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The strange monster

Short story By: sitting ponderer

Ok so about a years back I tried to write a story. The plot was good, but my writing sucked. I showed it to one of my friends, and I was really disappointed on his comments; although he was totally right. Anyways so about six months back I wrote this excerpt. It's not even a short story; just a short paragraph describing a horror scene. It is just a starting for me. Please do tell me if i need any particular improvement.

Submitted:Sep 17, 2008    Reads: 142    Comments: 2    Likes: 0   


"Get ready to get plunged in the deepness of death", said the huge monster. I started to take deep breaths; I knew hell was waiting for me. I tried to run, but as I looked back it was all black, like a bloody city silhouetted. The sky turned dark; having shades of cloud like those of devil. Ahead of me the gigantic monster was approaching me. As I tried to back up, my clothes got stuck from a protruding hand from ground, and I fell off. I leaned back as much as I could, but he was closing me fast, that hideous creek, big pale skin, having scars all over his body like that on a log, skin was having a greenish shade, and face was all unimaginable. I couldn't figure out where I was; was it hell? Am I paying back for my sins? Suddenly that monster threw his swollen hand at me and then, it all turned black. I jumped off of my back, I was breathing crazy. It wasn't until then that I realized that it was just a dream. There was a rush of satisfaction through my body.


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