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The White One Is Evil

Novel By: WhatIsInAName
Fantasy


Haha where do I start.
Well I basically got the idea for this story from the Video
"The white one is evil" By Elliot Minor.

Elliot Minor is a 5 piece band from England who's music genre is like Rock/Classical.
They are really good. If you want to check them out.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpo7A5xUNmM that the video in question.

This is their myspace if you want to have a look.

www.myspace.com/elliotminor

Please check them out because they are totally under-rated.

Anyway... my main character Alexander is based around Alex Davies who is one of the main singers in Elliot minor. At the time I confess I had the biggggggggest crush on him. I wrote this before and after I met him after one of his gigs. He's gorgeous haha. So I thought I'd upload this and see what you guys thought. I'd been really proud of it and showed my friend it and he had not gave me a very positive review. He told me my characters were not very well developed and like my grammar etc was terrible lol. I was like oh well.
So yeah... please let me know what you think. I fell in love with my characters and I really thought this was a good story but I suppose one mans treasure is another mans trash. Anyway please give it a read and let me know what you think... Im going to upload all the chapters now. View table of contents...

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Submitted: May 22, 2008    Reads: 24    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


Isabella watched the still body from the carriage. She was being held where she sat by two of the watchers. She felt all her burning guilt, love and hatred eating away at her soul.
“Alexander..” she whispered sadly. She was beginning to feel very sick now. The world seemed to be spinning. What had she done.

Across from her sat O’Hare and the King.

The King adjusted his gloves. The gloves that had touched Alexander in his last few moments.
She glanced at them in resentment.
“Now… girl. Do you realise what you have done?”
Isabella stayed quiet. She stared out of the window. She was looking at Alexander. She wished he would move. She wished he could still be alive.

“DO YOU DARE IGNORE YOUR KING WHEN HE SPEAKS TO YOU.” O’Hare bellowed.

“HE IS NO KING TO ME! ALEXANDER IS THE KING! THE RIGHTFUL KING!” Isabella shouted.

O’Hare slapped Isabella.
“Insolent girl.” he said gruffly.

The King raised his right hand as if to indicate “quiet”
“That’s quiet enough O’Hare.” He said slowly.

The King leaned in close to Isabella.
“You will find that even if Alexander was the rightful King. He has not lived to rule the day has he.”
The watchers around them laughed. A sadistic laugh seemed to fill the carriage. Scarring Isabella. Alexander was gone.

“Well… what are we going to do with this sour lemon then. She is hardly wife material O’Hare. How can good children be born from loins that call for a dead man’s love.”

Isabella wasn’t listening.
O’Hare looked incredibly embarrassed.

“I do not want these damaged goods.” O’Hare said looking Isabella up and down.
Isabella looked around suddenly.
“Well my dear,” The kings said in a patronising tone. “ If Mr O’Hare will not protect you or claim you as his own. Then I am afraid that your life falls to me.”

O’Hare looked away.

The King’s tone was no longer patronising. But took on a heartless evil tone.

“Do you know what the penalty is for disobeying your King. Death, by way of decapitation.”

The King paused to soak in the fear in Isabella’s eyes.

“Or… shall I keep you as a gift for my lovely watchers,” he said pointing to the men beside her, they gave an appreciative laugh. “They get so lonely.”

“I’d rather have the death.” She said with all the strength she could muster.

They all laughed.

“Ah.. She has chosen then. When we get back stick her in the prison. We will carry out her death tomorrow. Make it public. Bring all those little poor children to the front row” The king said cruelly.

Everyone laughed and with that the carriage drove away.

Isabella watched Alexander get further and further away from her. She wanted to cry but she wouldn’t.
All she could do was wait for tomorrow.


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Comments:

'What shall we do with this sour lemon ?' I sure as hell know you shouldn't into the plot out fine young writer over here's been stirring up . Reading this was creepy . It glued my eyes to the scrreeeeen ! AH ! It's late at night . But then again.. So Isabella really did love Al after all (pointing out obvious to spoil obviousness for future readers) and this plot had become thicker than clay...can;t mix it anymore...

Posted: May 22, 2008

Author Comment:

haha :D

glad you are liking it so far :D



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