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Going Under (Eragon96 Evanescence Song Challenge)

Short story By: Mistress of Word Play
Horror



This is my entry for the competition. The blue parts in the write are words from the song I was given to use in my write. The song I was given was Going Under by Evanescence. At the end of the write are the lyrics to the song. Hope you like it. Susan


Submitted:Dec 14, 2009    Reads: 200    Comments: 20    Likes: 43   


This is my entry for the competition. The blue parts in the write are words from the song I was given to use in my write. The song I was given was Going Under by Evanescence. At the end of the write are the lyrics to the song. Hope you like it. Susan
dark woman
The time had come to leave; things between Danny and I had just gotten too strange. First the thing with holding up the liquor store and now he wanted to kidnap some little girl and have a threesome with her before offing her. Danny had become sadistic and cruel over the six month period that I had been, using the term loosely, dating him. He had on several occasions left bruises and marks on my body. He had whipped me, burned me, and cut me. The more hideous the punishment he inflicted, the more his eyes would glow. I had tolerated it all in the name of love, but the robbery and now this obsession he had with kidnap, rape, and murder of a child, had been the final straw. I had packed the few items of clothing and other stuff while Danny was at work and moved them back to my apartment. Now I just needed to tell him good-bye.
"Danny," I said trying hard not to turn and run, "we need to talk."
"What's up babe?" Danny asked only half hearing what I had to say.
I fumbled with my car keys as he sat watching television and drinking his fourth beer.
"You know things haven't been so great with us lately," I said trying hard not to cry. "and nowI will tell you what I've done for you. I'm dying again. I'm going under drowning in you. I'mfalling forever and it seems there's no way out but to leave."
His eyes never left the screen as he took a big swallow of his beer. There was a rather long silence before he answered me.
"My God woman," he screamed at me as he got off the couch, "what the hell is your problem? Have you been messing around with some other guy?"
I felt a moment of terror gripping my heart. I shook my head no. Tears were starting to gather at the corners of my eyes. It had to end. Enough was enough already.
"The thoughts have been blurring and stirring the truth and the lies are too much to take. So I don't know what's real and what's not. I have to go I can't take it anymore," I said to him backing away from him as I spoke the words.
"Well look at little Miss nice," he snarled at me as his hand came up.
"Don't hit me," I screamed with new found courage.
"Don't hit you or what?" he said shaking his finger at me.
By now his face had turned as red as the sweater I was wearing and he was swaying slightly. I just prayed if he fell it would not be on top of me.
"Go on and scream, scream at me. I'm so far away, I won't be broken again. I've got to breathe. I can't keep going under like this. I am so out of your life," I replied to him as he staggered closer.
"Well what makes you think," he said trying to catch his breath, "that I am going to let you waltz on out of here? You know too much. I can't take that risk."
I stood there smiling at him. He was really mad now and was having trouble standing. Danny had fallen to his knees just in front of me.
"Babe I feel sick," Danny begged, "I need you to take me to the hospital."
I laughed as he uttered those words to me. Here Mr. Tough Guy was in the floor helpless as a kitten. He who had dragged me down to his level was asking me to help him. The irony was just too much. I grabbed my purse as his head hit the floor. I looked back as I left it would be the last time I would have to see him. No maybe one other time when they called from the morgue to identify his body.
"By the way love," I said as I was closing the door to his apartment, "I'll see you in hell. I laced your beer with a fast acting poison."
Now I will tell you what I've done for you
Fifty thousand tears I've cried
Screaming, deceiving and bleeding for you
And you still won't hear me, going under

Don't want your hand this time, I'll save myself
Maybe I'll wake up for once
Not tormented daily, defeated by you
Just when I thought, I reached the bottom

I'm dying again, I'm going under
Drowning in you, I'm falling forever
I've got to break through, I'm going under

Blurring and stirring the truth and the lies
So I don't know what's real and what's not
So I don't know what's real and what's not
Always confusing the thoughts in my head

So I can't trust myself anymore
I'm dying again, I'm going under
Drowning in you, I'm falling forever
I've got to break through, I'm

So go on and scream
Scream at me, I'm so far away
I won't be broken again
I've got to breathe, I can't keep going under

I'm dying again, I'm going under
Drowning in you, I'm falling forever
I've got to break through, I'm going under
Going under, I'm going under




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