air and said “Olivier, on my command, shoot to kill and protect yourself.  For your Queen and Kingdom.”

 

Sage watched him from the corner of her eye and when he lowered his hand, she pulled back on her bow. Her arrow hit a dark Elf right between the eyes and he fell.

 

So it begins.


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Comments:

This is soooooo goood!!! i honestly think you are one of the best fantasy story writers out ther right now!!!

I have a fantasy story called The Fear Of Being Found. I'm stuck for ideas on it right now but maybe you could help me???


Keep up the good works!!!!!

!Cami

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you for the lovely comment. I'll take a look and let you know.

I ticked the I like it button on these two last chapters. The chapters are short and we see the different players prepare for the big fight. As such I liked them.
Now I'm waiting for the big fight, and this reminds me of LOTR, not the books which is written in a way that is very tedious to read, but the movies.

I'm looking forward to what reading the next chapter.

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Tor. Although the Big Fight is in the next chapter, it isn't the end of the Novel. Loads more in store. Thank you once again.

Great chap! Now I'm being soft. I pity Vappu a little. Just a little... may I ask whose baby Ragnid's holding?

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Just one of the kiddies in the Elf community. No one special

and so it begins! yay! yes i agree with tor, it reminds me of the LOTR movies. ooo so good. haha. excellent work here. though i wish i could slap vappu. grrr.
haha
ok i hope you have a new chapter up soon! no more writers block pleeeease!

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Alice - yes the writer's block has left me! Yay! I'm glad you like it. and yes Vappu is a cow.

Ooh, so much happening, I'm so excited.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you DarkFairy

Heheheh.
Alice's comment reminds me of the convo we had before I wrote 'How much I hate Vappu' :DDD
Heheheheh.
Ok, so, WHY ARE THEY SO SHORT?!?!? They are killing me!!
Gah!
I nneeeedd more...
:O

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll try and write more for you!!! Ok? Yes, you should write another poem about Vappu...teehee

I can't wait for more. This story is so good. I am sitting on the edge of my seat.

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Susan. I'll post the other Chapter 2nite

love the book uptellnow can't wate for the big fight in the next chapter

Posted: May 17, 2008

Author Comment:

i'll be publishing soon shiningstar.

Wuaa... when are you updating???

Posted: May 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Asap I promise

where do you get your inspiriatin from. the book is an absolutely marvel.would write any more

Posted: May 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Junior Writer for the lovely comment. yes, I'm busy with the next chapter. My inspiration is me. What I feel like that moment and whatever flows out of me.

Gary
(not registered user)

I am guessing comments with any sort of negativity are immediately deleted?

Posted: May 21, 2008

Author Comment:

I've got no idea what ur talking about but no, they aren't. I like criticism. Makes me work harder. But thank you.

loren
(not registered user)

i thought sage was going on a suicide... i never thought she's good in fighting...

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Of course she's good in fighting. She's one tough cookie

loren
(not registered user)

Do you mind me asking? which country do you live in? just curious....

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Author Comment:

South Africa

OH MY GOD what a fantastic TALE!!!!
I cant wait to read the rest When is the next chapter to be written?

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much farro. I've got serious writers block so...I don't know. I'll let you know.

Ooooo... a cliffie! I just love cliff hangers! I get the distinct impression that this will be a big hit! I can't wait for the next chapter.

My dear, you have a new fan.

Keep up the good work!

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. Glad you enjoyed it.

FunnyBunny... I am losing my patience my friend... I really need another healthy dose of Ikriam, and asap! :DDD
Anyway, you should set Vappu on that writers block! One look at her and it will turn tail and run for the hills!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll post asap I promise

I liked this chapter. I accidently clicked on it and started to read it. I thought it was really good but unfinished. Then I looked up and realized it was a novel. Ha ha. I'm going to start from the begginning. I'll let you know what I think when I'm finished. Keep up the good work.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha Thank you

You BETTER be getting this published :) I love it!

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you MerrillG.

Loved It...!!! 999,999 stars for you...
I deducted one star because i think the story is very fast (Is this war the climax of the story already?)

By the way, your writing is very neat... I'd really appreciate it if you'd take a peek at my novel (Aster dream: memory of a machine) and tell me what you think...
thanks much....

p.s. when is the next chapter going to be published?
I'm itching with excitement...

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. Nope it's not the climax yet. I'll have a look. I'm quite busy so I'll get to it asap.

Thanx again

stillone of the best novals i have read

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much. your comment means a lot to me.

Krae
(not registered user)

I loved the first 18 chapters and look forward with great expectations for the rest of the book.

Keep up the great work. You are a natural.

Posted: Jul 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for the cute comment. *blushing*

you are good , i hope you like my story. but when will you end your story wich chapter?

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you. I'm far from the end, it just takes me forever to write a chapter.

ewokey
(not registered user)

Can't wait for next chapter. I honestly thought sage had no idea as to what she was doing.

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

funnybunny
(not registered user)

the most stupid story i have ever read they all hate but they just want to be nice i just tell the truth

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you for your honesty

bubbly
(not registered user)

i am registered here and i want to agree with you funnybunny that i hate it

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

okay thanx for your opinion.

I love it! Jealous of your mad skill. Can't wait for the next chapter, the suspence is already killing me!

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha thank you. no need to be jealous

I hope you write the next chapter soon. I love it!

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

I will and thank you

When will you post the next chapter? I'm just getting too impatient...... Great work, though, although I have to say your grammar and punctuation needs some organizing. But plot-wise this novel is great!

In the meantime, check out my work. :-)

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you jack. I'll post soon

death for funnybunny
(not registered user)

first of all your name is stupid (funnybunny)???
second of all your story tastes like shit or crap
third of all there is no forth

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

fantasylifealive
(not registered user)

i am not logged on now but, this is really good, ^_^.

- Fantasylifealive.

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you

i have read thus far but can wait no longer . i honestly don't think you have a clue as to how good you really are . this is sensational stuff , mixed with a few illustrations here and there , you could make a fortune . i could even see this as a film .
best wishes
terry

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

*Blushing* Terry thank you so much. You really made my day and I was having such a horrible one!! Thanx again.

Tash
(not registered user)

Hi, I am not a registered user, but i like to browse through the stories and have a quick read.

I have read all 18 chapters of your story and it is brilliant! I can't wait for the next chapter. What is going to happen to Vappu? Are Sage and Rioghnan going to hook up? And what is going on with Takvor and Ragnid?

Come on carry on writing! I am waiting with baited breath for the next chapter.

Very good writing, well done

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you oh nameless one! I'm working on the next chapter. will be up soon

your dialogue is great!
i like how you focus on different perspectives on the battlefield. your style is very clean and refreshing :)
and to all that haters, FOR REAL? get over youselves.
they're obviously jealous of ur talent :)

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you so much!! I loved your comment. I'll update soon.

Argh! We're dying here, where's chapter 19?

Posted: Aug 23, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm working on it. I've got no time and horrible unspeakable writer's block



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