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Kingdom of the Black Feather

Novel By: volleyballchick
Fantasy


A love story about two kids and how their love grew as did their friendship. Yet an interfierence came afoot. A deamon with humoungus black wings noticed the boy (Shane's) weakness was Carmen (the girl). So he kidnapped Carmen. Now Shane discovered where this deamon rules. Now Shane and his companions are on their way to save Carmen. View table of contents...

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Submitted: Jun 21, 2008    Reads: 56    Comments: 3    Likes: 3   


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"Sister why are you so stressed?" Yuko asked. Sukii sighed, "Shadow has not returned with that girl yet. I'm scared he won't come back and that boy will come trotting in here." Yuko put her hands on Sukii's head, "You worry too much. He will come here with the girl. If not... you can choose the punishment." Sukii looked out the window, "I think he's near. I smell innocents comming near." Yuko kissed her sister's head, "See, no worries."

Shadow walked into the room, Carmen asleep in his arms. "Gemini, this is the girl," Shadow said. Yuko and Sukii got up and walked over to him. They looked at Carmen. "She's a beautiful young girl," Sukii whispered moving hair out of Carmen's eyes. Yuko smelled her and helt her nose, "She wreaks of innocents!" Sukii smiled, "Get used to it sister. Now Shadow your late. You had me worried half to death about the kingdom." Shadow bowed, Carmen still in hand. "Sorry me lord but I had to get the timming just right."

"But the timming wasn't right because you're late!" she yelled...she calmed herself. "I know but this one is a fighter. She said curses even I havn't even heard before!" Shadow complained. Yuko started to laugh, "You got cursed out by a child? Pathetic Shadow." Sukii flipped her hair, "What's her name?"

"Carmen me lord," he replied. Sukii smiled, "Carmen...I like that name. So, does she have love for the boy or not?" Shadow nodded, "Yes but I'm not sure if he likes her the same way she likes him. Because he might think of her as a best friend, but she has it bad." Yuko shook her head and tsked, "Poor human. Pathetic human hormones. I see no use for them." Carmen's eyes started to flicker open.

"Where amI and- YOU! Let go of me!" Carmen yelled trying to break free from Shadow's grasp. Shadow let her go. "Where am I? Where's Shane?" Carmen asked. "I like her," Yuko whispered, "Fiesty girls are only my friends." Sukii walked forward, "You're in the Kingdom of the Black Feather." Carmen looked Sukii in the eye, "I don't want to be here! I want to go home with Shane!" Shadow grabbed her wrist, " That's enough now."

Carmen pulled away, "I've had enough of you, go to hell!" Yuko started laughing. Sukii glared at her, "I'm glad you think this is funny sister." Yuko shrugged, "What she's funny!" Carmen tried to make a run for it, Sukii grabbed her wrist. "Let go!" Carmen yelled. Sukii squezed, " I only make orders." Carmen fell to her knees, "Aaa! Let go please!" Sukii squezed harder, "Now you will learn who I am and how I do things around MY FUCKING KINGDOM!" Carmen screammed, "OKAY!" Sukii let go.

Carmen laid on the floor holding her wrist. "Shadow put her in the white room and give her the proper clothing," Sukii said flipping her black bangs. Shadow bowed and went to pick up Carmen. "Don't fucking touch me I know how to walk!" she wailed. Carmen stood holding her wrist. Her hazel brown eyes were filled with sorrow. "Let's go," she said as Shadow led her down the hall.


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sweet! not bad at all! keep writting. : D

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

For twins they sure do have different personalities, which is good, it brings diversity into the story. I'm ignoring the spelling errors once again, to get straight to the point, this is actually sum good piece of work and I'm just fiending fo da next chapter

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

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thanx

Can't wait to read more.

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