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A poem I started to write for a friend. Descriptions of a Dragon. View table of contents...
Submitted: Aug 18, 2007 Reads: 93 Comments: 13 Likes: 5
Author's Note- I would like to add more if anyone has suggestions.
Dragon's Blaze
A heart of flame
with scales so bright
this creature roams your dreams at night
Their fire burns
and their talons flash
enemies fall with one great slash
Wings of wonder open wide
a slender tail whips across the sky
a magical figure flies on high
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That was a very nice poem very full of vivid imagery..the only thing I can think is maybe a little more description of the dragon itself more detail.
Posted: Aug 18, 2007
Very nice, i'll be waiting to find out just what gets added to that next ^^ too bad i'm horrible at poetry >>
well done
Hawk ^^
Posted: Aug 19, 2007
i love dragons! their seemingly immortal existence makes them shine so much more! I loved the descriptions, they really do have a heart of flame(i love using hearts of beasts; hence my name). Im not exactly a strong fan of poetry (mostly because i catch onto the message like the "swift" sloth). Thankyou for becoming my fan, im glad you like my work, and your an art student.....a category that i would put myself in. Ride hard and swift on your own Dragon(writing, in this case), i wanna see more fantasy!!
Posted: Aug 30, 2007
DarkFairy8907:
Well written and interestingly presented. Liked the 3 line verses with lines 2 & 3 rhyming. Shows talent and creativity. On your part. Gave it a "5".
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
Posted: Aug 31, 2007
great poem, sorry it took me soo long to read it. but i am back now so on to the mext. but once again, great job. i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted: Sep 2, 2007
But if you need a description for the dragon then how about something like:
"Ebony wings and fiery eyes,
a soul as dark or darker then night,
A majestic creature of rage, hate and spite."
I'm guessing you wouldn't want to use that exactly, but you could do something like that. I hope I helped! If you need more suggestions then just leave a comment on my profile page. :)
Posted: Nov 1, 2007
the tail whips
through the night
as its claws slash
you out of sight
i like the middle part the best, and you can use the above with out giving me credit but its not that good
With its powerfull legs
it jumps into flight
you can use that too but it needs two more lines
Posted: Nov 4, 2007
0.0 wow..lol
i had so many images running through my mind of dragons when I read this.
GREAT job! ^^
**mandy[massacre**
Posted: Jan 16, 2008
sounds like a poem dat you would say fast and quick. i like it cause dragons are tight. {if there good} i might make a story with dragons on it. thanks you might've gave me an idea.
Posted: May 13, 2008
again....your wirting is simply amazing
Posted: Sep 17, 2008
Sounds great, nice imagery. If you wanted to add more, i would suggest something about it flying on the winds. I get the feeling you're trying to portray how majestic it is as well as fearsome. So I would put something more about graceful flight, and something dark to balance it out, like fire in the eyes or something. Maybe i'm way off base, i hope i helped. Still, great writing.
Posted: Oct 4, 2008
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Posted: Nov 1, 2008
I LOVE DRAGONS!!! They are so passionate and inspiring and loving and cool and awesomea and amazing and sweet and brave and heroic and beautiful and peaceful and fantastic and wonderful and fully deadly weapons with pretty eyes and pretty smiles and smart and so wavable! This poem was awesome!
Posted: Nov 10, 2008
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