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The day for moving on and 'Leaving Hudson' behind, had arrived. A warm and nostalgic fictionalized memory. Enjoy! View table of contents...
Submitted: Jul 28, 2008 Reads: 176 Comments: 32 Likes: 14
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Ahh, the sweet joys, trials and tribulations of a ten year old. Jerry, you've brought me back to my own childhood. I was "running away" at the ripe old age of 12. What a smart and wonderful mom. Mine was (is) smart too, but decided to do psych me out first, saying, "Go ahead. Leave. But don't come back if you get hungry".
Jerry, this was well written, fun, and very sweet. I enjoyed it so much. And I'm glad I'm the first to comment.
So, how old were you when you tried to run away?
MA
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Hey gerabel :) Like Amber before me, I am in love with the sweet quality of this. If you add your amazing prose skills then this is an amazing story, and it is. I EAGERLY await something new from you! Take care and get writing ;) Regan
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Ohh, Jerry, What a sweet prescious story! :)
awwwww, ^_^
I don't know what else to say except your skills for short stories are soon to become imeasurable. ^_^
~katie
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Wow, great job! I forgot what was the assignment...and forgot to do it. Thanks for the reminder. I liked yours alot and I could identify as well, the memories of our youth...ahh. Not only was it good, but I also have to finish this up so I can go get a banana split. Thanks for sharing, Take Care, Ted
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Hi Ger,
Ah, scenes of Leave it to Beaver or My Three Sons jog thru my memory!
I had the red wagon, Used to tie it to the rear of my clunky old Shwinn bike. Never ran away though.
Nice image of the 10 year old struggliong with a dufflebag half again his height.
Very nice write.
JG
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Wow! This story was a joy to read. Spoken from an innocent child's point of view.. it underlines the value of calmly taken decisions, a virtue we must imbibe in our very childhood.
And who but mothers know the best. I enjoyed their conversation a lot as if i could clearly hear it.
Very nice work!!!
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
This was sooo sweet!!
Though I never tried running away but I used to imagine about running away and starting life afresh!
This was such a beautiful piece and you brought out the innocent of the child so beautifully!
It was amazing...
LOL
~Kritika
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
This is the sweetest story ever.....made me wish someone had stopped me like this the hundred of times I ran away from home. Such a sweet and lovely read Jerry...i love it
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
Jerry, I'm a big fan of titles. Titles are, for me, the first line of any story and the thing that either makes me want to keep reading or...not. "Leaving Hudson" was exactly right. Just a hint, just enough, and the story did the rest.
I love a story where I get pulled in. I'm no longer sitting in front of a computer screen. I'm standing in the driveway, right there with them. I can feel his panic at his mother's voice when he knew he was caught. I can see that little fella wiping the tears with his sleeve, and his mother using her sleeve to retrieve the tissue to make those tears all right. And, I can feel the joy of his mom, after hoping she'd said the right things, looking back when, with his question about Bobby, she knew she had.
The images of little red wagons and oversized duffel bags, characters we all already know, and memories of those long ago days of momentary discontent made this lots of fun to read.
Oh, and did I mention I love the title!!!
Sheryl
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
Jerry, you're easily becoming the best short story writer on the block. If anyone ever suggests to you that you try expanding your stories to novels, DO NOT LISTEN. Writing short stories is a difficult art, made more difficult because one has to convey a huge gamut of emotions and images in a few paragraphs. I'm so glad that you do such a great job of it. I really loved this story. Sweet, sweet, sweet... but not unnecessarily sugary types. Would love to hear more short stories from you.
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
I agree with all your readers above. This poem has an endearing quality, a story to leave us satisfied that life is full of ups and downs but good triumphs. Like Urja I am very fond of the short story genre. I would sooner pick up a good book of short stories than a novel - but that's me.
Posted: Jul 30, 2008
I read this yesterday, but could not write anything here...my eyes were filled with tears and i envisioned my own son and his turmoils in his tiny mind...
What a great Mom she is to understand him and win him over with love and confidence...What else a little one needs...love and warmth and support and lots and lots of understanding...he is indeed lucky to have such a family and parents...
If all the kids have such parents , there will be no more violence but only healthy and wise kids....
Jerry, please write more stories....
can u feel how much i loved this one?? I just adore ur writings more and more with each passing day...
Posted: Jul 30, 2008
sorry sorry forgot to add that 'any day i pick up a short story compilation from a book store and never a novel unless it is classic'...
I just love short stories and so far urs and Dragon fly's and Nixie's have caught my attention so much that i have become addicted to them....lol..
Posted: Jul 30, 2008
Hi Jerry - Great story you have here! It leaves me with a touch of nostalgia for my own childhood. It was very uplifting and I feel better for having read it! I think every child should be so lucky as to have a wise and gentle mother as Evan.
Posted: Jul 31, 2008
When moving, it's hard. A lot of people have faced it before, even me. And it was terribly hard for me.
By the way, what a great read this has come!!
Posted: Aug 1, 2008
beautiful....i absolutely loved :) as always keep writing :) -zia
Posted: Aug 2, 2008
Some postings have not been registering today, I guess, here on Booksie but thank you Carol for reading my work. Cheers...Jerry
Posted: Aug 3, 2008
Hi Jerry,
Thank you so much for this short story, so beautifully written. Other people's work serve so many different purposes: from the pure enjoyment of the piece itself to reminders of one's own life to anger or disgust at the words of another. Your piece took me back to a time when my brother and I ran away (me...for no particular purpose but to follow my brother). We lived on a farm, and my mother, a wise woman, packed us each a lunch as she said that she knew that we'd get hungry; and, gave us extra clothes in case we got really cold at night. We made it to a shed at the bottom of the hill where we played a while, ate the sandwiches and returned home. Our mother never rebuked us or said "I told you so"; she just matter-a-factly welcomed us back and went about her chores. That dear old soul is now almost 92, in a nursing home and has very little recall of most things. I doubt that she will remember that time, but I have thanks to you so that, when I see her next, I will hold her even more tightly and tell her again how much I love her. Thank you for this, Jerry. Love, Annie
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
here go the tears :(
yup that's our Annie.
Jerry reading the two of you got me all choked up.
such a blessing, so endearing
~katie
Posted: Aug 7, 2008
Hey Jerry. Of course I love this one too!! In the beginning I had no idea it was a young boy. I think we all had an urge at one time or another to run away but I never had enough guts!! Keep up the good work!! Looking forward to the next one!! Val
Posted: Aug 8, 2008
nicely written warm felt piece man
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
Jerry, I enjoyed this story so much. It took me back to a different time when things were so innocent.. Man, times have really changed. This story reminds me of leave it to Beaver and Dennis the menace. Thanks for the trip back down memory lane.
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
Hi Jerry a superb write, i agree you are reaching out to being a great short story writer...fantatic realistic story...take care juliet
Posted: Sep 6, 2008
Almost a little too sweet.
I felt the tension was resolved too early in the story.
Posted: Sep 21, 2008
Wonderful short story Jerry!
I notice that it has the imbuing
factor built into it....many
of our new generation of kids
and parents might glean some
skills from this one. It shows
how parent and child relate
to each other in ways that
develop "Respect" for one
another...It also brought back
a memory for me (paragraph 5)
My son had just started 1ST
grade and brought his first
friend home after school..
He introduced me to his friend
by saying "this is my mom, be
very careful around her because
she reads minds"... later that
evening while getting ready for
bed I asked where his idea of
my ability to read minds came
from? he said "because when I
tell a lie you tell me what
happens, so I don't do it anymore"
I quickly decided not touch it
further, so I said "thats right
son and don't you forget it".
I tell you this because it is
in keeping with your story when
the boy asks..How do mothers know?
I loved this post Jerry, looking
forward to more just like it.
Kindest Regards...Manyfacets
Posted: Sep 25, 2008
Jerry:
I like "Leaving Hudson" (title & text) too. When I was eight, one of four siblings at the time, I packed my little suitcase and huffed out of the house. My dad, like the mother in your story, treated my plans seriously and thoughtfully. He persuaded me that taking some provisions would be wise and in the debate over peanut butter and strawberry jam - or would I prefer grape jelly? - I broke down and realized I didn't want to leave such a great dad and burst into tears. He pointed out that it wasn't a decision I had to make just then, helped me unpack and then we ate the sandwiches on the porch swing. Your story made me smile - and miss my dad SO much.
Thanks for the stroll down memory lane.
Mamapolo
Posted: Oct 9, 2008
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