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The White One Is Evil

Novel By: WhatIsInAName
Fantasy


Haha where do I start.
Well I basically got the idea for this story from the Video
"The white one is evil" By Elliot Minor.

Elliot Minor is a 5 piece band from England who's music genre is like Rock/Classical.
They are really good. If you want to check them out.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rpo7A5xUNmM that the video in question.

This is their myspace if you want to have a look.

www.myspace.com/elliotminor

Please check them out because they are totally under-rated.

Anyway... my main character Alexander is based around Alex Davies who is one of the main singers in Elliot minor. At the time I confess I had the biggggggggest crush on him. I wrote this before and after I met him after one of his gigs. He's gorgeous haha. So I thought I'd upload this and see what you guys thought. I'd been really proud of it and showed my friend it and he had not gave me a very positive review. He told me my characters were not very well developed and like my grammar etc was terrible lol. I was like oh well.
So yeah... please let me know what you think. I fell in love with my characters and I really thought this was a good story but I suppose one mans treasure is another mans trash. Anyway please give it a read and let me know what you think... Im going to upload all the chapters now. View table of contents...

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Submitted: May 22, 2008    Reads: 21    Comments: 1    Likes: 1   


As the sun rose the King had his watchers pin up notices on various streets.
“Beheading today. 12:30. City Square.”

The king to be sat in his room smugly, excited about his new power that could not be taken from him.

His wife began getting dressed.
A maid was tightening her corset.
“I dislike beheadings husband. There is too much blood.”
“There is nothing better my love. Short. Sharp. Justice.”
“It would not be me cleaning up that mess.”
“You are too rich to ever need to do that.”

Sylvia turned to the maid.
“Leave us.”

The maid ran off quickly.

“Are you looking forward to becoming queen?” Fredrick said as he twisted his wife’s hair to one side. Exposing a lightly tanned neck.
“Oh yes. To officially have people running after me. For me.” she said.
Fredrick kissed Sylvia’s neck.

“I have something for you.” He began.

He picked up a large box on their bed.

“A present. I was wondering when you would get me a new thing. Thing’s go out of fashion so soon.”
“Ah.. But this is not an ordinary present.”

He opened up the box to expose a beautiful diamond encrusted full necklace.

“Royal Jewellery. Oh Husband.” she said ecstatically.

He put the necklace on her.

He lay his hands on her shoulders.

“You will use your new power for the first time today. As I will allow you to give the signal for the execution of the girl.”

“Thank you husband.” She said with the same sadistic pleasure in her voice that her husband had.

The Kingdom would not stand a chance if these people, enraptured by power were to become the rulers of the land.


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Comments:

Wait..I just realized you didn't give the Fredrick's wife a name . Ha ! Ahem... Ah - I can smell the victory already...

Posted: May 23, 2008

Author Comment:

I did.. its sylvia :P

:) xxxxxx



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