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Wrote this a few years ago. I have a little bit of a morbid and wild imagination. I am such a dreamer, and as we know most dreams have strange twists and turns. Here is a fine example... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Sep 13, 2008    Reads: 70    Comments: 11    Likes: 4   


Take me to a place unknown
I no longer call this place my home
Rolling hills beneath the sun
Through my dreams I run
I watch you dance around the fire
And in this land we never tire
Mud is seeping between our toes
War paint glistens upon my nose
Eagles fly on broken wings
A newborn cries, hienna screams
A snow white wolf on the prowl
In the darkest of nights I hear its howl
Falling, falling to the ground
Utter silence there is no sound
It fades to black before I hit
Within my zen now I sit
I lay unconscious on a bed
You lay your hand upon my head
A trail of roses at my feet
My loved ones cry as I sleep

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LOVE IT

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! Can't wait to read your stories!

Very nice poem

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for your compliment!

This is is so cool!

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the compliment and checkin out my poetry!

wow! really good! shes dead right? yeah.. morbid.. Kool! =D

Posted: Sep 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, you are right on. She is dead. Sometimes my thoughts are a little twisted. Glad you liked it!

a little of the night about your writing with this one but still a very good read .

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for checkin this out and for your comment!

hi! n. u've good imaginative power to bring illusions to life through words. excellent imagery. carry on. lol. ;-)

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe thank you! Carry on I shall :)

wow, u have a very good imagination. I like it alot, i can't wait to read more of your work

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much for the compliment! Glad you enjoyed reading it!

You are damn right when you said that your imagination is wild :p It's good. Good imagery. Very good rhyming. Very peculiar in itself.

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

*blushing* ... golly gee willikers ... shucks... thank you.
hehe :)

A great read. Good rhyming and very imaginative! Good work.

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for the kind words!

Well, I enjoyed it! A nice little jaunt through the wild and a peaceful yet sorrowful end to life. Atleast that is how it appears to me and that is how I am going to take it! Bravo! Keep it up!

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! I appreciate your take on the piece!

Very good

Posted: Oct 3, 2008

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Thank you!!!



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