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If you are selfish, you will meet your match. If you are kind, you will be rewarded. View table of contents...
Submitted: Apr 20, 2008 Reads: 158 Comments: 31 Likes: 27
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Yeah. I have come across such selfish people. It's a good thing, they get the taste of their own medicine in this lifetime itself.
Posted: Apr 20, 2008
this is good great job! please go read some of my stuff and comment too!!
Posted: Apr 21, 2008
Tit for tat.
Posted: Apr 22, 2008
If world is free of negativism, it would be much more better to live in.
Posted: Apr 23, 2008
Nice! The end is awsome
Posted: Apr 24, 2008
What goes around comes around, and when it comes back around it's a slap in the face! Very nice short!
Posted: Apr 26, 2008
Served Matt rightly....well done....
I liked this one very much...a good lesson for kids and adults....
Posted: Apr 28, 2008
It's a good plot. Though it seemed to be missing something like one more twist of the knife in Matt :P
Apart from the few detracting grammatical errors, it could do with a breath of life. If you need help editing, drop me a line.
Posted: Apr 28, 2008
What a stupid this Matt is. He wanted a partner alone and not a wife. Shit!
Posted: Apr 29, 2008
He got what he gave others. ha. ha.
Posted: Apr 29, 2008
I am better without reading about such scums.
Posted: Apr 29, 2008
If there is no bad, we won't recognise the value of good. So I guess, characters like Matt help us know of Tom's goodness.
Posted: Apr 30, 2008
Very selfish man.
Posted: Apr 30, 2008
Some people are too self-centred and they get repaid in their own coin.
Posted: Apr 30, 2008
This man doesn't know the value of human beings.
Posted: Apr 30, 2008
What goes around, comes around. A classic!
Posted: May 2, 2008
You have given it a wonderful ending, justifying the title.
Posted: May 3, 2008
I hate selfish, ungrateful and rude people.
Posted: May 4, 2008
I have met such people and couldn't care less.
Posted: May 4, 2008
Why are there such people in the world?
Posted: May 4, 2008
I truly like this story.. I'm a firm believer in reaping what you sow.
Posted: May 5, 2008
what you reap is what you sow...
yeah, living in this world selfishly brings no good at all...
Posted: May 6, 2008
It's always so nice to read these stories where the wrongdoer gets punished in the end... because it doesn't always happen in the real life. Nice work.
Posted: May 6, 2008
It'sreally good!
Posted: May 13, 2008
I shouldn't say this, but I'm glad that jerk got what he deserved! People who treat others with such disdain should know what it feels like ;) I like the way you organized this into a series of thoughts and conversations.
Stephanee :)
Posted: May 16, 2008
Wonderful story, Bubbly.
Posted: May 21, 2008
This has the ring of truth! We have all met people like this....I have one in the family!!! Great piece of writing Bubbly
Posted: May 25, 2008
It's interesting that Angela's "happy ending" should include getting over her disability. Matt proposed *after* learning that she would gt well - what if she was always crippled? Your plot is good, but it reads like an outline for a longer story. The characters would benefit from allowing the reader to spend some time with them. There is material here for a novel, if you added in a few sub-plots, for example following up the other person involved in Tom & Angela's car accident, or giving examples of Angela's "will to get well". It might be interesting to show scenes from when the characters were all at school together - show Tom's selfishness starting to become apparant.
How did Tom meet Sally? How come they both have such terrible attitudes towards disability? "People of your situation" - that is the sort of phrase used by the terminally prejudiced. How did Sally get to be so horrible, and was Tom attrached to her even while he was engaged to Angela? Does Angela feel that she must let Tom go, not be a "burden" on him? How does she feel about her situation? Does she believe what Tom said, that it was "fate" that crippled her?
Tom's dangerous driving caused Angela's accident - did he also cause his own? How many other people have been affected by his selfishness on the road? Car accidents don't just put people in wheelchairs, head injuries can lead to blindness, or brain damage. Spinal injuries can have various effects, and if an arm or a leg is crushed in a car accident, it may have to be amputated. Recent advances in medicine and technology have helped with many practical difficulties facing people with disabilities, but the biggest problems are usually those caused by other people and their ignorance.
This could grow into a really interesting story about attitudes towards disability and the value of keeping promises, even when they become difficult. You make the point well about selfishness, but there is so much more hiding beneath the surface in this story.
The grammer and punctuation needs tidying up - if you don't feel confident doing this yourself, then look around for an editor or a proofreader.
Posted: May 25, 2008
Can't really add much to your long list of commenters, but I was caught by the title. I had to change the title of my novel because the powers that be said my original was already taken. So, I changed it to "As You Sow", and this was accepted. Go figure!
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Nice story! I really like it. It really tells you how it can feel when people are excluided! Keep writing!
Posted: Jul 31, 2008
Hey! this was totaly hectic to thnk we've got selfish ple like that, hey! to all who are like that-unfuck the world!
Posted: Aug 14, 2008
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