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The White One Is Evil

Novel By: WhatIsInAName
Fantasy


Haha where do I start.
Well I basically got the idea for this story from the Video
"The white one is evil" By Elliot Minor.

Elliot Minor is a 5 piece band from England who's music genre is like Rock/Classical.
They are really good. If you want to check them out.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpo7A5xUNmM that the video in question.

This is their myspace if you want to have a look.

www.myspace.com/elliotminor

Please check them out because they are totally under-rated.

Anyway... my main character Alexander is based around Alex Davies who is one of the main singers in Elliot minor. At the time I confess I had the biggggggggest crush on him. I wrote this before and after I met him after one of his gigs. He's gorgeous haha. So I thought I'd upload this and see what you guys thought. I'd been really proud of it and showed my friend it and he had not gave me a very positive review. He told me my characters were not very well developed and like my grammar etc was terrible lol. I was like oh well.
So yeah... please let me know what you think. I fell in love with my characters and I really thought this was a good story but I suppose one mans treasure is another mans trash. Anyway please give it a read and let me know what you think... Im going to upload all the chapters now. View table of contents...

Chapters:

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Submitted: May 22, 2008    Reads: 97    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   



Chapter 1

The man paced up and down his bedroom in his dressing gown, his wife and a man in a cloak standing close by.
“ Are you quite sure?”  The man asked.
The cloaked man nodded solemnly.
The man in the dressing gown seemed to start breathing heavily and threw the tray that had been sitting on his bed at a blue tapestry on the wall.
“ Really, dear.” the wife said appearing to buff her nails.
The man was clearing fuming. His face was reaching an alarming colour of red.
“ You may go now, thank you for the information.” said the wife calmly to the cloaked man adding a fake smile. The cloaked man bowed and exited the room.

The wife of the man strode next to her husband before sitting on a fine chair next to him.
The man was much older than the woman and was largely less attractive. However, she had very pointed features which seemed to show a snootiness of character.

“ I don’t know how you can be so calm about this! You do realise that this could wreck everything..”
“ My dear, you are next in line to the thrown, you are safe.”
“ I am not the dead king’s son though am I !”
“ But this child this…man speaks of was born out of wedlock. Surely..”
“ No Sylvia it makes no difference.. A king’s son is a king’s son.”
“ How do you not know that this a lie? A ploy from your enemies to scare you?”
“ Mr Wood is a trusted spy, he would not lie to me. Besides I knew of my uncle’s affairs.”
“ Well surely if you didn’t know of this child then many others will not have.”
“ What if the child knows? What if its his secret plan to rise up weeks before the coronation and steal the crown right from under our feet. We must do something drastic”
“ Oh Fredrick darling don’t be so melodramatic.”
“ Listen to me woman! Do you want all these jewels, fine clothes and fancy living to disappear. If this boy becomes king we lose everything and there will be no more power.”
“Of course not but what if he knows nothing of this and isn’t even a threat.”
“ Well at least this way there will be no chance of him finding out.. Ever.”
Sylvia bit her lip “ Perhaps you are right. What do you plan to do?”
“ I’m not sure. A death would be scandalous if linked back to me… but there are ways..”
“Oh husband you are devious.”
“ I hear the boy is of an impressionable age.”
“ Mr Wood said he was only 17.”
“ Indeed a perfect age! I will seek out the white witch and order her to help me.”
“The white witch? But she died years ago. What can she do?”
“ She is dead? Well.. There must be others like her, her family. I will find a female from her line, and when I do…she will be key in my plan.”
“But how husband?”
“ It is a well known fact , that the women of the White witches have great powers of seduction. I believe she will come in handy.”


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Comments:

That. Was. One of the most awesomest chapters I have ever read. Good work!

Posted: May 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Aww thank you so much :D.

I hope you'll like all of it :)

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Wowza
I like it
I don't have time to read it all right now but i'll be sure to read it when I Have time
:)
-Ally

Posted: May 22, 2008

Author Comment:

aww Im glad you like it :D
no worries :)
just whenever you get the chance :D

*In awe* I think...this is getting a like it . Yep , for SURE !!! 'trusted spy' yeahhh , and as for the white witches , I can already tell this is heading into an interesting direction ! I plano on reading the whole !

Posted: May 22, 2008

Author Comment:

aww Im glad you like it haha :D xxxxxxx

haha dont feel you have to read it all in one go haha.

there are 22 chapters :P ^-^

Alright ! So I reread this and listened to the song ! Now I understand this chapter better . Oh right , and her name's Sylvia ! How could I forget ? lol . Time to read the last chapter now ...

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

haha :D
yayy.
lol hehe its easy done... she's a really minor character lol.

cool :)



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