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Vengeance, a wolf story.

Novel By: xxstuckinfantesyxx
Fantasy


Tags: wolf, war, bloody, fighting, sad

A white wolf and her pack set out for war.
(im not so good at summarys) so just read to find out what its about (: View table of contents...

Chapters:

1

Submitted: Aug 25, 2008    Reads: 64    Comments: 4    Likes: 1   


                                                   Vengeance

Interlouge:

A majestic white wolf strides across the open fields,ten wolves folowing behind. She twitches her nose, catching the sent of other wolves. She shot her tail up and curled her lip. A deep defending growl emerdged from her. She glanced behind her at the pack. She slowly nodded.  A wolf with a deep grey pelt crept foward. He pointed his nose towards the sky and let out a loud howl, the other wolves then joined. The white wolf angled her head and signaled everyone to run foward. The grey wolf nodded and let out a vicious bark...They charged.

The white wolves paws pounded the dirt as she glided across the fields, her muscles tensing. Her percing eyes gazed upon the horizion. Barks and battle crys were heard in the distance. The she-wolf stopped short and sat on her haunches. She squinted her eyes. Another howl was heard. She had to continue alone. Glancing back at her pack she said farewell. She closed her eyes and took a deep breath. The hairs on her back rising. She licked her chops and arose. She took one last glance at her pack, and ran off. Soon the dark midnight skye swallowed her up and she was no longer visable. The pack waited silently and listend.

Chapter One- Taint Your Hearts.

Chaoticstream stood alone, desperatly awaiting her death. She gazed into the darkness. A black figure moved foward. Chaoticstream makes her move. She quickly leaps foward. Her claws grabbing chunks of fur and pushing another wolf down. She sinks her teeth into his flesh. A lone cry peirces the dead silence of night. Crimson fluid is realesed from the wolfs punctured vain. She sunk her teeth in deeper. The wolf mercifuly cried shattering silence. Scarlet water soaks and stains her ruffled fur. She closed her eyes and cringed her jaw. She heard an eerie whisper..." And let freely flow the blood." Chaoticstream glanced around, and tightend her grip. The wolf yellped and screamed. She finally realesd him. The wolf collasped and was silent. Chaoticstream shook her head, blood speackled her snow-white fur. She felt no pitty. Her heart leaped as she howled. Her pack heard and begain to run to her.

She took deep breaths and looked foward. She seen figures charging towards her. Chaoticstream smerked. She waited pationtly. Her enimes pack arrives with a group of snarls, barks and yellping. Chaoticstream bared her teeth and growled. She darted foward, leaping from paw to paw. She snarled and shifted her body. She snapped at one of the wolves, skimming its flesh. The wolf snapped back. Chaoticstream pulled herself back, then lunged herself foward, crashing into the wolf and bitting his neack. The wolf tried to yelp but didnt have the breath to bark.

Suddenly, Chaoticstream felt pain surge through her body. She quickly released her grip of the wolf and took heavy breathes. She glanced behind her, a great brown wolf had sunk its teeth into her rear leg. She barked as she spun around and locked her jaw onto the dogs face. Blood sprayed onto her face. The wolf yellped and pulled back, his eye getting torn from Chaoticstreams fangs. He panted and fel to the floor, cringing and begging for mercy. Chaoticstream snorted and ripped her fangs out and shook the blood off her chops. The wolf screamed and burried his face under his paws. Chaoticstreams eyes glanced to and thro. Then she leaped onto another wolf and clawed its back. "When was her pack ariving?" She thought. She snarled as blood rolled off her tounge. The wolf fell to the ground and defensivly yellped.

Chaoticstream leaped off his back and jogged foward. She looked at the remaining 4 wolves. She begain to pant, she was loosing her energy. One wolf suddenly growled and leaped foward at Chaoticstream. She jumped out of the way and stumbled onto the ground. The wolf landed and imedeatly spun around and darted towards her before she got the chance to stand. The wolf flung himself foward and knapped at her skin. She tightend her muscles, trying to avoid barking. he landed, then at the same time they both leaped foward. Chaoticstreams canines slicing his neack. She landed and feircly barked, blood flying off her teeth.

The enimy wolf showed no fear and bared his bloody teeth. His gums were faling apart and red saliva dripped from his maw. Chaoticstream leaped foward and bit into his jaw. Maroon blood squirted out and drenched Chaoticstreams pelt. The wolf yellped and struggled to get free. He pulled away and tore his jaw. He still had the ability to bite. he growled angerly and grabbed her esophagus. Chaoticstream chocked on her own blood, then slowly coughed it up.

She felt her breathes shortenand she slowly fel to the ground. her heart rate slowed down. Struggling to breath, she heard defending scarfs in the distance. She tryed to swallow and coughed up more blood. The wolf tightend his jaw. Chaoticstream choked. She started to close her eyes. Suddenly one of her pack members grabbed him bye his rear leg and dragged him off their wounded leader. The rest of the pack pilled on him, and finished him off. Chaoticstream struggled to stand, pain surged through her. Every heartbeat hurt. She managed to stand. After 2 seconds, she let out a whimper and collasped. She closed her eyes and heard visious barks as her pack invaded her enimies. She started to drift of...

Dose Chaoticstream live? Stay tunned for chapter 2 to find out...


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Comments:

cool action stuff, you are a great action/adventure writer. i love how you discribed the blood, keep me updated

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much !
and i sure will (:

Wow, you really know how ot paint a picture!

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Hehe thanks alot :)

wow i wish i had your writing talent at 12! wonderful job! i love wolves :) theyre so amazingly amazing! haha. cant wait to read more! please let me know when you update!

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much! I guess my practicing paid off.
I most deffinatly will keep you updated.
Thanks for reading!

Hi!

I noticed something in this that was in Chapter 3 of Dragons World. "The wolf mercifuly cried shattering silence." I'm not sure if merciful is what you meant. I just thought I'd mention it. Word choice is strictly your decision, I'm just bringing what I find odd about it to your attention. And I think you mean prologue, not interlouge.

A few quick spelling corrections: enemy, fell, fro, nipped, fiercely.

You must think that I'm the pickiest person when it comes to writing and have to be perfect at it. Just remember I'm only trying to help (because people best improve through criticism, negative and positive) and I remain infinitely impressed with the level you're writing at, particularly at 12. ^_^

I love the entire fight sequence. It painted a pretty picture of crimson, red, and maroon in my mind. Oh, one more suggestion: snapped is a good word for fights. ;) I look forward to more fights, keep me posted.

As always, many good thoughts to you,
Javelin

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Its okay, honestly i like it when you point out all my mistakes, so i could learn from them :)
And thanks for all your wonderful advice you have given me! I plan to use it in the future. Your like my Advice Buddy! :D haha.
Once again, thanks for the advice. And there most likley will be many more fights coming up :).
Thanks for reading and im glad you liked tit, and i surly will keep you posted :)



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