Phew!!!

listener

I have come across such chatter boxes. What life they live. Real humorous piece, this. He cannot take no, rather he cannot understand NO.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

reader

It is good, my dear. I do go to park but if I face such a character, I'll run a marathon.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

www

I just love this zany, crazy piece.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

rose1

God! Are there such characters among us. I can't take excessive talkers. But this one is real cool talker.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

babli bahadur

You know, when I read your writing, I smile automatically. But this is whacky. A big thank you.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

This really made me smile. I have run across people like that who you could never get a word in edge wise. This poem made me laugh. Thank you for doing that, I needed to smile today and this poem did it. WOnderfully written.

Posted: Apr 25, 2008

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micheal, thank u so much. a very happy weekend to u. and thanx for making my weekend a happy one too. ;-)

Olola

That was great! I just think that he's lonely and really needed someone to talk to. Keep up the great work, Bubbly.

Olola.

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

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yeah! we all r lonely and need someone to talk to. thanx. ;-)

Avril360

GREAT!

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

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thanx. u r so sweet. ;-)

ixluvx2xwritex2

I like this. It's very cute!

Posted: Apr 26, 2008

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thanx. u've made my weekend. ;-)

the 26th kinght

wow...nice...i like it :)

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

MAmberConrad

*Giggling*
He was fun and quirky. Me, I would have played along for a bit. And if it got too heated or heavy, I would take off running!
MA

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

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i'd do the same. ;-)

Classy Peach

stalker-ish.
funny too.

Posted: Apr 27, 2008

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ha. thanx. ;-)

seesawmae

this is soo good!! kind of creepy but good!

Posted: Apr 28, 2008

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what a creep! ;-)

lubusait

I wouldn't have run. He would have run. I'll go on talking.

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

pracha

What a man. Phew.

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

shaggy

Phew. How did you get this idea for a story.

Posted: Apr 29, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

chamboooo

It takes all sorts to make this world.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

addu

Terrible man, eh!

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

nas

My grandson is like this. He will gain my attention somehow and won't let go. He's absolutely adorable.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

simmi

Very exasperating man. But lovable.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

ezzy

That was drop dead hilarious, that was great!!! I thought they were talking about their relationship but it wasn't. What tha twist.... nice work lady.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

Author Comment:

hi ezzy, thanx. sometimes, life is like that. ;-)

berry

love it. a little confusing but i get it

Posted: May 1, 2008

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thank god! u r a dear. ;-)

kenra

What a breather! Funny. I can't imagine what I'd do if that happened to me.

Posted: May 2, 2008

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hi! kenra, me too. or probably run away. ;-)

eliza

Very exasperating man but good work.

Posted: May 3, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

india

Love it.

Posted: May 4, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

newdelhi

It's a beauty.

Posted: May 4, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

olddelhi

Phew! Phew!!

Posted: May 4, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

Hannah K Monash

Ha, I know someone like that... You nailed it.

Posted: May 6, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! hannah, thanx. so i've already described ur real life. who's that guy. bring him to me. i'll...i'll...i'll...(now have u run away?) ha! haa!! haaa!!! ;-)

Speedyman

You made such a simple story really good. Keep it up.

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! speedyman. thanx. ur comment has set my pulse racing ;-)

Starlit Rogue

Very narcissistic isn't he?

Posted: May 7, 2008

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hi! sr, u nailed him. ;-)

Flying Piggy

Haha! Very funny! I like it a lot!

Posted: May 8, 2008

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hi! fp, thanx. u r a dear. ;-)

indiefreak

O...kay... now i know how to get someone to run away from me... Can't keep the smile off from my face while reading this. They can't allow anybody like this on street.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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hi! if, thanx. i'm glad u liked it. ;-)

saif wasiullah

I never doubted. You are numero uno. Featured writing.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

eliza

You have to give me a treat for being Featured. Great work.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

donna

Hellow Bubbles. You rock me.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

ming

Nice work. Nice author.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

babli bahadur

You welcomed me with keep up the good word. I must repay that debt. Way to go, girl.

Posted: May 8, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

Tremaine Raisa

LOL

Posted: May 8, 2008

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hi! tremaine. u look awesome. ;-)

XBrokenHeartedX

LOL this story was hilarious! It was an excellent read, that brightened my day. Though it was a bit confusing when you went back and forth between the characters. I absolutely loved how the boy just kept talking on and on and on...oh such a great read! Fabulous job:D

Posted: May 8, 2008

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hi! thanx. (doesn't seem u r broken hearted. just kidding.) i'm glad u liked it. ;-)

ashen

Haha. Very funny, and cute.

Posted: May 8, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! ashen. thanx. ;-)

pearlinanoyster

WOW! That was really different! And very true. Good work. LOL.

Posted: May 9, 2008

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hi! p. thanx. i'm glad u liked it. ;-)

boneym

It's a mad mad world.

Posted: May 9, 2008

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hi! thanx. ;-)

kumatsu

This man exasperates me.

Posted: May 9, 2008

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hi! thanx. ;-)

tintin

Phew. lol

Posted: May 9, 2008

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hi! thanx. ;-)

Author Comment:

hi! pops. welcome and thanx. ;-)

flowers

Superb

Posted: May 9, 2008

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hi! f. welcome and thanx. ;-)

matahari

Where is this man.

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! m. welcome and thanx. ;-)

stephhlebreton

haha, i loved it:) I laughed super hard at the end when he's just like "Oh! She's too shy. She just didn't have the time to hear me out... Never mind. There, that one. Hi..."
Cute story bubbly, keep up the good work!
Steph:)

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! steph. if u liked it then my day is made. ;-)

vonnie15

Nice...hehe:)

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! vonnie. thanx. i'm glad u liked it. ;-)

Pratibha

heeeheee....the last line caught my attention as well.
Lol...poor girl
i would have fainted i guess....joking...
lovely imagination....

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! pratibha. u r doing a wonderful job. that booksie community idea is great. keep going. u need a few good pats for it. ;-)

MichaelChristopher

Lovely piece of work. It reminds me of those old vaudeville acts. It was prompt, never stopped with the humor, and I was chuckling for an insanely long time. Loved it, loved it, loved it.

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! mike. thanx for being on my page. u'll be a great help to booksie community. keep guessing. ;-)

Wandiola

HILARIOUS!! YOUR SENSE OF HUMOR IS JUST TOOOOOOO GOOD! lol!

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! wandiola. thanx. if u like it, that means it is something. ;-)

occumsbendiestraw

I may have had a conversation like this in a bar once. Very good!

Posted: May 10, 2008

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hi! O. looks like u had a real good time in the bar. ha! haa!! ;-)

Orange Fay

Is the guy in this story exist...I would like to meet him...I love your story..

Posted: May 10, 2008

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hi! orange fay. thanx. u not only get to read about the guy, u WANT to meet him too! now, that's asking for 2 much. ;-)

kaylalebreton

haha i luv the idea of this sweeet man !!

Posted: May 11, 2008

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hi! kayla. thanx. he is quite optimistic, eh! ;-)

catspaw

Great. Simply love it.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

sapphire

Nice one

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

veronica

Good stuff here.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

london

What a man. Truly tuned with today.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

robotic

I can understand why everyone is reading it.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

Stephanie
(not registered user)

I liked this boy talking so much. At least he is talking positive and spreading love.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

osibisa

This is light humour. The best thing is the boy remains on the scene till the end. Three cheers for boys. Otherwise girls've overtaken boys literally everywhere.

Posted: May 14, 2008

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thanx. ;-)

kumatsu

Humour is the best medicine. Like it.

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx. ;-)

boneym

More of it please. I can relieve my stress and tension.

Posted: May 14, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx. ;-)

Michael68

Bubbly you made me laugh with this story. The funny thing is I knew an ex-girlfriend like that. You truly have a great talent. Thank you for sharing this story with me. I love it. Wonderful job. :)

Posted: May 15, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! mikey. thanx for such a beautiful comment. some people r like ur ex-girlfriend. ha! ha!! haaa!!! ;-)

Frank Kehoe

Hi!

Thank you for signing up as a fan of mine. You are very talented! Keep up the writing.

A couple of suggestions:

be careful of your English syntax .. I suspect English may not be your first -- or only -- language.

For instance:

Most people do think that ways about me but then they come around. And then...

or

Most people think that of me at first ...

Most people feel that way (no "s" here)

Forgive me if these are just typos...

But the bottom line is that most people will think you ARE funny.

Go for it!

P.s., If your piece on your mother is autobiographical, TALK to her about your feelings. You may both feel better...

Frank

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! frank. thanx for these suggestions. this is the typical lingo here among friends (they feel they r being intimate.) and i like that 'coz they r comfortable.

my mom isn't like this and she hasn't read this (!). she's a typical home bird, much into food, entertaining guests, outings etc. this is my fictional visualisation. enjoy it for what it is worth. ;-)

FreeWriter

Hehehe... I hope I never meet a crazy guy like that. Seriously, some people....hehehe.

Posted: May 17, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! sw. thanx. it takes all sorts to make this world. ;-)

london

I simply love this.

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! london. thanx. and i love ur name. ;-)

britney

Simply superb. Can't laugh anymore.

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! brit. thanx. ;-)

audreyhudson

If humor had another name, it'd be Phew.

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! audy. nice to have u here. ;-)

toratoratora

Thanks for inviting me to a read. It is simply too good.

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! tora. thanx for the visit. ;-)

julistar

You have excellent pace and a great knack for conversation. You need to practice the set up as the middle part became blurry and the voice (the I or the you) was lost for a few lines. Great work!

Posted: May 25, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! juli. thanx for pointing it out. a discerning reader is a great asset to add to the work. and welcome to booksie. ;-)

Carina Lea

awsome! you did amazing with that!

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! carina. i'm glad u liked it. ;-)

Browneyes

First I wanted to say I like the story, but your thoughts are incomplete at times, and some sentences can be combined for a smoother read.

One example:

I love you( this isn't needed-> (…) Why not combine a little here. Something like:

I love you, (And I knew it,) you love me (too). (Every) since the first day I saw you in the park, I knew (This is to vague-> (it). Maybe change it to. I knew all of this to be true.

New sentance-> (Down) deep in my heart, I had always seen a girl like you (in my dreams), and now my dream(s) (have) (not has) been answered.

A transtion is needed here, I think->(And further more, before this wonderous day dawned,) I (had) always thought you were following me(,) and today(,) you have come and admitted it. You are…

(No,)stop it. (Just stop it will you) Stop it…

(But I can't), and I won't. I will never stop. Ask of me anything, but this, and I will do it gladly.

I hope this helps. Joe

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! joe. thanx for these inputs. this is flash fiction in first draft. so many details i wanted to add, i just didn't for that'd increase the word limit. so brevity claimed much.

but what u suggest, sounds perfect and'd improve the story. thanx for the additions. this interaction improves my thought process. ;-)

Browneyes

Oh, I see. My bad. I didn't even know what flash was until just now when I googled it and found out. Well, that being the case, I will now remove my foot from my mouth, and take a big step backwards. Please disregard my suggestions.

Thanks Joe.

Posted: Jun 13, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! joe. what matters to me is a keen reader with constructive suggestions. i'll keep them in mind. a reader always makes a writer grow. and u've served that purpose. thanx a lot. ;-)

sparkle1993

Ha! That's funny :)
Poor guy...she only loved his poodle!

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! sparkle. thanx. thats the irony, eh! but even i d love a poodle over a talker as he. lol. ;-)

Erin

LOL!!!
I loved this one Bubbly. You're very talented.

Love Always,
Erin

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! erin. thanx for a lovely comment. it gladdens me no end. lol. ;-)

Gazzavis

Clever and worked for me - I smiled at the end! Just got a bit confused as to who was talking but I did sort this out.

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

hi! gazzavis. just the crazy me at work. but to tell u truly, one of the persons i know at work, is a live example. i changed the setting. and he is in live mode here.

thanx for smiling. and keep smiling. that ll make the world a better place to live in. lol. ;-)

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