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When Time Stops

Poem By: Keepers River
Fantasy


Tags: avi, time, death, chained, river

I wrote this after reading Punishment's 'Breaking the Hourglass' Actually, it was 99% of my comment! So here it is, now you don't have to be reading all the comments to see it! Enjoy! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 29, 2008    Reads: 22    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


She watches them,
from her chains.
They have won,
says a voice like rain,
they have defeated time.
And you are Avi,
goddess of Time.
And so, here you remain,
till someone breaks
Those lovers fair.
Avi's calm snaps,
She falls to the ground,
arms upraised by her
cruel, iron jailer.
tears and sobs ring together
in the misty Nothingness.
No, she screams, yet they heard it
as a whisper.
Please, she wails,
yet they do not believe,
caught in each other.
Then Death turns her head,
from where she is caught,
right next to Time.
Shhh, she croons, tears blacker than night,
shhh...
The one with voice like rain,
leaves a rose on the black sweep
of Death's hair.
It falls past her ivory skin,
to the sleeveless dress,
it's silk stained with tears and blood.
yet still Avi weeps, not bothering to breathe
anymore.
Soon, Avi is chained to a different misstress.
Death.
And the rest of the world,
never die, yet are still in pain.
the River slowly ceases to flow,
and the Lady of the River,
with voice of rain,
lies on her deathbed.
Then she sees.
The Lion.
And she and Death and the world,
dare to hope again.


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Comments:

Wow.....very emotiontal..the imagery..the imagery....I'm literally crying because of it. IT IS BEAUTIFUL *SOB*. Great, great, imagery, and feeling. It just slammed me between the eyes, I never saw it coming. Is Avi in some mythological religion really goddess of time or is she in your imagination?
I like how avi is chained ot death. After all, time is determined by death.
Great job as usual!!!!

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Naw, Avi lives in my little realm/imagination. My Death had a name. I thinks it was Luna 'cuz when he became Death (after her mother) she gained a new form. In her old form she had silverish hair. Sorry if I'm rambling love. Heeheeehee. I thinks I needs some sleepy time!!!
With CAT FOOD,
KR



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