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Hell's Desire

Novel By: Starlit Rogue
Fantasy


When the paranormal world came out twenty years ago, they knew that life would not be easy. Now there is a creature that may upset the thin balance between the paranormals and the normals. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: May 7, 2008    Reads: 184    Comments: 8    Likes: 5   


Prologue

            Hell surrounded her like a perfect circle. All eyes were trapped upon her. She moved swiftly and silently. A demonic smile caressed her lips as her full hips waved from side to side hypnotically. Black hair as soft as silk and as soiled as a dark soul, drifting down through the pits of hell, cascading down her back in a slick veil. Skin, pale as porcelain and showing not a blemish, nor a sign of life except for the death that seemed to tarnish her aura. Her face smooth but all the while twisted in a slight snarl, pale as the moon under the harshly colored lights. Her every move was hypnotic. No one could tear their eyes away from her when she made her way to the dance floor, body moving to a slow beat, different from the fast beat music that pounded in the background. She was pure sin; to even gaze upon her would mean eternal damnation.   

A red dress hugged the curves of her body like a second skin. It’s silky material shining in under the artificial light. Black beads gleamed under the moving lights, and a hush fell over the over crowded club. 

Seduction. 
Pure lust. 

She was the embodiment of another world, dark, mysterious and dangerous. Brown eyes flickered over the dance floor, never catching another’s eyes. She was distant but there, close enough to touch but her mind was as far off as it was twisted. Red lipstick coated her lips, deadly and sinful. Deadly lips were curled into a smirk, revealing a bit of fang. 

Her body moved while time seemed to stand still. Dancing around bodies, as they lay around her. 

Never blinking. 
Always looking. 
She was their goddess. 

They desired her even in death. Small clicks echoed as the music from the long dead DJ stopped. The small clicks moved, following the goddess of lust on the dance floor. Her body twisting like a snakes, leaving only a river of blood on the dance floor which now beat with destruction. Life was destroyed, leaving only a barren wasteland full of carnage.


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Comments:

very descriptive. its a great start. i cant wait to read more. =)

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, its a prologue of sorts. I'm almost done with the first chapter. Obviously the character described above is a badie. XD Kinda reminds me of Dru from Buffy.

very good I loved it. I thought It was an awesome start...keep it up

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! ^^ I hope you tune in for the next chapter.

Wow! Very descriptive and lovely in an evil horror-filled way! If that's the prologue, then I can't wait for the real story! ~Em

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, I'm glad you like it!! ^^

The second chapter should be up later this week or early next week.

Cool opening chapter. Send me a note when you have posted more.

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

I'll make sure to do so!

Very lyrical writing ... you could write songs with the sentences ...

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, thank you I think?

Yes, this IS very lyrical. I normally do not read vampire unless it's Anne Rice....not sure why you've lured me in here, but you have. Fantastic writing.

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Well, glad you enjoyed it than. XD ^^ And thank you. ^^

Wow, the descriptions were incredible. I saw everything like a perfect picture before me. I think the idea for this story is wonderful, and your imagination must be wild! LOL, I really really loved this. It was such a great start. I can't wait to read more:D

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Sadly the rest wont be as descriptive but pretty close. She's kind of the bad guy so her parts are always descriptive. Cause I like making the horrible completely horrid. XD

Wait til you see what the bodies look like. XD

Wow this was/is really descriptive.
I can not wait for the next chapter to see what happens
=]

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

lol, great! Thanks!



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