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A lifelong friend.
I would love your interpretations on this one to see if I was able to tell the story as it is. One day I may share it with Billy but I can’t seem to step out to read it without my knowledge.
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Submitted: Jun 30, 2008    Reads: 130    Comments: 15    Likes: 10   


Billy’s mother sat in the lily valley
Her Apache Indian skin quiet
with her black brown eyes
Jet black hair wound in broad braid
And strands that escaped curtsied to
the sorrow that sat beside her.
 
Aggravating her neck with her fingers
somewhat cultivating rather than soothing the itch
she felt the destructive emoticons smirk
Just under her throat skin, each one popping,
crackling and sugaring her flesh. Red ants crawling.
Viscous beads with smug cackling faces
justify her neck its misery. Matching
the sorrow that sat beside her.
 

Billy’s mother watched the crows peck
at his skull. There were no crows that
she could chase away. They would soon
move to his soul and her only relief
would be scraping the fevered emoticons by
raking her neck. Buried deep in her skin and
harrowing the sorrow that sat beside her.

 

Billy plowed through a valley of lilies
that clung closest to death. And in each
fold of blossom he licked pollen that
scorched his tongue. One more flower. And
She, watching the cracked emoticons bubbling
under his skin, observed him whittle one more
tepal. Billy, induced in the fiery fiend
contorted his eyes and searched for his mother
in the Lily. That morning, sorrow sat beside
Billy.

 
Billy offered the Ornamental his hands for warmth
Wrapping herself around his middle finger
in the lily valley. Only a few lilies will survive
outside the valley, a marsh would drown a rosette.
Billy watched the red ants scurry up the green stem and
knew, but couldn’t refuse, that This lily would soon
meet Billy’s mother. The morbid emoticons kicked
their dust in Billy’s eyes and he cried as her irises
reflected his mothers presence in the lily valley.
Billy held the naked lily, like he promised and
watched her custody emerge beside his mother.
Where, comfortably, sorrow sat.
 
Deciduous, Billy’s mother secluded into the
lily valley resting dormant. Her roots would
never emerge from the soil of the valley. She
cut her own bloom and her death would bear
no sepal to the pain she planted in Billy. At
a tender age, she sat Billy in the sorrow beside
her.   And whoever warms
to Billy.


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Eric JHRB Egan
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Great Peach honey, as always from you, classy stuff. Hey please start a petition for me to be reinstated into Booksie. They killed my account and all my stuff gone. If anybody can influence things for me it is you and Apodiform. PLease help me my friends.

Posted: Jun 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Eric.

Apparently you broke some rules eh?

Very disturbing, somehow. Will have to ponder on it...

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, disturbing is a good call. I was trying to introduce his girlfriend as a lily (metaphorically)...hummmm.... I am pondering too....

Indian mother sitting in a valley that most likely at one point was the territory of her great ancestors who actually love the earth unlike our modern world. Her sadness based on the earths deterioration as well as her destruction of her seed and earth. Children are formed by a mothers hands that work and mold clay. She felt much guilt as she attributed to some of his flaws. You gain you morals as a person so young. She seemed to be making the pain on the inside transcend to the outside to mark her body with her emotions. This was a really in depth story and I know I didn't put my microscope across every part of it. I do know that it was full of sorrow and love. Self suffering for the massacres you created in a one you love. Destroying their brain as if it were a puppet you can manipulate. Hope that helps to some extent.

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Man you are so bright and insightful for your tender age. Am I ever proud that you've taken a chance on this one. It is a very delicate story and I absolutely adore that you've provided me your interpretation.

Billy's father passed away when he was 12. His mother a couple years later. I have so much respect for him but leaving a child in those tender years of life certainly compromises their future in relationships.

Thanks so much B Leaf.

I had to read it twice to get the full sense of the deaths that will make Billy either constantly consumed with sadness and longing or very much stronger. Courage is not the absence of fear or hurt or sorrow but the ability to rise and make positive vibes in spite of it or because of it.
For me (the eternal romantic) I think Billy will emerge strong and those who warm to him will be glad!!

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

Author Comment:

Not so much.
I feel such incredible sadness in my heart for him.

I love your courage statement, from the brilliant mouth of an eternal optimist.

Thanks so much AT!

I'm not the best at interpretation Peach. you know that, but I'll tell you what this makes me feel. Overwhelming sadness and nostalgia for something that could have and should have been, but is somehow stunted. I may be way off base. "And in each
fold of blossom he licked pollen that
scorched his tongue." - makes me think he's searching for something that he's just not finding and the searching only causes more pain, but he can't stop looking for what he's missing.

Really, I love any piece that makes me feel something and this one yanks the emotion clear out of my chest.

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm so glad you're here.
Billy's mom hung herself shortly after his dad died. Leaving Billy quite alone at a very early age in life which lead to some very different lifestyle choices. Did he have a choice, really? Don't know.
I was hoping to try and show Billy's mom looking in on him, from her death and watching his life choices. Searching is very right on.

Thanks so much.

You are a beautiful poet Peach, it took my breath away~

'the sorrow that sat beside her.'

The images are so clear in my minds eye, yet it's like watching a dream...I can feel it but can not interact with the players...I want to comfort them but they can't hear me! Words cannot express how impressed I am with your ability to tell a whole story so thoroughly and yet leave me/us on the edge of our seats with each line, waiting to put all the pieces together as we read;) ~rain

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

gasp!
Thank you so much Rain. I sorta wanted to provoke that helplessness. Thank you so much.

WOW! incredible writing, just has me held here.
had to read the comments to seek further insight, and thankfully am able to recieve more from it, and of course then had to reread. as always your writing is, (dang can't even think of the right words) lol
well let's jsut say 'expertise' for now anyway.
yes this is such a profound piece. and of course I will be back to read the comments again and again ^_^
ok hope you are watching fire workd tonight :)

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

I so appreciate all the reading you do on my behalf, thank you so very much.

There is a bit of addiction in this story, by means of the emoticons embellishing the skin, as well as trying to show Billy's mom having guilt for hanging herself, which is why she always rubs her neck.

Incredible story and I've only touched it a bit with my flavor and am so pleased that it, in return, touches the reader.

Thanks so much Katie, always a pleasure to see you.

this made me sad...*sob* *sob*
why do mothers do this when they have kids?
Cannot they live for them? So selfish to just take their lives and thinking about themselves...whatever the pain is in magnitude...little ones are more important....

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

She was such a beautiful woman. Who knows??

Thank you so much for reading and commenting Pratibha.

Magnificent and complex like a Celtic knot. It coils and spirals through fractal reiterations of L's and imagery as in valley, lily, blossom, licked, and sorrow sitting beside Billy and his mother. The sounds effortlessly flow as the tales entwines in fractal of human destiny and genetic love.

Posted: Jul 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Gosh I love hearing from you.

wow, peach, such a sad emotional poem and so full of death. It’s as though one person searches through life for something left behind, while the other searches death for something they lost. The lily’s suggest this life/death relationship; a boundary so close between the two that they almost touch, and yet they cannot have that physical contact. Is there spiritual contact? It is suggested by the images of Indian culture in the opening stanza. And sorrow accompanies both mother and son where decay is present in both death but also life, which I suppose is a direct influence of loss. How old is Billy? The loss of your mother would have a profound effect on a young life, something which would be carried with you always. And so sorrow is a constant companion, but it almost feels like the last stanza is saying the mother planted that sorrow, as though she was responsible for her own death and therefore the consequences that will have on her son’s life. A very sad but moving poem peachy, u really do show a wide range in your work. Is this compassionate peach, well it’s certainly beautifully written!!

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

My friend Billy was 12 when he lost his dad and then 14 when his mom took her own life. He is now 38. He is a friend I hold close to my heart but sadness shines in his realm.

Again, thank you so much Matt, your comments are incredibly inspiring to me.

Hey Peachy! So, I've been back and forth over this one and I've decided I'm ready to give you what i got. I haven't ready any comments yet so i can give it my own interp.

In the first stanza, it's as if Billy's mother is very negative about life and what she can expect from it, this opinion seems to force it's self upon Billy, as children look to their peers. She knows life will treat him cruel and she can't protect him, this scares her and almost sets fate on it's way. In the third stanza, I don't no why but I get the feeling drugs are involved, the scraping at the neck like a nervous twitch maybe? And now, Billy licking the pollen that scorched his tongue. On from that, Billy's mother can deal with watching Billy and kills herself (I know I may be well off here). I think Billy suffers the sorrow his mother did, because of her actions. And the very last line indicates the sorrow he passes on to others, as his mother did him.

Well, I could be far off. There are a lot of metaphors too which you are always makes your poetry yours. No body can beat your work as far as I’m concerned, truly brilliant as ever! ;) ~ KB

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

I LOVE how you read me. Billy licking the pollen, for me, is his attraction to yet, another woman he shouldn't hold in his life...but that may not be a choice. Billy's mom killed herself BEFORE he started having problems, maybe, just maybe, the problems Billy has in life are due to losing his parents at such an early age.

You give me too much praise. And thank you for making me grin often KB.

A woman, be it Mother or lover holds a boy/man in her hands. She uses what is there as clay for herself, knowing she is right to do this. Billy would be nowhere if not for her and is nowhere when she is gone although he looks for this safety time and again.
An evocative piling of words creating a meaning to a life. Wonderful.

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much. So interesting in addition to this, I went to a psychic last week and she told me to think of being in a valley of lilies and to throw one up into the sky.

That gave me chills.
Thanks for stopping in....i adore your comment and comprehension of my writing....

Beautiful and sensual as you always do, but with sweet sorrow. Apparently there is no real disconnection from anyone or anything, but we sure do enjoy our own suffering emotions. I've never considered my self one for decoding the heiroglyphs of writing. I like to read something, and let it settle in deep, to work it's magic.
Having blabbered about all that, I really feel as though I've been in this dream. Good good good...Peach.

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks thanks thanks AGAIN. you spoil me!!

Ahhh sweet mystery of life i shall remember...well maybe..shades of Poe in this....fluttering underneath the surface...buried but not alive...the sorrow of the ones left behind is heart breaking...I wait for my turn....but to have to confront it so early in life...is a tragedy..this is a gem..peach....a shiny crazy diamond...

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Zed. It's always wonderful to hear from you. This is so close to me.

That was a fairly interesting story, mystery and suspense It was a good life lesson type as well. Well done peach.

-DD

Posted: Sep 22, 2008

Author Comment:

I am glad you enjoyed and were able to see it as written.

Thank you so much.



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