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Blade of the Sands

Novel By: MelodyOfSumi
Fantasy


Thieves have a short life expectancy, especially in the land of Achelis. While the strength of the rulers crumbles, I thrive. Chaos in inevitable, and I'm just getting started.

-Just getting started. Read the prologue, and if you find it interesting, I'll start writing more chapters. Review please! View table of contents...

Chapters:

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Submitted: Sep 10, 2007    Reads: 79    Comments: 6    Likes: 2   


 

 Below ground, dug deep into the bowels of the earth, are cities.  They are the whole of our civilization, separated from each other by miles of rock and sand.  Houses, hospitals, and most importantly, government reside in such areas, controlling the lives they hold inside.  They are the only place our human race can find sanctuary from the hell above.

Under the sky the blazing sun beats down upon shifting sands. Ever-blowing winds, swirling and raging.  Small marked paths are the only means of connection between the cities, and they are used rarely.  Rulers of each continue their own separate rule over their people, from which there is no escape. 

Usually.

Some people try to overcome the pressure of the dictatorship and flee to areas unknown to all but those who know where they are.  Even when knowledge of such a place is acquired, by either word of mouth or sheer accident, acting upon it takes much more energy than simply walking away.  The dangers above ground discourage all but the bravest and most foolish from reaching towards the dream of freedom.

I am neither.

I succeeded. 

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AN: Review please!


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Comments:

A very strong foundation for a novel. I really liked it and can't wait to read more. You gave us just enough to want more. Great job and keep up the good work!

Posted: Sep 10, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you very much! I'll try to keep it up. :D

very interesting...I would definitely be interested in reading more.

Posted: Sep 10, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you!

Very perplexing beginning to a very promissing novel. The whole concept of your story is very interresting, altough the whole underground dictatorship government has been done before, I am certain with your skill you can overcome such stereotypical boundaries.

Posted: Sep 11, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you! Ahaha, now I'm worried about letting you down.
I'll try my best!

Sounds great!!! Looking forward to reading more!!!

Posted: Sep 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you! Chapter one is about to be posted!

Awesome job!
I cannot belive you decided to use the name Dunsimur like I suggested!
that made me smile
I loved it. Keep on going! Even if you have to do it in English again! I think the only thing is that "You fall behind and you’re left behind" is way to POTC cliche now...
But is is an awesome story :)

Posted: Sep 13, 2007

Author Comment:

Lol. I know. But it sounded like something Arion would say, so I put it in. n_n
And I doubt I'll be able to work on it in English with this GIANT project she gave us today.

Freckin Sweet!
Didn't know that you were this good of a writer.
Liked both the prologue and the first chapter.
Any idea when chapter two is coming out?
Or just whenever you can make time to write it?
Well greatly enjoyed it. Keep it up!

Posted: Sep 15, 2007

Author Comment:

Ahaha. I only know one person that usually has that username. (And if I'm wrong, sorry. XD)
Chapter two will hopefully come later this week. It kinda depends on how much homework I get.



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