Meeting Otis (Revise)

This is a book my best friend and I are begining to write. The storyline is about a group of young adults in New York that happen come across an elevator that can travel into multiple dimensions and more importantly take them to their hearts greatest desire, depending who pushes the button. In this particular scene our main female protagonist is standing in front of the elevator for the first time and has a supernatural experience. This is the revised version of my earlier submission. Please feel free to leave any, gentle :), constructive criticism. Thanks.

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