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Poem By: devilrod
Flash Fiction

Release of the seaman. haha View table of contents...

Submitted: Aug 26, 2007 Reads: 58 Comments: 2 Likes: 1

The vessel bursts to the surface

An iron bubble sealed from the depths

With foam cascading

Like a rolling hump-back

Then all is calm

The hatch is breeched with anticipation

A babe from the warm canal

True light upon the stale eyes

With silent relief

The sub-mission over

All tensions reside

Along the horizon, the captain squints

Baby's first breath

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Comments:

air

very beautiful, 'three in a row' you are on a roll :)
I look forward to your's they are always interesting,
sometimes you take us way beyond and then out of nowhere there is one that leaves you not knowing what to think. (smile) always a joy and a pleasure.

Posted: Aug 26, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you very much.
I guess I'm like a box of chocolates that way.

Classy Peach

I wonder if you write like me. You see things literally and then pick apart the layered subliminal messages. Conception. Very smart big mister!

Posted: Aug 22, 2008

Author Comment:

I sometimes have ideas when I'm trying to fall asleep that make me get up and riddle out in poem, but other times I just sit and start typing...and just drop whatever comes. I have noticed a few similarities, but you are much more fully structured, which leads to a better read, where I try to leave the structure out as much as possible. You are a pro. I know I've hashed out alot of my personal psychosis in my poems. That's my need, but I try and make it interesting for someone to read and chuckle at.