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This poems describes what happens when we stray from the path of a loved one. It's an intense and emotional depiction that makes several references to the Bible, mankind and evolution. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 13, 2008    Reads: 119    Comments: 12    Likes: 8   


Temptation, the evilness of the female anatomy;
Curiosity, the desire to fall head over heels,
The challenge to see how far we can go.
The fruit of love, the giver of birth;
Planting the seedsfor carnation,
Giving the spirit of light to the right to life.
The quest for freedom, an endless journey,
Yet we are trapped in our own doing.
As the rainbow rests over the immeasurable distance,
So too the destiny of one, resting just over the horizon.
Mindlessly, aimlessly trying to reach our goal,
Always looking to strive for better, for more;
Never content with the level of arrogance,
Our ignorance is our murderer.

Temptation, the apple that once fell from the tree,
Falls no more.
The tree is alone, no one is there,
No need to fall to tempt.
The leaves wilt, crumble and depart the tree,
Like a couple breaking up and shattering the hearts,
That once was shared, occupied and loved by the two.
The tree loses its bark, dieing from lesions,
Dieing from loneliness, broken heartedness;
Dieing for love, dieing without love.

Temptation, the ability for one to never be satisfied,
Polygamy or monogamy
Going against nature or with nature.
If we are a part of nature,
Then how we have evolved must be right.
Nature makes everything happen for a reason;
From Neanderthal hunters to civilised Cro-Magnons.
Yet, I don’t see my world as a civilized one,
And temptation ruins the best of me.
Temptation is killing me…
I possess a mind full of sorrow,
An empty heart and a body that is hollow.

Regardless of how many warning signs we get,
We are still blinded from the consequences of temptation.
It feels too late, I feel I can’t survive without her,
My heart sinks every time I think about it.
The ultimate price has been paid,
Fucking temptation got the better of me!
The past is too disturbing and cannot be changed,
I can’t lose her, I won’t lose her.
I don’t want to carry on without her,
The true power of the human spirit is yet to aid me.
I have done wrong, I have learned.
I have prayed, I have changed.
It’s not too late…it’s never too late;
Love Will Prevail!

Written - 11th February 2007


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Wow! Hey Tigerchill, this was some powerful stuff! Excellent poem! I do hope everything worked out for you. Looking forward to reading the rest of your work. Take care MD

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm glad you like it. I was merely expressing what I was feeling at the time. I do have more work that you can check out if you like.

Hey Tigerchill :) This poem is deep and there are so many things to be gleaned from its meaning. The first 2 lines really pulled me in and really set the tone. This is amazing and I can't wait to read more! Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I appreciate your comments. I do have other poems that you can check out.

This is pure beauty! The description above the poem alone, hooked me into it. Very descriptive piece and it contains a lot of meaning. I've never read one of your pieces before, and now I'm so glad to find someone with such great talent! I will defintiely be reading more of your work! Keep it up, you are an exceptional writer. =)
~Maple

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Wow! You are a very kind person to give me such great compliments. I'm new to Booksie so that's probably why you haven't come across my work before, but now that you know me I hope that my style of writing can keep captivating you. Hope you can check out some of my other work. I want to know what your style of writing is so I'll definitely be checking out some of your work as soon as I can. Take it ezi...Tiger.

Very Real. I like Real. It's not fake. Stay real.

Posted: Sep 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Very true. I like true. It's not false. Stay true.

I looooooooooooove this one! Of course it is intelligent, but I love it mostly because it is so true. I can really relate to it! It's also great to see something spiritual yet you are ballsy enough to put strong emotion with it by using a curse word. I am spiritual too but I'm not fake in any way... so if a curse word is needed, so be it. This is fantastic!

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much for commenting on that. I was quite skeptical about using a curse word in a spiritual theme, but I, like you probably, like to tell the story the way I think it should be told. Your comments mean a lot.

The first stanza isn't that good as compared to others. It is very abrupt. Seems to me like you suddenly got this urge and in hurry you just jot it down. The rest is VERY vivid. I am sure everybody else can relate to it too. You know what is one of the best qualities of your poems? they aren't specifically made for you. Very general; almost everybody can relate to them :p

Posted: Sep 17, 2008

Author Comment:

You know what? If you ever wanted to change your career from what you're doing now, you should consider being a critic because your are absolutely spot on my friend! I did write this poem in a hurry, I wanted to jot down on paper exactly what and how I was feeling at that moment in time. Again, your comments are always welcome because they are encouraging and I can learn from them. Thanks mate!

The first stanza was incredible, the others followed suit. Brilliant work.

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks. I appreciate your input, it means a lot. i'm glad you liked it.

I love the imagery, the use of the tree and it's death. It's all so powerful, it just kinda pulls you in. The meter to it made it so smooth and clean, and the depth is just astounding. I didn't really know what to expect from reading the description, but it caught me by line two. It's so easy to relate to, because there is no much in life that we as humans do that we know we should not. It brings so many complex ideas together seamlessly. Fantastic!

Posted: Sep 18, 2008

Author Comment:

That's a wondeful comment, thank you. But I have to ask and I don;t want to sound stupid, but what do you mean when you say 'meter'?

Excellent - I really like it

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I appreciate your comment.

Gave it an 'I like it'. It's definatly an interesting poem... Just trust in God and He'll guide you to what or whom you are supposed to meet and/or be with. =) At least, that's my opinion. =)
~Mandy

Posted: Sep 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanx for voting. I do agree with you opinion and is something I try to do. Thanx again for your comments. Take care.

hi! tiger. this is a beauty. i'm tempted by chocs, cakes, ice creams and what not. were there no temptation, i wonder if attraction'll ever exist. temptation in its negativity is what u write here and that can be destructive to any relationship. u've a way with thoughts. keep it up. lol. ;-)

Posted: Sep 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you, I hope I can keep up the good work so that you may come back and provide me with your invaluable comments.

Fantastic work!

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much!



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