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Where elves go to dance and sing when world stills. View table of contents...
Submitted: Aug 14, 2008 Reads: 27 Comments: 1 Likes: 0
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The flow of the rhyme scheme is a bit off in places, but over all I love the imagery. It's sad that the elves got driven out of their home. Sort of leaves you with a sense of loneliness and empathy. With a little work and a few more lines. This could be more of a poetic saga. I love it.
Posted: Aug 15, 2008
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