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I watched the world end in a nightmare!!! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 27, 2008    Reads: 30    Comments: 2    Likes: 1   



In dreams my feet are wet with sand,
By salty pools of earth and stone,
I contemplate the souring height,
Of summits cupped within my hand,

Their bodies coated dreary greys,
Soaking wraps of writhing mist,
Makes quieter lonely amplitudes,
And shortens days,

Further still the bleak nadir,
Fusing lands and gelid sky,
Its shady copses full of fear
And so am I,

This place is groing smaller now,
As lands have nowhere else to go,
The outermost eternities,
Begin to show,

And sky has lost its dreamy hue,
A doldrums silence grips the sea,
The Sun devoured by the moon,
…Infallibly,

Slatey shelves are rising now,
I’m standing tween tectonic walls
Their mammoth peaks reduce the sea,
To waterfalls,

The waking world diffuses in,
Its groggy hold begins to take,
I vaguely watch what’s happening,
Until I wake…


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Wow you got expanded imagination... that's good u got talent how old r u ?

r u new to booksie ? well i'd love if u could check out my poems and give some comments thanks !!

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

'I contemplate the souring height of summits cupped within my hand'
'the outer-most eternities begin to show'
even though it is a nightmare, I look on these lines as thinking out of the ordeal as an opening to the higher reahlm. except for the line about the sun being devoured by the moon cause to me the moon represents emotion, and the sun would represent the higher states (God) well anyhow, so then it turned back into the nightmare lol!
but then the waterfalls, captivated me again along with the 'waking world difusing in'
so in other words, I think this could be seen as the old world being devoured by the new... lol!

well it is a dream and I love to attempt to interpret dreams. and I wonder since it is called 'Lucid' if this was a lucid dream? I had praticed lucid dreaming myself once upon time :)

well, very nicely written, you use very imaginative words...I have to remember to have the online dictionary handy
more often, cause I didn't know the meaning of the word 'tectonic' although most probably I will look it up now ^_^ thanks zenith.......~katie

Posted: Jun 29, 2008



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