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Ok so this is my first ever shot at flash fiction. I wrote this a couple days ago when we learned what flash fiction was. So yeah, ha ha don't be surprised if it sucks. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 1, 2008    Reads: 58    Comments: 1    Likes: 1   


    I could feel the bullet, the impact and the loss of oxygen as I was slammed to the ground. My heart thumping, my body shaking, and cold sweat popping from my forehead. I could feel it, the blood. It glistened in the foggy air. Why had I been shot? I couldn't help wondering even though my mind was numb with pain. Why was I even here? Why had I chosen this line of death? To put my life in a strangers hands and expect them to protect it? A rush of cold swept over me as I remember the pain, the blood, the war. Was I dying?


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Definitely very short, but better than my first attempt. It does leave a lot of unanswered questions like, who is the narrator? Where did they get shot? Who shot them and why? What started the war? Why was the narrator involved in the war? Does the narrator have some pivotal secret or knowledge that could have changed the outcome of the war?

All of these were just questions that went through my head as I read it. I'm sure you will have answers for all of them in time.

~Kaori

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah I understand it has lots of unanswered questions, but so do lots of flash fiction stories. Like there was one by..(i forgot who) but his story was: For sale. Baby Shoes. Never worn. That has lots of questions too. But thanks for telling me:D Thank you!



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