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The Battle For Ikriam

Novel By: FunnyBunny
Fantasy


Desperate to save her late Father's Kingdom from Vappu, Sage the Elf has to do battle with enemies and her own fears. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Aug 31, 2007    Reads: 200    Comments: 10    Likes: 6   


 

Chapter 5

 

Sacheverell woke with a cry caught in his throat. His creased forehead was shiny with little beads of sweat.  For a moment he forgot where he was.  He looked around and saw he was in his large

office.

 

Oh Milne! his broken heart cried.  She was so sick.  He almost never went to their stuffy old cottage anymore.  His mother took care of Milne.  Her illness was taking more of her mind than her body.  She still walked around but her mind was somewhere else.  She hardly knew him anymore.  Looked at him like shes never met him before.

 

It broke his heart.  How can the woman you've been married to for 23 years not know your face anymore?  

 

Sacheverell got up and decided to check in with Eachann.  Poor boy is so tense lately. Ever since that Elf came here.  Or rather dropped here.  He'd better make sure Eachann doesn't have a heart attack before the age of 30.  

 

As Sacheverell predicted, Eachann was standing in front of the Elf boy's room and he was rattling in his armor so much, he sounded like a big bag of coins.

 

Relief was written all over Eachann's face when he saw Sacheverell.  Eachann had to restrain himself from running and hugging is comanding officer!

 

"Eachann, are you alright?  You look pretty shaken up"  Sacheverell laughed

 

"I'm fine, sir.  Just worried about this boy.  He has been saying all these things about his father and how he has been tricked."

 

"Yes, yes I know.  Its been like this ever since we stopped giving him that concoction.  I just wish he would come out of this daze he has been in and tell us something usefull.  Like his name and where he comes from.  Then we can help him."

 

"Do you think somebody forced him out of his country sir?"

 

"Probably.  That elf woman who sent him hear did look kind of underhanded to me."

 

"You don't think he is some kind of criminal, do you?" Eachann couldn't get images of dwarf heads rolling around out of his mind.

 

"No Eachann, I don't.  This boy is too...taken care of to be a criminal.  With is long blond hair, clear eyes and his facial features, I wouldn't be surprised if he was royal."

 

"You think he is a prince?" Eachann couldn't picture a dwarf-killing prince.  It just looked wrong.

 

"I don't know Eachann.  I could be wrong.  I could be so stumped about his identity that I may be imagining things.  We'll just have to wait.  Like every other day.

 

"sage..."  The two men heard a faint cry from within the room

 

"Hurry, unlock the door!" Sacheverell ordered

 

Eachann unlocked the door and with trembling hands he pushed it open.

 

Before the men even knew what happened, Eachann was thrown against the opposite wall with a thud.  The Elf pushed Sacheverell to the side and began to run.  Screaming all the way.

 

"SAGE! SAGE!"

 


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Comments:

OMG!!!
It IS her brother...YAY!!!
OMG, Gotta go read more!! YAY!!

Posted: Aug 31, 2007

Author Comment:

I will publish chapter 7 2nite. hope u'll enjoy it. thanx again! ;)

i'm glad its sages brother. i had a feeling it was
him

Posted: Sep 2, 2007

Author Comment:

Just wait and see who sent him there. I do hope you'll like it. Thank you for reading.

Wow! Sage's brother is the "dwarf killing elf", I sort of seen it coming and that poet3 pointed it out but the way you added it to the story was very ingeneous. You didn't just say it was her brother, but you integrated it so that it was part of the story. awesome! or maybe its just another elf who knows Sage, who knows? you do of course.

Posted: Sep 11, 2007

Author Comment:

hehe!
Thank you for the compliment. I didn't just wanna come out and say it, you know, that would have been rather stupid. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for the comment!

there are some issues here with sentence fragments and spelling and word tenses, but i still loved it. i liked it when you talked a bit more about the life of the dwarf gaurding him and i loved the line about his shaking in his armor sounding like a bag of coins. brilliant.

Posted: Feb 17, 2008

Author Comment:

like i said my spelling sucks but thanx. thanx for read & comment

sage's brother! *gasps*

Posted: Mar 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Teehee!

Ah ha I was right, heheheheh, yes I'm having a moment, lol.

Are they afraid of him as well as Vappu?

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Mar 24, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes they are... hahaha have your moment and enjoy it! Thanx

Wuu-huu! Now we meet the brother.

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx

This scene is full of dialog just like the last one. These would be perfect places to put all the information that was dumped in the first chapter.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for reading this novel. i appreciate it and your comments 2.

Excellent imagery, as always :P I liked the way you were able put descriptions in dialouge. I've never been able to do that, without it sounding incredibly stupid. Well done!

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you!!!!!!!!!!

YAY! The brother! Been waitin to see him. Lovely story so far, i have read up to this chapter and find it very entertaining and surprising. Didn't think ehr brother would throw a guy at the wall. What i like particularly is how do don't say he was her brother but make us able to realise. I like that bit. Can't wait to read the next bits. Lovely story. Love the conversations. LOL! Can't remember his face! That's a little funny.

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you Ruby. Hope you enjoy the rest



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