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Dancing With Cinderella

Novel By: kidarox123
Fantasy


Princess Ava Elizabeth James is the perfect princess. She never complains about her duties and excepts them willingly. She's never felt the urge to be "free" from the life she has. Even when she is de-crownded as crown princess and ordered to marry a man she's never met she doesn't waver. Prince Chance (her fiance) is anything but ordinary. He's funny, cute, and adventurous and absolutely very un-prince like. He shows Ava a world that she'd never experienced and shows her how much she really wants it. Ava then faces the biggest choice of her life: To be a princess, or not to be. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Nov 30, 2008    Reads: 186    Comments: 17    Likes: 3   


A/n: This chapter is a little boring, it's just here to bulid up background information, i promise it will get better!

CHAPTER ONE:

The Princess

Princess Eliza! Princess Eliza! the crowds of people cheered while the gold horse pulled carriage carried me through the main part of town. Even though my sister's were also in the carriage they only shouted my name. My full name is Princess Ava Elizabeth James. Everyone calls me Princess Eliza. My father picked out my first name, Ava, and after he passed away when i was ten my mother stopped using it. She said it was to painful, although i never complained about it. Ava always seemed to short for someone so important. Or at least that's what my mother told me.

She had remarried since, to a tall gray man that had strange lavender eyes. He was very kind to everyone including me and my younger sister LaRee. He had since fathered my mother's third child named, Anabella, which i thought was a very majestic name, worthy for a princess.

All of us sisters were very different from each other. LaRee seventeen and is rather tall with a large bust. She has very long black hair that goes past her bottom which she has combed thirteen times a day so that it stays shiny and tangle-free. She loves animals and has three pets: A dog, a parrot, and a cat. LaRee hates going into public places and absolutley abhors dresses and gowns. She avoids wearing them whenever possible and avoids pubilc appearacnes as if she was running from a rampaging bear.

Anabella, (or Ana as LaRee and I call her) is barely fifteen but is very short for her age. She has short loose curls that are red (like her father once had) and never takes anything seriously. She loves causing mischief and disobey's my mother's word all the time. She swares that one day she will run away from the palace and find a better life, although i'm not sure what could be better.

My mother calls me her perfect princess. At 18 years old i am an average height with long wavy golden hair. My lips are red as the rose and i can sing like the angles. My eyes are a emerald green like her's and she raves about them all the time. Emerald is her favoirte color to dress me in. I also play the piano forte, the harp, and the flute. I am also the Crown princess also, next in line to the throne, unless my mother's Husbund appoints a new one. He knows that neither of my sisters want to be the next ruler of Cullovia, so i feel very safe saying that i will soon be Queen Ava Elizabeth James Ruler of all Cullovia.

The carriage stopped and we stepped out to find ourselves in front of a large mansion surrounded by the lush greenery Cullovia was famous for.

"Come along girls" My mother said before turning around to lead us inside. This was Duchess DagMar's house. My mother set up tea with her once in awhile because she had two sons that she hopped Ana and LaRee would marry someday. I felt bad for the poor girls, the two boys were very akward and gangly, always stumbling over their words.

"Princes Eliza, you dropped your bag" said Luke as he ran to catch up with me before i travled any farther with my sisters,
i gently took it from his hands, "Thank you very much Luke, you may wait with the carriage" Luke was the servant that my mother sometimes took along with us. He had worked at the palace his whole life. I think that if i were not a princess and he were not my servant, i could be very good friends with him.
"Actually your mother asked me to come indoors today." He smiled and i smiled back, "Very well then."

Luke was always smiling at me. He never acted cross or annoyed with me. He always smiled.

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That night i sat at my window sill and looked out across the glowing kingdom. Even in the dark the forest's looked florishing and mysterious and the night sky which was sprinkled with stars seemed to make the full moon look even more magnificent. A breeze came through my window and pushed my hair behind my ears. I took that as a sign and shut the window solomely. I thought i saw someone down below move from behind the bushes but i ignored it. There was no way anyone would notice a princess sitting by her window in one of the tallest towers on the castle.

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Luke POV:

I couldn't help myself. I was walking back from the stables finally after a long day of work, when i looked up to see Ava looking out across the land with secrets dancing in her eyes. She was beautiful. No one would notice her there except for me. I had been here just as long as her and was able to spot eveyrthing. I also always looked up at her room out of habit. I had been enchanted with her ever since we were five and ran into eachother for the first time. She was dancing along the hallways and singing in perfect pitch. She probably didn't remember how we played togather all day until her mother found her and scoled her for assosiating with such people.

I had watched Ava grow up and every day was painfully aware that she would never look at me like i was somebody. I knew that when her mother stopped calling her Ava that she was hurt, she didn't want to be forced to forget her father. She always stepped up and took everything passivly. She didn't want to stand up for her rights. Although she never spoke to me, i always referred to her as Princess Ava.

My princess Ava.

The caslte of Cullovia (Ava's home):

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Comments:

cool. well-written and a good start. I can't wait to see what happens next:)

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Great job! I LOVE it so far! Great looking charecters by the way! :-)

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!! I had fun finding the perfect people! I made their descriptions before i chose the pictures! It was amazing how closely i was able to get them to match up!

VERY GOOD START!!
update soon

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! Will do!

A nice start to an unfolding story.
Be sure to edit!

Bella

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I will be more careful about editing!!

I like it. The charaters seem awesome. can't wait for more ;P

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

wow
really like the begining so far
let me know when you post more
:]

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thank! i will!

Hey I really liked it :D.
The only thing I'd say was that there were a few minor spelling errors, some bits outta place in the chapter.
But appart from that it was really good!

You are a very descriptive writer :)
I like how Luke and Ava played with each other as children ^-^

Let me know when you update :D

x

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!! Yeah i was trying to make it more interesting but the introductory chpater is always hard for me!

Kidarox,

I can promise you that was very far from boring and I look forward to what you have in store for this story.

Fyre

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

That is so sweet of you! Unfortunatly i have decided to postpone be writing this story. I may come back to it but it won't be until after christmas....or possibly during christmas break...=D I'll let you know when i post more!

I really like it. The pictures are wonderful, too. This chapter was not boring at all. in fact, i really liked it. = ) What does luke look like? would you tell me when you update it next?

Posted: Dec 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey thanks!!! I really want to put a picture of Luke on here but i can't find one that's pefect, i want it to look authentic, like he's a servant and all but i can't find anything that's not to shoddy...If you can find anything let me know! I'm definatly keeping my eyes open!

I love this. Such a sweet story. And hopefully going towards the love story type. It wasn't boring. I liked the descriptions, and the story start. Tell me when you update. I can't wait to read more! Take care!

~Happy Holidays~
Cassie

Posted: Dec 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks a ton! I think i will be updating very soon!

Very good! I like it a lot, read more. Try looking up Love and read mine. Boring at first, get's much more interesting!

Posted: Dec 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I will be sure to stop by and read it!

interesting story. update me when you have the next chapter. does cullovia have something to do with edward cullen?

Posted: Dec 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! Well, i wrote a fanfiction story and named my country Cullovia after "the Cullens" so i just used it again. Sadly, niether Edward or anything of the Cullen's will make an appearacne in this story.

Pretty good.

Posted: Dec 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

i like it, but just remember to use spell check. :)

much luv, ccs

Posted: Dec 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! Yeah, i'm not one to worry about editing too much....sorry. =D

this is really really good!!!! im really enjoying it and omg luke likes ava!!!!! i like her being called ava too, she just isnt an eliza!!!!!! great great start im hooked lol!!

Posted: Dec 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!=D I realized after i published it on booksie that Ana and Ava are alot alike....oh well. =D

interesting start i like it

Posted: Dec 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

Wowsers you getting a lot of praise and I must say, well deserved. I can point out a few typos but then I'd feel like I'm nitpicking and I'd hate to be guilty of that. The story is awesome and my favourite of the princesses is Ana, she reminds me of me except she's a gorgeous girl and I'm a sadistic and somewhat charming.

Posted: Jan 2, 2009

Author Comment:

Thanks! lol! Wow, i'm glad that you can relate and connect to one of the characters!



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