Wow. It starts all normal and the last line just changes everything. I really like this.

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

Wow,Totally love it. Small correction though, in the sentence with "I love how she talks about me with her friend like in(I'm) not around, when i am" think you may have meant to write (I'M). Other than that, great work.

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

this is really good!

i hung on every word you wrote!!

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

She seems so real.....because the things u love about her seem so real. Well done. I like, "I love how she pretends to be scared to be close to me." This shows a level of comlexity, but at the same time its about innocence too, ie "I love her honesty, she will never cheat on me." The ending is great!... and not expected.
Well done.

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

Really great peice take care juliet

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

really good poem!
Your ending is great. The whole time your reading, your expceting a cute little poem about your girlfriend... then at the end, it turns the persepctive completely around. it seems sad, that he really doesn't have that love in life.
great work!

PS- A poem with a simmilar ending, would be "But You Didn't". It's on my page. I think you will like it, it seems to be along your line of poetry.

I loved your poem!

Xx Ash xX

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

I love it, it makes me think of how you daydream of someone you like, but know that you'll never be together. Or a fantasy lover which you indicated in the end. Excellent poem.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

she isn't real??? sounds real enough. has to be in your head and heart before reality maybe. nice one reaper ***********************

Posted: Nov 29, 2007

its absolutely beautiful mysterious and heartbreaking well thought out and undetected. You have a way with words.

Posted: Nov 29, 2007

Dats really Gd I didnt have a clue it would end like that LOL

Posted: Dec 1, 2007

A slap on the face to bring you back to reality hahah, enjoyable, and really unexpected. It would mess with anyone's mind hahaha. You did a good job with bringing her to life, no one would believe otherwise if you hadn't told us. My favourite line "I love how she pretends to be scared to be close to me". Man i loved those times, innocent and clean love.
Good one.

Posted: Dec 2, 2007

OMG! I LOVE♥ this. I know exactly how you feel. Great Read.

--Kcy:]

Posted: Dec 31, 2007

WOW good work i love the twist at the end, i love your writing keep going!

Posted: Feb 15, 2008

Loved it! It's like you're kind of just sitting there trying to imagine all you're saying then the last line comes... and it's like you kinda shake your head and say 'Oh. Well. That changes everything.' hehe. liked it a lot. =) Mandy

Posted: Feb 28, 2008

aaw man u really poor dude
i dont have a person i love too so dont worry oh how i wish i had someone as nice as that except a boy...
Straight to the heart to me...

BurnedSoul

i could really feel your lonelyness seriously man!

Posted: Feb 28, 2008

hehe. I remember those days. Thanks reaper you started a flood of great memories in me with that one. Love is simply love at your age. When you get older people can get a bit more screwed up and things never quite feel the way things did. I always miss it and I guess I always will. Some of you guys on here are tight buds try not to forget one another as life throws you curve balls. Later man. You're very talented and introspective.

Posted: Mar 3, 2008

wow. i loved it. It's like a bittersweet kind if thing. it was so cute how you described eveything about her. and then the ending was just like omgg r u serious. but no worries maybe we'll all meet the person of our dreams that'll love us no matter what someday. i really liked it. i want to show it to all my friends and show them how much of a unique poem this is. =) nice work.

Posted: Mar 5, 2008

You commented on my poem 'why i love her'.. i have posted a sequel to it called Her...... i hope you read it!

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

Wow. Astounding. I love it.
MA

Posted: Mar 11, 2008

OMG that is such a wonderful poem. i wish i couldwrite something like that.

Posted: Mar 12, 2008

OMG that is such a wonderful poem. i wish i couldwrite something like that.

Posted: Mar 12, 2008

OMG!!!
I like this one Reaper, and now before I go to bed, since it is almost 9pm here and I am EXHAUSTED, I will read the other two you recommended! :D

Posted: Mar 14, 2008

WOW!!!
another fantastic poem i wish i could write poems like u , u do such a gr8 job btw if we eva write peoms in english u need 2 help me lol u always make the peoms so sweet but so sad sometimes but they r always so gd u do such a gr8 job i bet u become a famous author someday and if u dont i will b very supirsed well done another fab poem!!! dont stop writing poems cos u do such a gr8 job and tell me if u write another 1 about the girl ok ill read it
i wish i could write peoms like u ur english teachers will always b impressed lol i loved it!!! keep up the gr8 work!!! 6 out of 5 stars ****** lol

Posted: Mar 15, 2008

i loved it but it kind of made me laugh because instead of saying "sweet" you said "sweat" !!!

Sorry for laughing but I really loved this poem. It was a great bit of irony there at the end.

Posted: Mar 23, 2008

great stuff, a+ i guess *wonders, but laughs* truly a a++ =]]

Posted: Jun 26, 2008