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Diary Of A Suntress Wolf :

Novel By: kitty08
Fantasy


Flurry and her pack are trying to prove that they aren't wolves but the creatures that live around them will prove them wrong. If the pack continues to belive that they are dogs they will be killed by the wolves, if they side with them will they suffer the same fate????? View table of contents...

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1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9

Submitted: Mar 30, 2008    Reads: 75    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   


Chapter 1

I woke up hungry. As usual the pack had already started eating their breakfast. Chinai looked up from the chunk of meat that he was eating and drooped his tounge in a big wolfy smile.

" You plan on eating today, Flurry?" He said tauntingly.

" Don't call me that!" I growled back.

We were part of the Suntress wolf pack. It was an unusual family group, since technically none of it's members were wolves. It was made up of stray dogs and mostly wolf/dog hybirds. Chinai and I used to be pets in a huge home with two annoying humans and their three pups. They had found me wandering the streets and out kindness they took me in fed me and soon they got used to me. Chinai was taken in by them about, two summers later.

All theSuntress had belonged to a human at somepoint and they all loved them very much. To us the humans were a source of life and food. To other wolveshumans near meant death and suffering. I don't see why any animal should fear a human, I myself had never been abandoned, beaten, of tied up and left to starve, but other wolves have and they fear them because of it. Even if all that happened to me I don't think that I would hate all humans, just the ones that mistreated me.

" Flurry!"Chinai growled." Come and eat already. "

I trotted to the carcus of a carabouand tore off several chunks of the fresh warm meat... delicious.Once I stepped away the lowest ranking packmembers finished off the carcus, some even ate bones.

" Now," The leader,Zorro said." We all must leave."

" Why?" A small puppy asked cocking it's head to one side.

" The Drio are becoming a problem."

It seemed like the entire pack, all twelve of them, growled at once. The Drio were an all wolf pack who loved to steal our food and hunt down puppies like food.

" When aren't they a problem?" An old German Shepard commented.

" Hey, Flurry..." Chinai spoke softly almost whining.

I was really gettingsick that old pet name so, I snapped.

" My name isn't Flurry! It's Stream!" You could be sure that I was part dog then, I barked so loudly that I heard an echo.

I like this one :P It deticated to my Germain shepard/ timber wolf doggy ^.^


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Comments:

Very good! i don't know much about dogs, i'm more of a cat person, bnut its still interesting so far. add more!

Posted: Apr 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

i like chapter 1. i also like dogs so it seems an interesting piece to me. i like your style, writing in the first person is good, flurry, or should i say stream, seems a strong character, which she has to b if she is narrating the story. but she has a strong voice which is very believable. maybe it would have been nice if the chapter was a bit longer and set the scene a bit more. you could do with a bit more description, through the voice of flurry u could describe the appearance of some of the dogs, espcially her. tell me what she looks like, is she thin or does she have any features like blue eyes or scars. also describe where they are, like the streets around them ect...it doesnt have to b too detailed it just helps set the scene. however, i really like it so far, u describe the dog/wolf pack very well and your style of writing is very good. its easy to follow which is very important, always keep things simple...i like how Chinai growled "come and eat already" we wouldnt say it like that so u can tell its written by an american which is good, it gives the dogs an identity, its good to use different accents depending on where the dogs come from. remember to give each dog its own identity, and u need to explain what kind of dogs flurry and chinai are. hope these comments are helpful and i havent written too much. v.good so far, now on to chapter two

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Okay, i'll get to fixing up the story a bit.Thanks for the comment!!!!!!!

wow!! i really like this!! its different and new!! ver very well done. i especially like, "It seemed like the entire pack, all twelve of them, growled at once". the reader can get that ground rumbling feel! good job!!

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks!

I liked this chapter... ihaven't read the others yet ha ha but I will.. i hope you like mine.

Posted: May 6, 2008

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