Random First Lines: I kept hearing somebody say Sunset over and over. I was staring into some strange green eyes. The lady was... : Fantasy » Read

Welcome Visitor: Login to the siteJoin the site

Candle'Bre: The Reckoning - Book I, Darkness Falls

Novel By: Velociryx
Fantasy


I have recently completed a multi-volume fantasy series, and plan to release the first book, in its entirety to see what level of interest there might be for a new, epic style fantasy adventure.

If you enjoy this story, I hope you will check out our website: http://www.candlebre.com for the rest! You can also download a lushly illustrated, full color PDF of this story from there! :)
View table of contents...

Submitted: May 4, 2008    Reads: 293    Comments: 9    Likes: 4   


alt

alt

Candle’Bre:
The Reckoning
Book I
Darkness Falls
By: Christopher D. Hartpence

Part One
The Drums of War
“The future is ours to shape, if we will but seize this moment.Many, including perhaps many of you esteemed Lords here today, would say that this is a terrible time of darkness.
No!As sure as I stand before you now, I tell you that this is clouded thinking!This is the sound of the old order of things falling away like so much crumbling stone, and so my charge to all of you:
Go home and prepare.
Hire every mercenary band you can secure contract with.Empty the prisons and bring me a legion of ruffians, so that upon their backs, we can build a new Kingdom. One that is made to our liking and advantage.
And once you have done this thing, make it known in every corner of the Basin that those who oppose us and our bid to reshape the Kingdom…those who would deny us the position that is rightfully ours…we will be merciless in our dealings with them, and when we are victorious, they will be little better than slaves, and will rue the day they crossed the House of Mourngrym!”
~ Flavin Mourngrym, A speech to the collected Lords of WestKeep and EastGate


Liam O’kinso

Inquisition Chambers - Sutheron
Year 178, AC

Screams.

Echoing through the cold stone corridors of the dungeon with an eerie, other worldly quality to them.

The man giving life and volume to those screams barely looked the part of a man at all. Ragged and beaten, blood oozing from fresh-made wounds in at least two dozen places, his body a patchwork of bruises and weeping scabs, the screams were truly all that Tash Rennken had left.

Another lash with the barbed whip, a series of new cuts along Tash Rennken's spine, fresh blood flowing, adding to the river that had already bled out of the man, and of course, another ragged scream.

The sound would have been bad enough on its own....the wet ripping as the barbed metal at the ends of the five "tails" on the whip embedded themselves deep, then pulled away with a sickening sound, stripping the flesh to the muscle beneath, then stripping some of the muscle away for good measure. That would have been more than gruesome enough on its own, but what made it truly hellish was the look of barely contained glee on the face of the Inquisitor each time the whip found its mark. Or the way the excitement in the man's voice made it waver anytime he attempted to speak.

The first time he had seen and heard those signs, Tash Rennken knew he would never leave the Chamber of Confessions alive.

No matter what he confessed to, no matter how repentant he cast himself to be, this man...this monster in human skin would never allow him to leave this place.

It was his destiny, he realized, to join with his Dark Master, and the hour of his deliverance was at hand.

He was as ready as he could be, and he was not afraid of death or dying. As a humble scribe of the Forbidden Doctrines of Ollux, and a student of the Book of Shadows, it had been with awestruck wonder that he, a mere Tash, had risked his own sanity in order to receive his Master's vision.He knew his duty, and scribed it down exactly as it had been revealed to him.

This, however, proved to be but the first act, and so it was that he had begun preaching. Spreading the word. Enlightening any who would listen about the dark glories of the times to come.The words did not fall on ears that were eager for the news he bore, and his preaching was short-lived.

Ever-watchful for heresy, the Inquisition had picked him up less than two days into his ministerial crusade, and spirited him off to Sutheron for the kind of questioning that only they could perform.Those few who had heard his remarkable words had written him off as insane.

Nonetheless, the message had been delivered. No matter what they did to him now, it was too late.

It had been a risk worth taking, and now he was face to face with its consequences.

Another blow from the whip, with results as before, and he realized now that his death would be a release. The detached part of his brain that could still function cursed himself for not being a stronger man. For allowing the agonies of his earthly body to overwhelm his self control. For giving the Inquisitor a measure of victory by crying out.

But of course, it was too late to take it back, and it was clear that the Inquisitor knew his work well.

Knew exactly where to cut or strike or burn for maximum pain, with minimal damage to the body so that the torment could be prolonged indefinitely.

In truth, Tash Rennken had held up remarkably well. He had not issued so much as a whimper for the first six hours of his torment, but here in the last four, his reserves of stamina had finally dripped out of him along with the greater bulk of his blood, and he could simply stand no more.

From that torment, a cry was born.Then another, and all the while, the Inquisitor smiled.

Please Master, claim me quickly. He prayed through the pain. Come claim your faithful servant. The message has been delivered...your work...your will is done.

The Inquisitor was speaking again, and Tash Rennken tried to focus on the words. Struggled to make sense of them.

"....cept J'honsa as your Savior, and I shall release you from this torment....that's not so unreasonable, now is it?"

He held out the Ring of the Inquisition, offering it to Rennken to kiss, and renounce the ways of his true Master, and oh how he wished he could do it! How easy to take the ring, beg for a quick death and have done with it!

Except of course, that doing so would eternally damn him in the eyes of his Master.

No.

He must persevere. Find new reserves of strength and hold on a little longer.

He must.

He....

The room spun and darkened, and the visage of the Inquisitor hovering above him dissolved away to nothingness.

Tash Rennken gasped as he watched a shape begin to form in the deep and swirling shadows.

I am coming.... He heard the deep, rumbling voice proclaim.

And your part in this is not yet at its end.

One final gasp as the image before him clarified, and then Tash Rennken breathed no more.His mind had time to register, but not react to the realization that the second phrase spoken in his mind had been a different voice.Something other than his Dark Master.

His eyes widened in surprise, and then it was finished.

~Ж§Ð–~

Liam O’kinso sighed heavily and stared down at the lifeless form of the Scribe before him.

Such a pity he had not lasted longer. In the years that had followed the Lady Ahnwick's ascension to power, both as the head of the Castillar family, and as the Reigning Prelate, the Inquisition found itself with increasingly less to do. She preferred gentler methods of persuasion, and the Office was rarely allowed to handle heretics in the manner in which they should be handled, leaving his kind with fewer opportunities to practice.

Although weakened, both in the scope of their operations and in the manpower available to them, they, the men of the Holy Inquisition, were still watchful. Ever vigilant. And when Rennken had appeared in the province of NorthShores, spouting his dark heresies, they had been quick to act, swooping down upon him like a great bird of prey and spiriting him off to the dark corners of their nest.

It was good that the matter had been brought to his attention in particular.

A lesser man might have simply tortured Rennken to death, and let his words depart from the world with barely a whisper, and that would have been a loss.

A grim and terrifying smile settled onto his face as he contemplated.If all went according to his design, there would be many more opportunities in his future to experience the pleasures of the work that he had just completed.

He closed his eyes for a moment and let the words of The Reckoning wash over him once more.

Each time he did so, it made him shiver with a delight of quite a different sort than the one he felt when he was doing the HighFather's work saving souls as he had just tried to do with Rennken.

That was an...almost sexual pleasure, but this...the way the words of The Reckoning moved within him as he thought....it was....

There were no words, save for those of The Reckoning itself, and, he realized, they were words penned specifically for him.

He knew it from the moment he had first read the translation.

Words meant for him and him alone.

Never mind that he had been groomed from the moment of his birth for a different purpose.That the Men of the Harraden had carefully structured his life so he might one day prove to be the instrument that fulfilled their goals and dreams.

But in light of this, The Reckoning, what were the Harraden? What were their aims and goals?

If and where they aligned with the fulfillment of The Reckoning itself, then by all means, the goals of the Harraden could be fulfilled, and this would hold true for at least a number of years longer.

Sooner or later though, there would have to be….

A parting of ways, he said to himself as he shivered with an almost drunken delight at the implications of all he had recently learned.

The next step then, was clear.

Wiping the blood off of his hands, he moved to an adjoining chamber, stripped off his robe and climbed into a steaming bath, where he scrubbed himself vigorously, removing all traces of Rennken's blood from his body.

Amazing how much work torturing a man to death could be.His arms and shoulders were aching in protest at the constant use, but the bath did much to refresh him, and in less than an hour's time, he was clean, dressed in fresh robes, and feeling much better for it.

He hastened from the dungeon and to his office on the first floor of the Temple Compound. Took a seat at his vast oak desk, rang for one of his servants, and busied himself with the day's paperwork while he waited.

In a moment, a servant duly appeared, and he favored the man with an engaging smile. "Milo....are you occupied with some other task at present?"

"No, your Eminence, I am at your disposal!" Came the eager-to-please voice. Liam also noted that he was careful to keep the country "twang" out of his voice, which he knew to be present when Milo spoke with anyone else.

Liam's smile grew, and he nodded. "Excellent....and in that case, I instruct you to fetch Arnos the Scribe from the Tower of Records. He and I have some details to discuss about a translation he’s working on for me."

"My pleasure to help in the HighFather’s work!" Milo said fervently, bowing low.

An adequate response. Thought Liam, enjoying the sadistic game of being ever-watchful for signs of insufficient displays of faith, even within his own ranks. Satisfied, he continued, with what could almost have been mistaken for genuine charity. "Off with you then, and once you have given him word that I'd like to speak with him, I want you to take the rest of today, and all of tomorrow for yourself.Enjoy some time spent fishing, or an afternoon with friends and family...anything your heart desires."

He absently produced a sheaf of parchment bearing the Seal of the Inquisition and quickly penned instructions indicating that Milo had the Inquisitor’s blessings at whatever he was about, and that he was not to be disturbed.

Milo was astounded by the offer, and could barely believe his good fortune. To be granted such a boon by the Inquisitor of Sutheron himself! It was.....it was all but unheard of! "Yes Sir, and th...thank you Sir!" He said in reply as he dashed from the door.

When the servant had gone, the warm, engaging smile he had shown only seconds earlier changed in its character, becoming a slow, dangerous, serpentine smile that wound its way across Liam's face.

"One more stray thread to snip." He whispered. "And I will be the only man living who knows of The Reckoning."

He got up and stretched leisurely, then headed back to the dungeon, where he knew Arnos would first look for him.

~Ж§Ð–~


4

Email this story Email this story | Print Story Print Story | Pdf Version Pdf | Add to reading list

Comments:

Wow! Ilike it, I hope you post chapter 2! So this is like a real, published, book? Cool!
Bravo!

Posted: May 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey there! And no worries on that front...the tale (all four books) is already complete, so there's a 0% chance that you'll get all invested in the characters and stuff, and then the author will "give up" or vanish...can't happen, cos the story's already finished (still editing the last two books). :)

I'll be posting the next segment tomorrow. I'd go ahead and do it today, but I promised myself I'd draw it out...LOL

Glad you're enjoying so far!

Chris

rodan
(not registered user)

Good stuff. I loved the map. Look forward to reading more. Thanks for posting!

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks, and I'm glad you enjoyed this part (and yes...we can thank Booksie user Hexagonian for the awesome map...he did a GREAT job!! =D )

I'll be posting another segment later today, so stay tuned! :)

-=Vel=-

hi! chris. its gratifying to see a writer taking so much interest in his work - with the video and map. i wish ur work all success for nothing less than success ll do. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

=D Thank you, bubbly! And my apologies for the slow response. Back in the hospital, and they wouldn't let me have a laptop! :(

Out now, and things are rolling along smoothly once more. As soon as I send this reply to you, I'm off to play some "catch up" with posting story segments! :)

-Chris

Did you illustrate the map yourself. I am illustrating my book taking a long time. I will continue to read this story I hope to hear from you one mine. It is the same genre Fantasy and similar to concept in that it is a time before real technology.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello and my apologies for the slow response. Back in the hospital, and they wouldn't let me have a laptop! :(

Out now, and things are rolling along smoothly once more. To answer your questions, I did not do the map myself. I gave my dear friend Dave Sobotka a rough outline and he's the one who made it all pretty... :)

And I look forward to taking a peek at your work as well! Thank you for the read and the comment!

-Chris

Oh, my gosh! This is sooooo amazing! I love how you even had a map! bwahaha, I've always tried to make maps for my novels, but I can't draw, so they never worked out.

Posted: Aug 16, 2008

Author Comment:

:) Thank you for the kind words, Dannika, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! And I'm definitely gonna add you to my reading list!

-Chris

I enojyed this story it was brilliant, i love you writing style and the way you write

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks very much, DraconianKnight! The compliment is greatly appreciated!

We've got an illustrated, full color version of this story in PDF format on our website if you're interested! (http://www.candlebre.com)

:)

-Chris

I really liked that!!!!
Are you a real published author and this is, like, published???? that would be so cool if you are how long did that take??? even if you're not published, do you think i could get published at 11 years old (hope you don't mind i'm younger than i'm supposd to be..)??????????? omg lol
anyway i enjoyed it so you should keep on writing and editing and everything!!!

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello Renesmee, and thank you for the compliment. I'm glad you enjoyed the read! :)

To answer your questions, I am currently posting in Booksie in an attempt to draw the attention of an agent and/or a publisher, so while I have published books in the past, this series is not yet published (I plan to use WordClay to make a limited number of copies of the work available while I am in search of a publisher).

I just turned 40, and have only recently been published, so if you can do it at age eleven, then I think that's FABULOUS (and entirely within the realm of possibility!). Good luck to you! :)

-Chris

I think im in love with this x3
I tried adding it to my reading list but it wont let me...
anyways ill just try tomarrow

Posted: Nov 29, 2008

Author Comment:

=) Thank you, Aria! I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!

-Chris

It is a pleasure to read a published author who is so extremely talented--and for free no less!

Love this fantasy and am wondering if you have written anything about vampires? I'm kind of into vampires right now--trying my hand at writing with my new novel "The Vampire Clan."

Would love if you took a minute to read what I have written so far and critique it...need brutal honesty.

By the way I sort of take a holistic approach to illness. I believe in the healing power of a whole plant foods diet. Got to do what the Docs say too though. Get well soon. :)

Posted: Nov 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello and thank you, LA Debbie! I appreciate the compliment! It and the other three books in the series (there are two more that make up the trilogy proper, and then a collection of short stories that relate back to the main story of the trilogy) were just over three years in the making, so It is heartening to see that it's getting such a warm reception here!

I have one short story written about vampires - will see if I can put my hands on it and post it here! And I'll definitely take a look at your story. Will head that way this morning!

-Chris



Add Your Comments:

Your Name:

Spam protection control::

© Copyright 2009 Velociryx All rights reserved. Velociryx has granted theNextBigWriter, LLC non-exclusive rights to display this work on Booksie.com.

About | News | Contact | Your Account | TheNextBigWriter | Advertise

© 2008 TheNextBigWriter, LLC. All Rights Reserved. Terms under which this service is provided to you. Privacy Policy.