Her marriage was over long back. She was making-do with the physical world. And ultimately she decided. It is not that she wanted to put an end to this vile creature, it is that she did decide. A strong woman. I wish there was more written about women, who can take their own decisions. They say, women can't think. But it is not so. They are never given a choice. They are like a piece of furniture, doing household chores, bringing up kids and being provided for. Its time women came into their own, decided, acted. And I like this story because she ACTED. She did act. And that is very important.

Posted: May 30, 2008

House-wives' fate is the worst of the lots. This unnamed woman is a symbol of hope. She has decided for scores of women, who languish their entire life in a prison called their home and a jailor called their husband.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Even here in UK, house-wives suffer the maximum as they are not the bread earners. There is lot of domestic violence. These women don't take any action. I think, a jolt is needed to highlight their plight. And this woman does that adequately. Many home birds will think differently now.

Posted: May 30, 2008

I have come across house-wives ill-treatment in many third world countries. They are considered a non-entity. It's about time they realised their self-worth. For without them no homes ca run, no children can be raised, no marriages can survive. Three cheers to this woman's spirit.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Bubbly! This is my favorite one that you've written! I'm truly impressed. I think you went over to the dark side for a little bit. It's kind of nice over there occassionally, isn't it? Wonderful job!

Posted: May 30, 2008

Interesting. First "flash fiction" piece I've ever read. I like the minimalistic approach to the story. Very haiku :)

Posted: May 30, 2008

This is the way I like it. CHOP THEM!

Posted: May 30, 2008

I wouldn't have waited for 20 years. I would have done it on DAY 1. Who cares for such rascals and their promiscuous ways. I can show him new light in being promiscuous.

Posted: May 30, 2008

She is the marginalised woman. And she had tolerated enough. As they say, "even a worm will move." She is going to open the eyes of many women. Men will never have it so good.

Posted: May 30, 2008

This one has set my adrenaline pumping. This is action, woman's way. This is woman's world.

Posted: May 30, 2008

In my home country, women don't have a voice, forget being thinking. They suffer quietly. I must say, this butchering is healthy thinking. It will make men realise women's worth.

Posted: May 30, 2008

She wasted 20 years of her life. She should kick his arse when things were not working. She should enjoy her life. Marriage is not important, children, home are burden if a woman cannot enjoy her life, her way. Why should a woman suffer and a man enjoy.

Posted: May 30, 2008

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! omg. this is cool, and very true to many people.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Butcher's knife is symbol of women's freedom. I will buy one now. Good work.

Posted: May 30, 2008

omg...wow. Did she kill him? Serves him right, how can you be married to a woman for 20 years and have children and just go off and do something like that to her? It's cruel :[
I know someone who has had a similar thing happen to her. Her husband had been seeing someone behind her back and theyd been married since high school and they are now in there 50's, well he is. She's almost there.
And they have two (adopted) kids and he just decided to devorce her, and she was a house wife. But, she got a job, is keeping the kids and it soing pretty good. But, he wants to get back together with her -.-
Sorry for telling you all this..lol
hope i didnt bore you.
your short story was pretty good and had be like at the edge of my chair towards the end. I was like..uh oh..shes got a butchers knife.lol

~mandy

Posted: May 30, 2008

That is really dark but so real of a modern world how many times do you read of a slow death by poison. It is so easy when people rely on others for the food that they themselves eat and yes it is a different situation. Very nice read though interesting I enjoy the darkness keep it up.

Posted: May 30, 2008

that's really good. it gives what happens at the end without actually saying what she does.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Why was it so short... were you trying to make a point? Well it was very interesting... I like your work!

Posted: May 30, 2008

did he die, because i would very much like that!
biy, do i hate men like that!
Nice one, and very interesting!!

Posted: May 30, 2008

Very nice! You did a great job at capturing the woman’s emotions and establishing a memorable character, even though she doesn’t have a name. Your implied ending is a nice touch too. All in all, very good. Keep up the good work!

Posted: May 30, 2008

I like it!!
very feminist, though.
Sorry bubbly, but I'm just not big on feminism.
But, the story itself was glorious!!!

Posted: May 30, 2008

It was good, but it was very darkish....oh well! I loved it anyway!!!!

Posted: May 30, 2008

elenamiria, jeez. You love dark things. It was great!

Posted: May 30, 2008

IDK, I feel like doing that to my own father sometimes when he talks back to my mother in a tone I now she doesn't deserve, and they've been married 22yrs.

But of course if I stood up for my mother when she was in the right, I would be shot back down with a slap to the face.

~DarkFairy~

Posted: May 30, 2008

Nice job. A good slicing or two is always good for the soul.

Posted: May 30, 2008

She had the purpose. She had the intention. Long live womanhood.

Posted: May 30, 2008

My mother suffered too long with my father. But should the same happen to me, I now know what to do.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Why one, kill all the bastards. It will clean the world and we can live peacefully.

Posted: May 30, 2008

If our grandmothers, mothers were strong, we will be "waiting to exhale." I can say, I am financially independent so I'll show him the door and shut it with a bang.

Posted: May 30, 2008

oh no. cool.
Lydia_xxxx

Posted: May 30, 2008

Why do women suffer. Why can't they become surrogate mothers (by artificial insemination) or adopt kids. You can't have everything in the world, women! So discard husbands and live life your way. woops.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Its not a good bye, its a BAD bad bye to the man. And of course I like it very much. Thank you very much. But expand on it. I want to enjoy how she kills him and is he asking for pardon, bowing at her feet. I can imagine all sorts of situations. Go ahead, please.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Good for her. The jerk deserved it. I can't stand a person who would cheat on their husband/wife. I know of the emotions the character is going through, because my ex-wife cheated on me. Excellent job. I always enjoy reading your work. :)

Posted: May 30, 2008

She should not kill him but bobbitt (chop off his vital organ) him. Then no woman will accept him. Ha. ha.

Posted: May 30, 2008

That's really good! WOW! Loved it!!!!

Posted: May 30, 2008

I wish you could give it an 'I love it'. Like is too small a word of such a brilliant work of art.

Posted: May 30, 2008

This is awesome!! It's brilliantly written. Just because we're female, does not mean we are any less important than men. In some cases, they are even more inportant. Women are like the guy behind the curtain moving the marionette.
Granted, I'm a feminist and that may create a flaw in my perspective. Great job. I want to know what she did with the knife in more detail.
~Kaori

Posted: May 30, 2008

you go girl. show him who's boss around here. lol. i like it. i think that women today are getting bullied around too much. i know a few girls at my high school that have been pushed around too much by guys they thought loved them.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Judging from the comments above, I'll be watching news reports for an increase in spousal homicide!

Nice short story, and obviously well received. You continue to think outside the box and defy convention, and I love that about your style.

-John

Posted: May 30, 2008

I'd love to find out what happens next! :) suspenseful, yeah, I like it. :)

Posted: May 30, 2008

Dear Bubbly,This one is too good....Served her selfish hubby rightly But I am indeed worried for wives in these situations....what should they do?
In India this is so common and the wives just 'leave' without a word.
Ur story unfolds so many truths and raises so many questions.
I wish we could raise awareness amongst women think that once they r married, their life is settled and they should spend the rest of their lives in the service of their husband. Many of them have been brought up like that as well by their parents.
And many of them r uneducated ....so sad..their plight and fate.
They sacrifice their entire life and all they get is 'humiliation' from hubby and kids.

Each and Every homemaker should realise that they have a self esteem of their own and should never compromise on that......and they should be well equipped with knowledge to 'fight back' lawfully.

Thanks Bubbly....for informing me....this one is tooo good....

Posted: May 30, 2008

i am sorry i got really emotional...forgot that this is a 'fiction'....and went on and on and on...

i have seen so many of friends suffer and i felt so helpless that I could do 'nothing'

Posted: May 30, 2008

I am woman.
Hear me roar....

ROARRRRR!

MA

Posted: May 30, 2008

Good she took this decision. If she reports to police or goes to court, the case'll drag on for years and she'll face humiliation. Ultimately, the husband'd win. She'll be left with nothing. So, let her kill him, once and for all. She may be tried but'll come out of jail and live her life.

Posted: May 30, 2008

i really really really like it. i think its the shortest short story ive ever read, and yet that one small paragraph says it all. its like a whole story in one paragraph. great job! =)

Posted: May 30, 2008

Wow, that was interesting! Someone's getting rebellious. haha. Sort of short, but I liked it.

Posted: May 30, 2008

I am waiting to see if she can put the knife in his heart. And let him die bleeding. Then she's my kind of woman. Revenge should be her name.

Posted: May 30, 2008

This man wants to have his cake and eat it too. But she has put the icing (knife) on the cake. She has real culinary skills. And she can serve his heart on a platter. LOL. LOL. LOL.

Posted: May 30, 2008

Now Bubbly, what's all this play on draw and drawing

Posted: May 30, 2008

O.o!

Posted: May 30, 2008

Beautiful, short, simple... I loved it! Xxx

Posted: May 30, 2008

yeah...hehe the husband was pretty insane I think...it's like he just trash his wife in the trash can...he didn't appreciate all those 20 years being on his wife...hehe nice job...good work

Posted: May 30, 2008

My mom is in this woman's shoes....only she hasn't found the butchers knife yet...nicely written....its a fate of many women in the world today.
Short, to the point and sweet.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Walked with the knife!!! :) Rest is our imagination??!!! "They lived happily ever after???" Haahha.. Just kidding..

I liked it a lot.. Good one.. Short and sweet!!

Posted: May 31, 2008

That was intense...

Yeah i too heard a lot of woman suffering emotionally and physically under the hands of their husbands. Once they thought these men were the right ones, and then after years of marriage all of their sacrifices were left forgotten. Well done Bubbly! This is a real eye-opener.

Angry women are more dangerous than anything...*bite nails*

Posted: May 31, 2008

Nice one.........
U should have elaborated it a little more though!
It would have been better if it was bigger.
Great theme though and nice reading anyway....
Whats the end then???

Ronnie

Posted: May 31, 2008

I can only imagine what happens next. Good one, Bubbly.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Bubbly, I think with this piece of writing you have truly inspired a lot of people. Abused wives and children are too common in our world, and it is because of the evil men that have the mind to do it. I am glad that the woman made the decision!
In just a few lines you've written something so powerful, very well done to you!

Posted: May 31, 2008

I like your style. Having way too much bad experience with this subject, Ill stick to fishing and business stories-thank you for your work!!

Posted: May 31, 2008

Ah, the unfortunate housewife flipping the script. Short, sweet, and to the point like a little hershey's kiss, job well done.

Posted: May 31, 2008

You never fail to amaze me. 20 years in a nut-shell para is incredible. Keep it up. The story too is good.

Posted: May 31, 2008

No one should live this way , and the women in all world should have better support from the goverment . But the women must learn not depend of a man. Great .

Posted: May 31, 2008

Very short and vaguely detailed it's interesting. You don't give away the ending to let the reader visualize what they want, and expect what happened next. very intruiging.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Wow. That's was really good. Quite sad =( But in this short paragraph, I could feel alot of emotion. Great job =]

Posted: May 31, 2008

I liked it!! No one should have to go through that!!!
I want more!!! Keep up the great work!!!

Posted: May 31, 2008

Wow! I liked it a lot! It's so dramatic at the end. Good job!

Posted: May 31, 2008

This was really well done. It tells a big story in few words and leaves a dramatic ending up to the imagination of the reader. It reminds me of Psycho in which the you don't see the actual action, but that makes it even more terrifying (or dramatic in this case).

I also liked how you emphasized the 'my' near the end. It really shows that after putting so much into what she thought was their life, she's not going to let it be taken without someone getting their comeuppance.

Posted: May 31, 2008

wow.I hope he died

Posted: May 31, 2008

I love it, it proves that people have the choice to act or not to act.

Posted: May 31, 2008

It fascinating how you put so much detail in only a few words. You've managed to mention that the woman in the story is fed up with her no good husband and she decides to make a change in her life.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Are you serious?? Can I really end It??? *Bows in wonder and awe with tears of joy*
~Kaori

Posted: May 31, 2008

You didn't need to say a lot to give us the picture. Good succinct writing on a topic many will relate to.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Killing him would be just too easy...perhaps there's a better way.

Very suspenseful.

Posted: May 31, 2008

Its nice to see women's issues finding such tremendous support. This woman deserves it even more. Well written and awesome.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Seems like a comment festival here. The world'd be a better place if women are given their right place without trouncing on their rights. Serves this man right.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

This should be happening to many women around us. Providing them with moral support should encourage them to decide in their favor. Solidarity is an absolute must. Loved it like my life.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

I love this, it is short, snappy and straight to the point. I sympathise with her; 20 years, kids and stuck at home. As she stands in the kitchen she's probably thinking that she has wasted her life with him, she could have been independant, happy and free but instead she's living under the rules of her man who uses her as a footstool. She also feels as though she has devoted her life to him and the only way she can get a part of her life back is by killing him.

He provided her with security and wealth but not the love and happiness that she craves...

A very powerful short story, creating awareness for the millions of women who endure such pain like this.

Keep up the great work.

Olola.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

I liked it. I only wish that more women had the strength to get out of relationship like that befor it ends like this

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

This woman is true to my times. Now a days, any woman'd kick him and leave. This is the difference. And being the bread earner is a huge difference. If women are financially independent, it'll improve their status in society. Good piece of fiction.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Wow. I can't say anything else because this story leaves me speechless...

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

oh, good work! that woman's finally making it end..i do wish that women in real life can be able to end it in a better way than how she did, though.

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Its better to walk away from an abusive relationship. But what she feels is all that matters so be it good or bad, she decided to get going. Good.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Had women done it two centuries back, the world'd be a better place today. Excellent and concise.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

You have written it from women's point of view. I feel, it'll be interesting from men's point of view too. What say you.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Wow this is one powerful writing!

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Wow, kind of makes you think about what she'll do to him. Your the author so of course you know, but I don't so she may not kill him...awesome. I like it when I read something that gets my mind turning...

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

Thoroughly entertaining and thought-provoking. Keep it up.

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

I would make him suffer worse than with a butcher knief!

Posted: Jun 2, 2008

So much meaning compressed in so few words is great. Loved it.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Loved this courageous woman.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Good work. Liked it.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

What a wonderful story. Lol. ^^

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

You write very well. I have always loved reading your articles.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Bubbly...great...superb...loved this......juliet

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

So much said in so little space, awesome!

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Very nice. One of the most complex dilemmas haunting our society today. It's no wonder that Desperate Housewives is a hit, no matter how mediocre the acting is. Back to the topic, though. I enjoyed the brevity of the piece, which really accentuated the wife's decision to finally change the physical problem that was fueling her emotional/mental distress. Very entertaining for a flash fiction.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Hey I guess I am passionate. My husband (of 5 yrs) and I just bought a house and the two of us have been having an interesting week:)

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Good riddance of bad rubbish in any which way is excellent. Let me know, she killed him or no.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

House-wives too must keep pepper spray. It'd work wonderfully here without using butcher's knife.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

Michael's comment on Desperate Housewives portrays the reality of our society today. A mediocre sitcom has become a rage and a movie too.

Posted: Jun 3, 2008

You are showing way to women to take their own decisions. Good work.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Its a piece of fiction but seems real life.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

I guess you can provide a conclusive ending. I'd like to know what exactly you have in mind. I can think of one but it can wait.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Listener's comment is right. I too would like to know what you think she should do.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Its reality, its happening, its extremely scary, its a sin that makes another sin, its a mothers' nightmare and I cant even give a damn to her even if she screw the rule that thou shall not kill..and yeah I wonder what kind of man he was..I mean he was married for twenty years but he is not yet grown up??????

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

We all women should come together on booksie platform and form an association of women to discuss women's issues.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

NICE l loved it

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

I like this story. It raises serious questions about domestic family issues, but I love it. I wish all the women would have as much strength as this woman.

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

We are in 21st century and modern but our actions are 15th century. A drastic change is needed to change womenès position in society.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Life is a mix of positive and negative. Let us take this as a positive change.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

I liked the ending. It is the reality of our times.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

We need strong women today. Good story.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Write an ending to it, beautiful, and let me know. I know I would love it.

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

DUDE!! That was amazing!!! Have you considered gouing profesional??? Check out some of my poems!!


a.p.xxx

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Wow, i like this one. The ending was unexpected. =P

Posted: Jun 5, 2008

Short and sweet. Loved it.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

so how did she cook him? XD

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Develop it into a novel as demestic violence is the hot-selling subject of today.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Three cheers to our friendship on such a wonderful story portal. If you could accept me as one, I'll be honored.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Hey Bubbly, I'm just getting to your story, I've been in the hospital and now I'm back. I read and love your story, it was short but very descriptive. In life at some point or another we are often forced by others to make decisions that often leaves a horrible effect on the rest of our lives.

Posted: Jun 6, 2008

Love ya. Hee hee hee

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Thanks for calling me pretty. I am trying to be different by calling myself Matahari. No connection with the real one.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Cool story. I hope the butcher knife is not too sharp.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

I find this amusing. To get riled up over a woman who gave away her rights willingly...
She got what she deserved, what she undoubtedly knew would happen.
But, then again, no one can say they don't like vengeance.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

Olola's ending is good. Its a good idea you added it to the main text. We may get still different endings. Always think out of the box and you'll stand apart.

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

This idea of alternative ending is good. If I send one of mine, will you display it with your main story.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Your story will continue and be alive through readers' endings. I like that very much.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

My alternative ending:

I walked behind him. He was so immersed in watching the Hockey match on TV, he didn't hear me approach. As he bent down to pick up the popcorn bowl, I raised the butcher's knife and brought it down again and again and again...

Whether he died or no, will be another story.

Let me see it in your story.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

My alternative ending:

I had the knife in my hand but my hatred was so great against this man that I didn't feel the need it. My hands had gained the strength, being roughened by years of house work. I tapped him slightly over his shoulder, saw him turn surprised and I caught him by the throat.

I don't care whether he died or no. I did try though (that he died).

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

My alternative ending:

I walked behind him. The knife's raw edge didn't match my hatred towards him. My hands gathered in a ball and I brought them down heavily on his head. I saw him crumple over the floor, senseless at first. And slowly his body lay standstill. And quiet was all around.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

Okay, while I liked the potency of so few words and so much effect, I can't help but feel she could take a differen't rout at 'self help'...maybe go to school...get some self esteem back...make some friends...I don't know, picking up a knife just seems so drastic...still, very powerful paragraph though.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

i love it x agen x lol x

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Wow! I hope she cut off each teenie-weenie appendage one by one...very, very slowly......

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

~honestly?
I would thank god that I could finally crawl out from underneath the repressive burden of such an obviously odious relationship, and know that this was a second chance at life ;) I'd wrather be lost for a while, maybe alone too(although she does still have her children to think of) and then find my way; then remain with a loveless, cheating, theiving excuse for a man. As for pay back, he'll make himself miserable just being 'him'.

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Okay so I wrote an alternative ending but surprisingly it didn't end the way everyone else's did. Weird. Okay here it is.


The knife is hidden, he only sees me as I walk through the door. His dark eyes hold nothing of the soft emotion they once held when we were younger. They were dark now, dark with hatred and frustration, emotions I knew all too well. He cranes his head around me, straining to continue to watch the television. I grip the knife tighter, hardening my resolve to finish what he started. The oak coffee table he rested his feet on was right in front of me, I found the whorls in the wood intriguing. I couldn’t look him in the eyes, the emotions were too real, bringing me back to when he did care about me, about our family, about the world we had created together. And now he was tearing it apart. I couldn’t do it. No matter how much he’d hurt me, I couldn’t do it. Slamming my fist down on the coffee table, the knife sticking straight up in the soft wood, I left the room. No longer was it him leaving me. No, I was taking the initiative, I was leaving him. Leaving him and the world we had created together. Now I had my own world to create. Ladies don't start fights, they finish them in ways men could never imagine.

Hope you like it.
~Kaori

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Wow. That's an eye-opener.

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

I liked that...it was cool. Ted

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

That's the coolest one. Liked it a lot.

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

This is cool! I'd really appreciate your thoughts on my new poem: Last Flight! Thanks! -Justlaugh

Posted: Aug 9, 2008

Great story! 20 years though? A bit too long to stay with someone who is emotionally dead or emotionally abusive, even if it for the kids sake. I think that deep back in her mind she already knew that he was being unfaithful.

It was to me, descriptive and really kind of captivating because, by the end I was wishing that there was more... I loved the alternate endings. I am not like this but, a little bit of me wanted him to get what was coming to him! A well written and very good read!

Posted: Aug 26, 2008

I like the last one best :D

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

These alternate endings... interesting way of posting it. I liked it. I like the last one best.

Posted: Sep 12, 2008

i like it. it's really true and its terrible that men acctually do that to their wives. That's really inspiring to some ppl... =D

Posted: Sep 13, 2008