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Submitted: Jul 24, 2008 Reads: 58 Comments: 13 Likes: 9
I come out at night,
To give all a freight,
To end their dreams that are so dear,
And leave them all in fear.
I crawl in the shadows,
I remove your soul from the gallows.
I steal your happy dream,
And replace them with thoughts that make you scream!
I am not insane!
I know I am not afraid of a simple plane!
Unlike you,
Who dreams of plane crashes that won’t come true!
Am I evil?
Am I believable?
What am I thinking about?
That is for you to figure out…
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Hey Idiot :) lol.
I really like the uncertainty and huge gothic quality of this poem. You did a great job, and you show a ton of potential!
Take care.
Regan
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Hey,
I love how it sounds all creepy and such. Like the Boogeyman is after me...haha :]
Posted: Jul 30, 2008
It's definitely interesting! I love poetry and your mood is a wonderful kind of "scary" that describes a hidden story. I do hope you know what I mean, because sometimes I ramble. I really enjoyed the dark and mysterious feel to it!
"Inspiration is not something to be found, but discovered."
-Elizabeth May Lines
Posted: Jul 31, 2008
nice poem! I like all the questions in it because that is what life is isn't it? a bunch of unanswered questions that we have to figure out on our own... lol
anyway good job and keep up the good work!!!
Posted: Jul 31, 2008
ahh makes me think even when i dont try. quite good and definitely one of the poems i take a better liking to. and its not crap :)
Posted: Aug 1, 2008
Your poem Is rather interesting, the words are well chosen and set an interesting mood. I could picture a story along these lines. Hmmm mabye you should write one. Just a short one. I would most likley read it.
Keep up the good work and continue writing, you have a gift.
Posted: Aug 3, 2008
This poem is absolutely awesome!! Why would you second guess your ability to put thoughts on paper? You mesmorized me--thank you!
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
crap????? nonsense!! tis is gud:D ya goin for gothic style? or more like the night before christmas kinda creep? anyhow, i'm still reading valescar(i-am-not-giving-up-on-fenrir!) just that i might be slow(damn piling assignments) lol! see ya in a bit;)
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
Very cool,and Awesome!! Great Job!!
Posted: Aug 16, 2008
hi, again! you are sure an emo writer...and that suits you most. great description and details. short but still meaningful.keep up the good work!
Posted: Sep 13, 2008
coolieo.
Is this about the boogey man or you? lol.
Posted: Sep 20, 2008
Really cool.Kinda like the Sandman.I really enjoyed this one.I like dark poems.They keep you entertained.I think they're also so vivid.You have a true gift and talent.Don't give it up and don't lose it.
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
very cool how do u really come up with stuff like this is this what you dream i guess thats for me to figure out!
Posted: Oct 31, 2008
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