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The Chubby Succubus

Short Story By: Luis Mariano Garcia
Fantasy


This is the story about a little sucubuss, who was extremely sad, because she was chubby and couldn’t seduce anyone. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 10, 2008    Reads: 394    Comments: 3    Likes: 1   


This is the story about a little sucubuss, who was extremely sad, because she was chubby and couldn't seduce anyone. But it hadn't been always that way. Once, in a far away time, she had been the most dangerously seductive demon on earth. Many men had fallen under her lust. She was gorgeous, like painted by Rubens, and absolutely no one, could resist her charm. Nevertheless, it just lasted a few centuries. When the world approached to the next millennium, things started looking pretty bad for her. People changed their concept of beauty, and bones became more valuable than meat. She got so depressed, started believing she would never be able to seduce anyone again. She tried to lose some pounds, tried doing spinning and pilates; she started a diet, with no more cakes. But nothing worked. It seemed like having flesh, was an innate attribute in flesh demons, I guess it make some sense. One day, sunk in despair and unable to understand what had happened with her, she looked in the mirror, wondering why she didn't like to men anymore. She looked at her curvy body, she looked at her mischievous smile, looked at her impish big red eyes, everything continued being there, bloody hell... she continued being herself, and she really, really, liked being herself. After that day she continued with her life, much more relaxed, living for herself, and everything started looking much better, even her number of victims grew a lot. Now day, she continue with her job, tempting souls with the pleasures of the flesh, and I must said, she does a great job; after all, she is the most dangerously seductive demon on earth.


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Comments:

WOW. Now this was something different. Very imaginitive. So I guess she fell in love with her own image after all. It's important to see your own beauty first if you want the world to worship it. Good morale.

I would appreciate if you can check out some of my short stories as well. You might find those interesting.

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

It's quite a good short story you've got there.
A great tale.
The thing that made me read was the succubus part. It gives you a thought of dark, seductive stories but when it says chubby, it changes your idea entirely and it makes the story intriguing. I like it :D

If you'd be so obligated to read my works, I'd love that. I'll be going through your other works. (hope it's as good as this!)

Posted: Aug 10, 2008

HAHAHAH!! I thoroughly enjoyed that. please write another piece along these lines, how funny...a chubby succubus! you could almost make this into a poem, we just need paragraph breaks. great job.

Posted: Nov 27, 2008



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