Tags:
fantasy,
love,
clash,
princes,
witches,
spells,
magic,
seduction,
secret plans,
royalty,
owls,
destructive
Haha where do I start.
Well I basically got the idea for this story from the Video
"The white one is evil" By Elliot Minor.
Elliot Minor is a 5 piece band from England who's music genre is like Rock/Classical.
They are really good. If you want to check them out.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpo7A5xUNmM that the video in question.
This is their myspace if you want to have a look.
www.myspace.com/elliotminor
Please check them out because they are totally under-rated.
Anyway... my main character Alexander is based around Alex Davies who is one of the main singers in Elliot minor. At the time I confess I had the biggggggggest crush on him. I wrote this before and after I met him after one of his gigs. He's gorgeous haha. So I thought I'd upload this and see what you guys thought. I'd been really proud of it and showed my friend it and he had not gave me a very positive review. He told me my characters were not very well developed and like my grammar etc was terrible lol. I was like oh well.
So yeah... please let me know what you think. I fell in love with my characters and I really thought this was a good story but I suppose one mans treasure is another mans trash. Anyway please give it a read and let me know what you think... Im going to upload all the chapters now.
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Submitted: May 22, 2008
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Alexander had been forgetting all his chores and spending every waking moment around Isabella. No moment was spared where they could be kissing. This annoyed Luna a lot. She didn’t trust Isabella and she definitely didn’t like anything that came in between Alexander and his lessons.
They began to get closer. Much closer than Luna had anticipated.
“I’m in love with you Isabella” Alexander said. Wrapping his arms around her small frame.
“No..”
“No?”
“Why do you have to make things complicated Alexander?” Isabella said suddenly and pushed her way out of his arms.
“I don’t understand. I love you Isabella. Don’t you love me?” Alexander said slowly.
“You cant love me.” she said solemnly
“… is there something you’re not telling me Isabella?”
“I can’t play with your heart, and you shouldn’t play with mine.”
“I don’t understand…”
“I’m betrothed Alex!”
Alexander simply looked at her in shock.
“I’m to be married in a few months from now. On my 18th birthday.”
“To Whom.. Do you love this man?”
“ To my master.”
“ What?!” Alexander said the sense of extreme confusion rising in his voice.
“ You remember I told you about ranks. I came from a poor, penniless family Alexander. They sold me… for bread money. For bread money Alexander! I was sold to my master as a baby. He has the rights to me as a guardian and on my 18th birthday he will have the rights to me as a wife.” Isabella said sadly. Her tears beginning to drown her eyes.
“No… you can stay here. With me!” Alexander said holding on to her arms in desperation.
“ He will find me. He will hurt you. I’m not worth this!” Isabella said breaking down.
“Listen to me. You are worth every star in the sky. Every bird in this forest. You are worth the world to me.” Alexander said breathing deeply. He pulled her into his chest.
“I Love You. I Love you.” Alexander said wiping the tears from her eyes.
“ I Love you too… I’m bad news.”
“I Don’t care.” Alexander kissed Isabella passionately on the mouth. She kissed him back.
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Comments:
"Listen to me. You are worth every star in the sky. Every bird in this forest. You are worth the world to me..." the plot is experiencing a strange cheese flavor , could we please add some more salt? And bitterness..?
Well ! What to say...Alex . You're depressing Luna ! And Isabella . Does she have no shaaaame ?!?!?! GRR !! Must...Read...ONWARD!!!
Posted: May 22, 2008
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