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The day for moving on and 'Leaving Hudson' behind, had arrived. A warm and nostalgic fictionalized memory. Enjoy! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 28, 2008    Reads: 176    Comments: 32    Likes: 14   


Leaving Hudson
By Gerard Lebel
 
 
 
     As I recall, my faded, army green duffel bag was so jam-packed, I had a hard time squeezing in my toothbrush and comb. I had been in this little town of Hudson for far too long and it was high time I was moving on to someplace new. I needed a new place to live and some new friends with new rules, where I could come and go as I pleased with nothing to hold me back and no one to tell me what to do. That day for moving on and leaving Hudson behind, had arrived.
 
     The duffel-bag proved much too heavy for me to carry over my shoulder for any great distance and since I didn’t know how far I would be walking as I didn’t know yet exactly where I was going, I decided to ramshackle the garage to find my old, Radio Flyer, red wagon; the same magical one that had given me so many rides up and down Arlington Street as a young boy. And as I got a little bit older, I had often filled my red wagon with old comic books, traveling the neighborhood, selling and swapping them like my dad, the door-to-door salesman. And now that I was just about all grown up and would be turning ten the following Saturday, it was time for me to leave Hudson for good! No parents to tell me what to do and not do and no big brother bullying me or getting me into trouble anymore.
 
     In the far right corner of the garage, emerging beneath a big bamboo rake, some various, old garden tools and a broken white, rose trellis was a patch of distressed red. Yes, it was my Radio Flyer wagon and it was still in one piece! Excitedly, I pulled it out into the driveway and checked out the wheels to find they were not rusted at all and in general, the wagon was impeccably intact. I lifted the duffel bag into the wagon where it fit perfectly. I remember grabbing the long, black handle and walking nervously to the edge of the driveway. Whew… this was the biggest moment of my life so far. My heart was thumping and pounding against my chest as I began my journey from Hudson to God knows where, pulling my Radio Flyer onto the sidewalk and down the street.
 
     “Hey, now where do you think you’re going, young man?” announced the ear-splitting voice from the front porch.
 
     OH NO!… No.. No… you couldn’t miss mother’s voice anywhere. I was as quiet as a church mouse getting up and dressed. I practically held my breath the whole time I was in the garage so as not to make any noise. How did she find me sneaking off? How did mother always know everything before anybody else? Was there some sort of law that my mother must know everything?
 
     “Hey, young man. I’m speaking to you!. Answer me, Evan,” mother yelled in her frightening tone as I turned around to face her and the music.
 
     “I know, I heard you, mom” I sputtered, hanging my head in defeat tearfully, realizing she had caught me, so it didn‘t matter what I said now. “I’m running away and leaving Hudson. I hate it here. I hate school and I hate my life!”
 
     “Well, I’m sorry to hear that,” mom replied in a much softer, loving voice, “but I think I understand how you feel. I felt that way once when I was your age, Evan.”
 
     “You did?” I said, using my shirtsleeves to wipe away the tears from my cheeks.
 
     Walking over to me and squeezing her arm affectionately around my back and shoulder, she replied;
 
     “Yes, I felt that way once. It’s a natural thing to feel out of place and scared once in a while and especially when picked on by an older brother or sister. Your Auntie Janette would pick on me something terribly, Evan. Why, I remember thinking I hated her, but when I thought it all over and realized how much my family loved me and how much I learned at Sunday School that God loved me and I thought about everything I had to be thankful for and how lucky I was to have a nice, warm home with plenty of food and good friends to play with, those feelings to run away and leave home weren’t so important anymore.”
 
     After a few moments of silence with mom now wiping away the tears still streaking down my cheeks with a rolled up tissue she had tucked under the buttoned down cuff of her blouse, mom continued.
 
     “Hey, I have an idea, Evan. It’s almost lunchtime and I made a great big, glass pitcher of fresh strawberry Kool-Aid a little bit ago and I was going to make us a few hot dogs on toasted rolls with some potato chips. And maybe for dessert, a double hot fudge sundae with chocolate ice cream, a few slices of banana and topped with some fresh whipped cream and nuts. Mmm… doesn’t that sound good?”
 
     “Oh yeah, I had forgotten all about lunch, mom. I hadn’t even packed anything to eat,” I replied with an impish grin.
 
     “Well, why don’t you take your wagon and go for a walk around the block and think about what I’ve said. Your daddy and me and your brother, Todd, love you very much and we would be terribly sad if you didn’t live with us anymore, so before you make a hasty decision about running away, take that little walk around the block to do some thinking and come back for a nice lunch... just you, me and daddy. How does that sound?”
 
     “Well, I guess that sounds okay,” I said smiling and licking my lips as I grabbed the wagon and started down the sidewalk while mom walked up the front porch steps to the house to start preparing lunch. I turned and hollered back to her, “Hey mom… can I stop at Bobby’s and invite him over for lunch too?”
 
     “Sure,” she bellowed happily with a huge, beaming smile, “if you’re sure that’s what you want to do, Evan. We’ll have plenty to eat so invite Bobby over if you’d like to.”
 
     “Okay, great! Oh boy… thanks mom!”
 
     What a morning, I remember thinking to myself as I walked off down the street pulling my Radio Flyer along behind me. How incredibly lucky I was to have a friend like Bobby and a wonderful family; a loving father, a caring brother who was more often than not a jerk but protective of me nonetheless.
 
     And of course last but not least… a beautiful and smart mother, who heard and knew everything… and I mean everything there was to know on this planet earth and beyond…  and who also happened to make the best darn hot dogs and double hot fudge sundaes in the whole entire world!
 
  
  
© Copyright 2008 Gerard Lebel
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Ahh, the sweet joys, trials and tribulations of a ten year old. Jerry, you've brought me back to my own childhood. I was "running away" at the ripe old age of 12. What a smart and wonderful mom. Mine was (is) smart too, but decided to do psych me out first, saying, "Go ahead. Leave. But don't come back if you get hungry".
Jerry, this was well written, fun, and very sweet. I enjoyed it so much. And I'm glad I'm the first to comment.
So, how old were you when you tried to run away?

MA

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

I was 11 when I tried to run away!!! Just so that you know... about 5% of this was based on fact and 95% was purely fiction! I'm so happy that you liked my little story. I had fun writing it. I know romance and mystery thrillers is what sells and gets the big reads but I enjoy writing these sweet little stories onece in a while. And besides... unlike some on Booksie... I don't write to try and get the most amount of comments on Booksie! I write purely for the love of it and to share my ideas and whatever skill I may have with the world!!!

Thanks MA, for the "wonder-full" comment.....Jerry

Hey gerabel :) Like Amber before me, I am in love with the sweet quality of this. If you add your amazing prose skills then this is an amazing story, and it is. I EAGERLY await something new from you! Take care and get writing ;) Regan

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey Regan... so glad that you liked my short story. Thanks for reading my work and taking the time to leave such a nice comment. Happy days.....Jerry

Ohh, Jerry, What a sweet prescious story! :)
awwwww, ^_^
I don't know what else to say except your skills for short stories are soon to become imeasurable. ^_^
~katie

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh thanks, Katie for reading my short story... I know you prefer to read poetry so it means a little extra that you took the time to read and comment so nicely!! I'm happy that you found it to your liking. Peace and love.....Jerry

Wow, great job! I forgot what was the assignment...and forgot to do it. Thanks for the reminder. I liked yours alot and I could identify as well, the memories of our youth...ahh. Not only was it good, but I also have to finish this up so I can go get a banana split. Thanks for sharing, Take Care, Ted

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Ted... so glad that you liked my short story. The assignment was, "Where do you think you're going?". I had fun writing this... about 5% of it based on fact but 95% is purely fiction. Thanks for the read and lovely comment.....Jerry (^_^)

Hi Ger,
Ah, scenes of Leave it to Beaver or My Three Sons jog thru my memory!
I had the red wagon, Used to tie it to the rear of my clunky old Shwinn bike. Never ran away though.
Nice image of the 10 year old struggliong with a dufflebag half again his height.

Very nice write.

JG

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello! Hello! Long time no hear, James! I think most of us boys way back when had a red wagon if I'm not mistaken. It was fun writing and remembering different episodes in my life although this story was 95% fiction. I'm so happy that you enjoyed the read and thanks again for taking the time to leave such a great comment. Happy days, James.....Jerry

Wow! This story was a joy to read. Spoken from an innocent child's point of view.. it underlines the value of calmly taken decisions, a virtue we must imbibe in our very childhood.

And who but mothers know the best. I enjoyed their conversation a lot as if i could clearly hear it.

Very nice work!!!

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

Author Comment:

Gee... thank you Carnation for a "wonder-full" comment!! I'm happy that you found joy in the reading and enjoyed the mother/son conversation. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my work. It means the world to me.....Jerry

This was sooo sweet!!
Though I never tried running away but I used to imagine about running away and starting life afresh!

This was such a beautiful piece and you brought out the innocent of the child so beautifully!


It was amazing...

LOL

~Kritika

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much, Kritika! I am happy that you enjoyed reading my short story and a special thanks for taking the time to leave a great comment to let me and everyone else know that you know that you liked it!! Peace.....Jerry

This is the sweetest story ever.....made me wish someone had stopped me like this the hundred of times I ran away from home. Such a sweet and lovely read Jerry...i love it

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Deb... so wonderful to hear from you! I'm overjoyed that you liked my little short story. I'm glad you felt the sweetness of the story as that was my intention.

I have been working on several short stories and fallen terribly behind on my reading. I will have to check out your portfolio to see if you have anything new up. Forgive me if I haven't commented recently. Thanks for being such a good Booksie buddy.....Jerry

Jerry, I'm a big fan of titles. Titles are, for me, the first line of any story and the thing that either makes me want to keep reading or...not. "Leaving Hudson" was exactly right. Just a hint, just enough, and the story did the rest.

I love a story where I get pulled in. I'm no longer sitting in front of a computer screen. I'm standing in the driveway, right there with them. I can feel his panic at his mother's voice when he knew he was caught. I can see that little fella wiping the tears with his sleeve, and his mother using her sleeve to retrieve the tissue to make those tears all right. And, I can feel the joy of his mom, after hoping she'd said the right things, looking back when, with his question about Bobby, she knew she had.

The images of little red wagons and oversized duffel bags, characters we all already know, and memories of those long ago days of momentary discontent made this lots of fun to read.

Oh, and did I mention I love the title!!!
Sheryl

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

What a tremendous and beautifully written somment, Sheryl!! Just about the best comment I've ever received!

I'm exactly like you... a BIG fan of titles and I try desperately to title all my pieces a certain way so that I know it would entice me to read the story or poem and hopefully others. I thought "Leaving Hudson" gave just the right hint.

Thank you so very much for reading my work and taking the time again to leave such a G_R-E-A-T comment!! I'm happy we have become Booksie friends!.....Jerry (^_^)

Jerry, you're easily becoming the best short story writer on the block. If anyone ever suggests to you that you try expanding your stories to novels, DO NOT LISTEN. Writing short stories is a difficult art, made more difficult because one has to convey a huge gamut of emotions and images in a few paragraphs. I'm so glad that you do such a great job of it. I really loved this story. Sweet, sweet, sweet... but not unnecessarily sugary types. Would love to hear more short stories from you.

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

Gee, thank you for such a "wonder-full" comment, Urja! You've made my day!! Many have suggested I expand some of my short stories into novels but I agree with you. I may start work on a novel one of these days but I'll know that from the start and will write accordingly.

If you look in my portfolio of features writing, you'll find three or four short stories you probably haven't read. I suggest "FALL FROM GRACE" if you're in the mood for a little chuckle!!

Happy days.....Jerry

I agree with all your readers above. This poem has an endearing quality, a story to leave us satisfied that life is full of ups and downs but good triumphs. Like Urja I am very fond of the short story genre. I would sooner pick up a good book of short stories than a novel - but that's me.

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm so happy that you enjoyed my short story and found it endearing, Anna! Again, I thank you for reading my work and for the lovely comment. I also most enjoy the short story genre and enjoy writing them. Peace and joy.....Jerry

I read this yesterday, but could not write anything here...my eyes were filled with tears and i envisioned my own son and his turmoils in his tiny mind...

What a great Mom she is to understand him and win him over with love and confidence...What else a little one needs...love and warmth and support and lots and lots of understanding...he is indeed lucky to have such a family and parents...

If all the kids have such parents , there will be no more violence but only healthy and wise kids....

Jerry, please write more stories....
can u feel how much i loved this one?? I just adore ur writings more and more with each passing day...

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Awww... what a sweet, lovely comment, Pratibha!! I am so very happy that you enjoy my writing and take the time to read and comment so lovingly. Wishing you Peace and love.....Jerry

sorry sorry forgot to add that 'any day i pick up a short story compilation from a book store and never a novel unless it is classic'...

I just love short stories and so far urs and Dragon fly's and Nixie's have caught my attention so much that i have become addicted to them....lol..

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh wow... I am overjoyed for you to put me in such fine company as Dragonfly and Nixie. I'm happy that you enjoy my writing so much. I'm sure you could be addicted to much worse things than short stories!!! LOL

Happy days.....Jerry

Hi Jerry - Great story you have here! It leaves me with a touch of nostalgia for my own childhood. It was very uplifting and I feel better for having read it! I think every child should be so lucky as to have a wise and gentle mother as Evan.

Posted: Jul 31, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much BC, for reading and commenting so nicely!! I'm glad you enjoyed my short story and that you found it uplifting.

Happy days.....Jerry

When moving, it's hard. A lot of people have faced it before, even me. And it was terribly hard for me.
By the way, what a great read this has come!!

Posted: Aug 1, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks very much for reading my work and for taking the time to leave a comment. Glad it was a great read for you!!!
Happy Days.....Jerry

beautiful....i absolutely loved :) as always keep writing :) -zia

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm so happy that you thought my short story was beautiful! Thank you very much, Zia, for reading my work and for the lovely comment. Happy days.....Jerry

Some postings have not been registering today, I guess, here on Booksie but thank you Carol for reading my work. Cheers...Jerry

Posted: Aug 3, 2008

Hi Jerry,
Thank you so much for this short story, so beautifully written. Other people's work serve so many different purposes: from the pure enjoyment of the piece itself to reminders of one's own life to anger or disgust at the words of another. Your piece took me back to a time when my brother and I ran away (me...for no particular purpose but to follow my brother). We lived on a farm, and my mother, a wise woman, packed us each a lunch as she said that she knew that we'd get hungry; and, gave us extra clothes in case we got really cold at night. We made it to a shed at the bottom of the hill where we played a while, ate the sandwiches and returned home. Our mother never rebuked us or said "I told you so"; she just matter-a-factly welcomed us back and went about her chores. That dear old soul is now almost 92, in a nursing home and has very little recall of most things. I doubt that she will remember that time, but I have thanks to you so that, when I see her next, I will hold her even more tightly and tell her again how much I love her. Thank you for this, Jerry. Love, Annie

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Annie... your words have brought tears to my eyes. So wonderful to hear from you!! Thank you for reading "Leavng Hudson" and for your beautiful words in comment. I'm thrilled that it brought you back to a time in your life that you enjoyed remembering.

When you see your mother next, please give her an extra little hug for me. Your words have brought memories of my beautiful mother back again who I lost more than 20 years ago.

Thanks again for taking the time to read my story and for sharing your thoughts and feelings. Happy days.....Jerry

here go the tears :(
yup that's our Annie.
Jerry reading the two of you got me all choked up.
such a blessing, so endearing
~katie

Posted: Aug 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh Katie... didn't mean to make you cry!! But they are actually touching and feel good tears because they are born out of love for another. Annie's words were so loving and special.

I meantalso to direct you to a new poem that she has up titled:
"Curfew in the Land of Sad Oranges"

It is quite simply a beautiful poem she has written.

Jerry

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Hey Jerry. Of course I love this one too!! In the beginning I had no idea it was a young boy. I think we all had an urge at one time or another to run away but I never had enough guts!! Keep up the good work!! Looking forward to the next one!! Val

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much Val for reading my story and for the lovely comment!! Peace and Love.....Jerry

nicely written warm felt piece man

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment so nicely on my short story, 'Leaving Hudson'. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.

Happy days.....Jerry

Jerry, I enjoyed this story so much. It took me back to a different time when things were so innocent.. Man, times have really changed. This story reminds me of leave it to Beaver and Dennis the menace. Thanks for the trip back down memory lane.

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

I'm very happy that you enjoyed "Leaving Hudson". Thanks for reading my work and for the wonderful comment. Times certainly have changed since those days of old when 'running away' was an innocent little game that most children attempted to play at one time or another! Glad it brought back some pleasant memories for you.

Happy days.....Jerry

Hi Jerry a superb write, i agree you are reaching out to being a great short story writer...fantatic realistic story...take care juliet

Posted: Sep 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Juliet... So nice to hear from you!! Thanks for the lovely comment. Glad that you enjoyed Leaving Hudson!

Be well........................Jerry

Almost a little too sweet.

I felt the tension was resolved too early in the story.

Posted: Sep 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah... resolving the tension early is a problem with a 'short short story' when you must keep it under 1200 words for either a contest or a writing group assignment. Glad you discovered the old fashioned sweetness in it though!

Happy writing.....Jerry

Wonderful short story Jerry!
I notice that it has the imbuing
factor built into it....many
of our new generation of kids
and parents might glean some
skills from this one. It shows
how parent and child relate
to each other in ways that
develop "Respect" for one
another...It also brought back
a memory for me (paragraph 5)

My son had just started 1ST
grade and brought his first
friend home after school..
He introduced me to his friend
by saying "this is my mom, be
very careful around her because
she reads minds"... later that
evening while getting ready for
bed I asked where his idea of
my ability to read minds came
from? he said "because when I
tell a lie you tell me what
happens, so I don't do it anymore"
I quickly decided not touch it
further, so I said "thats right
son and don't you forget it".
I tell you this because it is
in keeping with your story when
the boy asks..How do mothers know?
I loved this post Jerry, looking
forward to more just like it.
Kindest Regards...Manyfacets

Posted: Sep 25, 2008

Author Comment:

You should write a little story based on the incident with your son that you mentioned in your comment!! I'm very happy that you liked my short story. Thanks again from the heart for taking the time to read and comment on so much of my work. It really does mean the world to me.

Many blessings.....Jerry

Jerry:

I like "Leaving Hudson" (title & text) too. When I was eight, one of four siblings at the time, I packed my little suitcase and huffed out of the house. My dad, like the mother in your story, treated my plans seriously and thoughtfully. He persuaded me that taking some provisions would be wise and in the debate over peanut butter and strawberry jam - or would I prefer grape jelly? - I broke down and realized I didn't want to leave such a great dad and burst into tears. He pointed out that it wasn't a decision I had to make just then, helped me unpack and then we ate the sandwiches on the porch swing. Your story made me smile - and miss my dad SO much.

Thanks for the stroll down memory lane.

Mamapolo

Posted: Oct 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello Mamapolo... I was very happy to receive your comment to find that you read "Leaving Hudson" and enjoyed the write. Thank you for that and for sharing your little story as well. I'm happy that my story gave you a stroll down memory lane.

Happy days.....Jerry



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