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Ramorgra: The Toll of Immortality

Novel By: suzanne capleton
Fantasy


An ordinary country girl, who nurses a wounded stranger, finds herself in her adventure of a lifetime which may determine her past, destiny, and future, and the possibility that she may be the most important deity to save her world from utter destruction under an ancient evil. View table of contents...

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Submitted: May 16, 2008    Reads: 236    Comments: 18    Likes: 6   


Surely this wasn't one of those ordinary days.

The air was hot and humid which made breathing immensely difficult. The little girl could almost feel as if the flames from down below scalded her pale face though she and her winged companion hovered several feet up in the air.

Risking a glance at the events happening below her, she tugged at the silk veil her companion had covered her face with.

She let out a terrified gasp.

“By all the gods,” she breathed, “Dravuhl! I thought dark dragons only existed in myths and Elvin folklore!”

The Dravuhl, massive black dragons with their scales tougher than any known metal, emitted white-hot cursed flames from their vicious mouths that incinerated everything that stood within its range of fire. Having weakened the once splendid fortifications of the fair folk, another cohort of T’lakr, half-human, half-monster beings, crashed into the battlements and engulfed everything it passed in a maelstrom of fury, leaving nothing alive in their wake.

It was only a matter of time before the raging beasts reached the sacred dwelling of the gods at the summit of the highest peak of the sacred mountain. If they allow the T’lakr to get there without accomplishing their task, everything will be too late.

“We have to get down there, we must!” the girl exclaimed, big drops of tears welled up in her eyes. “We will all die if we don’t do something!”

“The more reason for you to leave this place,” her companion whispered in her ear, devoid of any concern. The girl looked up at him. Shock, anguish and tears tainted her beautiful face.

“Leave?” she repeated, as if she had not heard right, “This is my home! How can I just leave when all of this is happening?”

Her companion heaved a sigh, “We are in a very tight situation. Our forces are outnumbered a thousand to one. You may not be able to understand right now but you will, eventually. When you leave, it will help your race and kind tremendously. You may think otherwise, but that’s the best plan that we have if we are to emerge victorious in this turmoil.”

“Well if you set us down now, we can still fight them! We have a chance. There are as many elves like you as there are people in Ramorgra, they will all be willing to fight for the mortal King and the gods as well!”

“You know very well that a dreadfully small number of mortals survived the T’lakr’s assault a few weeks ago…”

“It doesn’t matter!”

Just then a blast of white flames missed them by a hand’s breadth. The airborne Dravuhl have tracked them.

The winged elf faced his charge, now paler than ever, and at a loss for words in her shock, fear and confusion.

“Do you trust me?” he asked her. The girl nodded, blond locks billowing in the sudden fierce draft as a Dravuhl flew dangerously near them.

“Let go.”

The girl blanched and gripped him tighter. “Let go and let myself plummet down several thousand feet?” she cried out.

“Listen!” the elf said, gasping for breath as a Dravuhl snapped at his heels, “If you want to end the world, it’s fine with me! We can watch it up here together! But if you want to see Ramorgra like it was before, and if you don’t want your mother and father and the other gods to die at the hands of the T’lakr and whoever is controlling them, you have better do what I say.”

"Surely there's some other way," the girl whimpered, "What would happen to me? To you?"

Her companion weakly shook his head. "This is the only way. I'll be fine. And I assure you that you'll be alright too."

Tears began to roll down the girl’s face.
“I- I’m afraid.”

The elf lowered his voice and embraced her. “We all are. Not only mortals but beings like us know fear, too. Now let go, we will see each other someday.”

She hesitated, took a quick glance at the imminent fall below, and then into her companion's sorrowful face. Like a living requiem against the night sky.

The winged elf slowly lowered her down...

"Please promise me you'll come back for me," she said, her voice breaking with emotion. The elf nodded.

The girl loosened her faltering grip and with a terrified shriek plunged down into the smoldering rubble.

Just as she was to fall down into the gaping mouth of a Dravuhl looming nearby, she disappeared in a burst of blue light and silver feathers. The dragon snapped at thin air and flew away with a disgruntled snort.

The elf saw this happen, spread his wings, and darted away into the chaos below.



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Comments:

Whoa! Seriously, whoa. Nice beginning. This may sound really bad but I have to be honest but wow, I was surprised at JUST how well this was written. I was blown away. Ha, no pun intended.

This is a perfect beginning and I can't wait to find out what happens! You expressed the emotions wonderfully!

Well done!

-SnowQueen

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks. :D

wow intressting i like it.

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

i'm glad to know that you liked it. :) thanks also for welcoming me on booksie. take care. :D

... how old are you? you write like the next christopher paolini... sheesh you're amazing. XD

i'm a huge fantasy lover and this story is.. WOW. very gripping and just flat out brilliant. i'm going to read more for sure. in fact, i'm going to read the next 2 chapters you have up right now b/c i'm that hooked! haha.
i write fantasy too... but not this good. dang. i'm still blown away and just... stunned.
you better keep me updated with this story! =P

Posted: May 17, 2008

Author Comment:

wow,thanks so much. :D i'm 17. and i love fantasy too. i'm a fan of christopher paolini too!! again, thanks so much. I'll do my best to make this story worth your time reading. :D take care.

hi! suzanne. it's very very interesting. lol. ;-)

Posted: May 20, 2008

Author Comment:

tnx so much! Not as interesting as your poems though. ;D

i have to read a series of chapters by now. Good writing. Keep it up.

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks a lot. :) i'll make it a point to read some of your works too. :) again, thanks. :)

Great! I like this a lot!

Posted: May 26, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks. :D

Gripping... seriously it's gripping me...

Posted: May 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks indie. :D take care

Whoa!

Completely blew me off the edge of my seat.

I'm going to try to read the rest today.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: May 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much DarkFairy. :) I hope you enjoy it. I'll be posting more chapters soon. take care. :)

halaa ang haba ehhe! hmmm ehhe naalala ko un Lotr di2 ah... ehhe! toh s ngaun 1st page... pag mei time aq ulet... cge bsahin ko ahh ^ ^

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

cge po! tnx :D take ur time! hahhaha... salamertz...

Wow! This is really good! I haven't read a reeeeeally good fantasy in a whilte. This has definitely revived my trust.

...Oh! And thanks for welcoming me!

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Author Comment:

No problem! :D thanks for reading, i hope you like the rest of the story! :D

It was good. It started real fast for me but I can see you have a good grip on fantasy writting.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for reading. :)

amazing, honestly one of the best fantasys I've read in a long time, such emotion and atmosphere, a great begining. can't wait to read more :D

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks for reading. :D

Wow! This is very good =D

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for taking your time reading, DeadMemory! Hope you like the rest of it. :)

Wow, I'd love to see where this is going!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks! I hope you like it. :)

this should be in bookstores!

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Hahaha! my mom thought about that too. :) thanks for reading, Joshua. :)

I agree with Alice! You do sound a lot like the next Christopher Paolini. This was absolutely great! I loved it so much. I don't usually a lot of fantasy, but you've got me hooked! And wow, your imagery was so great it was like I was up in the air looking down at everything. Great job again:D

Posted: Jul 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much. :D

Very exciting start, and well written fantasy. Keep it up.

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much for reading RodneyF. :D i really appreciate it.

I.... LOVE IT. A winged elf? who would have ever thought of that? :) u got an imagination and the ability to transport someone into a world unseen by the normal human eye.

Posted: Oct 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks for the comment zera. :)



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