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Calamity Man - His first blunder.

Short Story By: half chewed pen
Humor


Driven on by the Idea of doing good!Self proclaimed Super Hero Calamity man sets upon the stage of life and tampers where he feels necessary,unconcerned by where his actions may lead. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Feb 6, 2008    Reads: 43    Comments: 3    Likes: 2   


The mid-day sun of 1895 beat down hard upon the roof tops of Braunau.The Austrian summer was In full swing.The air was aloft with the sounds of nature, its orchestra of birds foliage fauna and insects all dancing wildly to their own melody.
Taking full advantage of the days excellence, a small child with his hands and knees plastered in dirt, played blissfully with sticks and stones In the arid dusty road completely oblivious to the distant rumbling of wheels and the thundering of hooves that now approached.
The driver sat at the reigns. His eyes had given over their trust fully to the two coal black horses that led the way with galloping vigor.With his smiling face held up high basking upon breeze,his nose engaged with the wonderous smells,the blossom and flowers,the freshly scythed grass,the rich twang of fruits,all the captivating perfumes that only natures breath could produce.In complete gratitude he let every minute particle and Vibration anoint his senses.Caught with In so much adornment, that he hadn't heard or seen the peasant womens pleads to stop.
The small child s concentration left its playful arena and was now fixed on the bellowing thick dust cloud that was blasting its way towards him.
The harrowing screams of the horses neighs tore across the land as their internal instincts tried to avoid any collision,their flaying legs flashing the freshly shoed hooves that now drew closer and closer to the small Innocent child s face which was transfixed with absolute terror.The horses fought valiantly but in vain,their legs buckling under the sheer velocity of the now completely out of control cart. Impact was certain,the horses knew It, the driver knew It, the child knew it, some of the Onlookers turned away,unable to witness the carnage.A few peoples eyes were frozen, a look of utter shock on their wan faces.
Up until that point the day had been like many others, even the present incident was acceptable to the common-mans beliefs but what was about to happen next the folk of Braunau still testify that it was beyond belief!
A Flash of pristine white Lycra descended out of the Suns brilliant rays and swooped In with such high speed that only blurs could be perceived.In a fraction of a second the child was now perched out of harms way on a small moss ridden red brick wall,a sense of awe and relief on his little pale face.The two horses were now standing side by side in an adjacent field and were looking at each other the same way a drunk looks at himself in a mirror.The cart was stationary and intact,its cargo and mounts neat and in perfect order and assemblage.The diver sat aboard in his usual space,his hands clasping the sides of his head utterly dumbfounded.With his breath heavy and out of rhythm he gazed around uncertain of what had just happened.
The mother of the child rushed out of the front door and sped across the lawn,she had heard the commotion and witnessed part of the events from the kitchen window.But Her heart would not be convinced of her childs safety until she had him tight in her maternal arms.With Tear stained but thankful eyes she greeted the strange man,who now drifted one meter above the ground towards her with the child held in his taut out-stretched muscular arms.In a genteel manner he Handed over the child to the roars of the now gathered large crowd ,who threw their hats and other bits and bobs into the air in total jubilation.With only his fiery adrenalin junkie glazed eyes and compassionate gleaming white smile visible.The masked hero turned and waved several times to the crowd to another round of ecstatic applause.They had never seen a masked man of his type before.Nor had they ever seen such tight fitting wears and such a muscular physique. And the notion of wearing blue underwear on the outside just seemed too plain ridiculous.And as for a fluttering cape for means of flight,just as the birds might use their wings!This still hadn't yet been fully absorbed or comprehended.But still they were Impressed and so they clapped and roared with all their might.
The mother reached down with her lips and planted a kiss on the forehead of the child' O Aldolf 'she sighed' I love you so much'.She then beckoned the stranger forward and blessed him with a kiss of gratitude on each cheek.'From Mr Hitler And Myself we are In your debt always and forever ' her voice soft but Insistent.The caped crusader winked 'Just doing my job mam' he replied in a brisk manly voice'Just doing my job' and with that he took to the sky to one last crescendo.

The End

In his next adventure, Calamity man joins forces with the public to fight his arch enemy known only as Captain Cosmic Order.A time traveling eccentric ,whose attempts so far to rid the planet of Super hero's and restore the natural balance have failed because of peoples failure to see the bigger picture.

 


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Comments:

OH MY GOD!! LOL, what a shoking surprise ending!!!
you wrote this very well Paul; the discriptive pictures of nature and all. Great reading! you need to write us more stories* is great....katie

Posted: Feb 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks air .I had to tweak it a little after having my wrist slapped by the comment below yours.I also dropped the Moral for a better twist.
It's an very old Idea I had for an Artist friend of mine who draws and loves comics
More stories on there way.At least another two.xxxand then there's the calamity man series(not)lol
success xxx

Wow! I must say that the ending was very interesting. However, the surprise was ruined somewhat by the numerous grammatical and spelling errors. I think that you really need to go over this piece several times and correct the errors. If you are unable to do this, have someone else do it. You are not going to get anywhere if readers have to decipher your writing before they can actually read your stories! I apologize if I come off harsh, but these are just basic things that writers need to do.

Posted: Feb 8, 2008

Author Comment:



You have found my Achilles heel! I truly accept your comment.Good grammar and spelling is a must!
I have been through it a few times now and it has had a bit of a touch up here and there but I am not that good at spotting mistakes.Especially with comers!If you have any further tips/help for me,You can reach me at crystal_ball_paul@yahoo.com
Thank you for time to read and comment on my work .

I absolutely loved the story. The short story genre is probably my favourite and I specially enjoy stories with a twist in the tail and yours has a great one. I try my hand at short stories myself, but somehow find it hard to keep the suspense till the end.

Posted: Sep 30, 2008



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