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The White One Is Evil

Novel By: WhatIsInAName
Fantasy


Haha where do I start.
Well I basically got the idea for this story from the Video
"The white one is evil" By Elliot Minor.

Elliot Minor is a 5 piece band from England who's music genre is like Rock/Classical.
They are really good. If you want to check them out.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpo7A5xUNmM that the video in question.

This is their myspace if you want to have a look.

www.myspace.com/elliotminor

Please check them out because they are totally under-rated.

Anyway... my main character Alexander is based around Alex Davies who is one of the main singers in Elliot minor. At the time I confess I had the biggggggggest crush on him. I wrote this before and after I met him after one of his gigs. He's gorgeous haha. So I thought I'd upload this and see what you guys thought. I'd been really proud of it and showed my friend it and he had not gave me a very positive review. He told me my characters were not very well developed and like my grammar etc was terrible lol. I was like oh well.
So yeah... please let me know what you think. I fell in love with my characters and I really thought this was a good story but I suppose one mans treasure is another mans trash. Anyway please give it a read and let me know what you think... Im going to upload all the chapters now. View table of contents...

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Submitted: May 22, 2008    Reads: 23    Comments: 1    Likes: 1   


Alexander lay under the stars full of rage and confusion.
He didn’t want to trust anyone . He didn’t want to try.
“Me be a king?” He thought to himself “What good could  I do?!”

But then.. He remembered what had been said to him.


“ Well… there are many people without food, without homes, getting sick and dying.”
“ Isn’t anyone going to do anything about it?”
“ No. Our King will do nothing.”



“I am a servant ... The lowest of the low. The more money you have in this world - the more power - the more privilege. People like me…could be killed for merely speaking out of turn to someone of high rank”


“Your father was a good man. He believed the collective lives of the people in his kingdom were in need of a good king and you and your  mother did not live in poverty. You would be fine without him…”


“He wanted to rule as well as his father had and feared the crown falling into the wrong hands”

“…He kept you and your mother here protect you from being killed. It would be the easiest way to hurt him.”


Alexander then felt a pang of guilt. He had been selfish. He sat up and looked around him. He could help those people. He could be a good King. After all it was what his father had protected him for, and what he had wanted from him.

Alexander sighed and lifted himself up off the ground. He took the carved whistle from his pocket and blew. The music soared up into the sky once more. A few seconds later Luna appeared. She landed quietly on the stump of a tree, waiting for an explanation.

“I’m Sorry Luna.” Alexander said with great difficulty.
“Are you ready to be a man Alexander?”
“Yes.”
“Good. Because the King’s coronation is tomorrow.”

Luna cawed happily.
“Tomorrow… you shall prove yourself.”


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Comments:

Alright then ! King Alex , here we goooooo !

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehehe :D

Oh yes ^-^



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