Barfing In A Bowl 101

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Short Story By: Classy Peach
Flash Fiction

Tags: 101, last sentence show

An exercise in Flash Fiction 101.
101 words with a last sentence shock showing the theme. View table of contents...

Submitted: May 4, 2008 Reads: 99 Comments: 19 Likes: 9

Knees burning on this cold tile floor crouched over barfing into this bowl. Pregnant. What thaaa? Four children are enough.

Clenching the rim, gurgling waves my throat and splashes back at me from the bowl. Someone please hold my hair, I’m drenched in sweat. Vision spins and nostrils revolt a small litany to the foul stench wafting. Pregnant.

Why wasn’t protection used? Maybe it was one of the nights he came home late. Or that weekend in Calgary? Tummy tightens spewing again. Head viciously throbs in revelation.

“You ok?” hangdog hubby asks after telling me of his mistress and her pregnancy.

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Comments:

Richard Elliott

Great language as ever, Classy Peach. Neat twist! More! :)

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

More? Man, i'm just sitting here thinking I could write a book full of 101's just for the twist endings. AND, this is a great compliment from you with your talent! Thanks mucho!

Dragonfly

OH! Peach, you got me. Kind of makes my stomach hurt; he's such an ass! You packed a wallop with this one.

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Cool to have packed a wallop, you know how you're never sure until someone else reads it? Dragonfly you should give this 101 a try...it's sort of addicting.

Thanks so much for commenting as always I enjoy hearing from you!

Lacey Cummings

I just wanted to read it again. You really said alot in such a short piece, and I love the name of the story. Is that picture perhaps of the mistress? :) It's awfully cute though, so maybe not. Great Job Peach!

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

cow.slut.whore.bucktooth.jerk.

some nicknames can be soooooooo fun.

FunnyBunny

O_O Dog. I would kick his behind from here till Sunday. Nicely done.

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank You.
And I did.

apodiform

Ooh, I had to read that one twice! Nice! Commence with the husband (or soon to be ex?) as kicking!

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh don't worry...i DO have a wicked imagination and revenge was very sweet. Ex is correct.

GypsyRose

Very nice! You had me fooled up to the end. Glad he's an ex. They deserves each other. Great writing!

Posted: May 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks! fooled til the end is the point in this little sucker. fooling is fun.

Jbortti

Funny ! It's what i can say ,because i could not stop laughing !

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

nothing like a good laugh!
thanks for reading...

Nixie

LOL That’s priceless Classy! I'm glad I didn't have a call whilst reading that, would've sounded like a wet sneeze down the blower! Hah! Loved it! ~ Nixie

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

You make me giggle like crazy...good reply to a gross title!

matthew smith

haha, very funny..well for the reader anyway. The sick thing reminds me of me after a friday night out with the lads. Makes me shudder. very good writing again peachy. i'm really beginning to fall in love with your mind!!!

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks so much matt.

Alquimista

Somebody's gonna get in trouble. What's his story though? Did he make a mistake because of some character flaw or perhaps an overarching human frailty? I'm not trying to make excuses for him just because I'm a dude too. Not at all. Maybe he's just a horny toad, goddess knows there plenty of those out there. *wicked grin* Either way, this is delightfully intriguing.

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks.

dubl

After I looked at your page I read the title and it jumped at me so I had to read the story haha. I like it alot! [although i hope it's not drawn from personal experience haha]

Posted: May 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much Dubl.

Madame Dupree

I was going to say what an adorable picture… well I STILL am, love the picture! But let me tell you, have you ever heard of Lorena Bobbit? If you haven’t, check her out on the internet…. Then ask Lacey what one mistake I always say she made? Nah, I’ll save you the trouble… she shouldn’t have thrown “it” out the car window, she should have ground it up in the garbage disposal and then fed it to him on a cracker!! Can you still be a star of porno movies when you have to whiz with a straw?

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Good Golly Miss Molly! Settle! Don't worry about your little classy peach here...at the end of the day, we all know how these things work out...

cris

wow wow wow. love it. [:

Posted: May 13, 2008

Author Comment:

excellent smithers.
release the hounds.

lilypad1

Hi Classy. What a brilliant write. I felt sick for you after reading the last line. Excellent punch.

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much, it's nice to hear from you again!

bubbly

hi! cp. look at the irony of the situation. ;-)

Posted: May 28, 2008

Author Comment:

almost makes your tummy turn eh?

indiefreak

i'm a little phobic in throwing up. Your description is very nice(it makes me imagine the feelings *shudder*) and that guy is sure gonna get what he deserved. Nice read:)

Posted: Jun 1, 2008