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A romantic alcoholic

Short Story By: Nixie
Flash Fiction


I watched as she poured a second glass and I couldn't bargain with her, I wanted it. I'd of sucked the cork dry if she'd offered.
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Submitted: Aug 16, 2007    Reads: 774    Comments: 18    Likes: 7   


I had not anticipated how the night would go. Dinner was roast beef and I, the vegetarian fingered the fork for half hour before confessing to it. Her eye's twitched and then she'd said 'There I was thinking you were trying to bend the fork' much to her amusement I looked at the fork just to check.

I hadn't told her a few minor details, those I thought minor became major when she bought a bottle of red into the living room; wine, she is perfect! I smiled up politely.

Our conversations went from De Vincci and Mozart to Chinese takeaway's and my grandmothers rocking chair that she'd left me in her will. I was describing it to her, the detail on the rocking chair and how my grandmother use to sit in the shadows of my bedroom when I was a child and sing me to sleep. I pretended for a moment then not to know better of where that rocking chair now sat and how often, like a drunken hag I'd fallen asleep on it rocking with a glass pressed against my cheek.

As the evening passed she wore on me like wine, wine to my head. Sweet and honest with every word from the very first sip, I wanted more. It wasn't the cheap kind either, that wine. I watched as she poured a second glass and I couldn't bargain with her, I wanted it. I'd of sucked the cork dry if she'd offered.

Her legs wrapped around my waist, her hand still holding the neck like a lady and as I found myself there beneath her, I saw myself. A mirror looking down watching myself come undone, slow and seductive. She controlled me and suddenly I felt like I knew her so well.

I remembered her fingers circling that glass as her fingers worked on me now. They felt like the breeze against my skin, delicately awakening every inch as I lay there; my body once cold and numb now a fire of anticipation...

The tip of her tongue was red and washed over me, my lips left wet from her kisses... And every kiss was as good as the last, until you're drunk with kisses and falling asleep in her arms. Hoping that when you wake the bottle isn't empty.

But this time when I woke she was still sleeping beside me, the bottle untouched by either of us and resting on the side next to two dry glasses. I'd not needed it, I had her. I smiled into her and closed my eyes again knowing that I would sleep sound with her on my lips and not the wine.


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Comments:

ah, the intoxication of love. i agree that it is so much better than wine. nice flash piece.

Posted: Aug 16, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks I'm glad you thought so, and thanks very much for commenting, I appreciate it ;)

Wow that was very intoxicating..although Im not much into the girl on girl it was very good. You can feel and see what she is doing. Nice work.

Posted: Aug 16, 2007

Author Comment:

Ah thank you, it's nice to know that readers of a different genre are reading my work. Thanks for the comment!

Nixie,

Your voice is very pleasing and pitch-perfect for the growing sultriness of your bold piece. I particularly liked the apparent transposing of the protagonist with the grandmother, and the last few words add the perfect twist to an accomplished piece. Well done!
~brinsley

Posted: Aug 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks Brinsley for such a indepth comment, it seems you've understood the peice perfectly! Really, a big thank you.

A well composed and realized piece of art. I like this, please check out my works and give comment. It would mean a lot coming from you. "Still" and "Collapse" thank you.

Posted: Aug 18, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks Eric for your comment, much appreciated. I will absolutely read your works and do the honours.

This was a good story. Well crafted and a lovely description of the characters.

Posted: Aug 19, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks Terry, your good apinion is very much appreciated!

You already know I love this... but just so everyone else can tell:

This girl is dynamite!

Posted: Aug 20, 2007

Author Comment:

Wow, thanks hon!! Nice muse btw :)

that was great!
i liked the flow
half way through i was not longer sure you were talkin about the girl or the wine
very well done
Nova

Posted: Nov 18, 2007

Author Comment:

Hi Nova, cheers for that! I get what you're saying, I did wonder the same when writing it lol I was writing about the girl but it's up to the reader and how they interpret it! Thanks again ~ nixie

The flow was very smooth. As another poster said I'm not much for girl on girl but the piece was not only well written but tasteful.

Posted: Nov 26, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank you for that, I think it's important to make a good example of girl on girl relationships as there is so much controversy out there. Thank you for the complement :) ~ nixie

Lou
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You know this is my favourite one right, love the style you use in it! Lou

Posted: Nov 28, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks lou, much love mon amies ~ nix

Wow, I think I need a glass of wine lol brilliant writing Nixie!

Posted: Dec 1, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanks a lot, loving all your comments :) ~ Nixe

Wow, very good :D love it. lindydan :)

Posted: Jan 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks again, really appreciate the comment ;) ~ Nixie

great writing. i too loved that line i'd have sucked the cork dry if she'd offered. it made me smile.
off to read more of your writing. enjoying them immensely.
take care
snow x

Posted: Mar 3, 2008

Author Comment:

Snow, I'm loving your comments! Talk about make my day :) thank you! ~ Nixie

wow.good write. i know that feeling of the drugging kisses

Posted: Mar 8, 2008

Author Comment:

It's a sweet feeling ins't it! :) thanks Chris! ~ Nixie

very visual and really enjoyed it.

Posted: Mar 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Kellybelle, glad you enjoyed it! :) ~ Nixie

In India also this concept is being accepted now though under covers and is a taboo....
But honestly, it's much better to be in love....just to be in love....
nothing else matters...
u r a dynamite buddy...

Posted: Apr 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, I must admit to being grateful living here in England. Life would be hard in some places, I couldn’t imagine not being able to be myself. But love is love right? Can‘t control it most of the time! :) Thank you for your support, you really are the best! ~ Nixie

You r such an english rose...a passionate flower with a thorny insight...you made me feel as if I had just drunk deeply the heady brew of your love soaked evening....hmmmm

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

Author Comment:

*sigh* That's such a sweet comment Zed. Just when I need a smile too, thank you! :)

Really liked this; the parallels between the two types of intoxication (and dependence?) are explored with some lovely imagery. Great story!

Posted: Aug 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow, it's been a long time since I've read this one, I can barely remember writing it. It was a little flirt I think with flash fiction, glad it worked well and that you enjoyed it. I'm all smiles! ~ Nixie

Gave it a like it ;) Wicked write
~Danniella

Posted: Dec 2, 2008



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